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The bamboo drifts in tainted strands gathering mist, out to the sky-- a balmy tree where our restful arms entwine that soon... stars ebb and glimmer far like kisses fierce, then gently tossed into many decades of moonlight and gust. In the last of winter's flakes, pale shadows came for you unannounced--- I bled, agonized on piles of shattered ice homeless within our cozy room...where are you? And swallows reel across the tracks my breathing low, engraved with sighs upon dim tears and gentle rain ; this need to grow old with you undone: I lean on that pliable bamboo As aging years become—cold, listless While birdsong’s hymn remind me... How lovely your eyes are, asleep. .......................... Song I - Cold - Quiet Now Contest For Rob Carmack 9/3/2020

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Date: 9/23/2020 9:32:00 PM
Great imagery and feelings, Nette, congratulations on your win.
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Date: 9/23/2020 9:05:00 PM
A sadness felt from the first line well expressed... Congrats on your top win.
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Date: 9/23/2020 6:32:00 PM
This is such a lovely, poignant write, Nette. CONGRATS on your well-deserved win. Janice
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Date: 9/23/2020 5:56:00 PM
Hi Nette. Congratulations on your memorable Win! Bamboo analogy is beautiful, demonstrating our need to bend with change, remaining resilient. Overall tone of melancholy and reflection permiates through. A very poinant piece, - well deserved high placement.
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Date: 9/23/2020 5:17:00 PM
Your style resonates in perfect balance. Congrats and thanks.
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Date: 9/4/2020 10:46:00 AM
Intensely worded with subtle impressions of melancholia and longing.
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Date: 9/3/2020 1:29:00 PM
Well written Nette, loneliness is not a nice place to be, especially when you lose your soul mate. Tom
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