Belmont Village

Belmont wallows in westering twilight, 
sheep graze in cold pastures, 
hares scamper, ignoring 
a circling hawk.

Blackpool's urban sprawl crawls off 
up to the scarred horizon, the Tower 
pricks the heavens like a syringe 
and spills the blood-red sun.

Evening falls, I'm all alone
and free to stare, a wondrous, 
star-flecked firmament,
a phosphorescent flare!
Copyright © | Year Posted 2009

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Joe Avatar
April 30, 2009 at 7:59 AM
Keith, a wonderful portrait. I particularly find that the use for the second stanza is to create a division within the narrative. You pull that off very well and with a great deal of skill. The music in this gives the piece a mobile feeling. The dominance of 'suh' sounds (c,s, z) in the first stanza and the dominance of 's' in the second link well into the 'f' sounds (rather passive) in the third stanza. Great poem mate!
Strand Avatar
April 30, 2009 at 7:53 AM
Amazing imagery Keith in this fione work.Rgds Brian
Esquire Avatar
April 29, 2009 at 10:42 PM
Dear Keith,When one starts reading YOU Artful POETRY they can not stop Another Excellent WRITE Thank-YOU for YOUR many Gracious Comments ALWAYS...HG
Mckenzie Avatar
April 29, 2009 at 3:11 PM
I love the way you expressed the heavens blood-red the whole write was interesting I enjoyed it! Smile! Laura :)
Richards Avatar
April 29, 2009 at 8:03 AM
Wonderful descriptions....standing alone, staring at the evening sky....loved this! ~
Kroeger Avatar
April 29, 2009 at 7:54 AM
Wow! lovely ! I like it. Thanks for the Kind comments!
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