Being a Woman First

When she came to a foreign land,
people failed to understand,
she wasn’t a pawn under a man’s command,
it was tradition,
she had to wear a hood in public,
even though it was difficult for recognition,
her face hidden in shadow,
and that’s wherever she’d go,
only the faint glint,
a slight hint,
of her beautiful brown eyes,
seemed to come alive,
and as a shadow she would glide,
not lose a stride,
filled with honor and filled with pride,
her beauty going undetected in one direction,
she spoke softly and nodded,
while some people would stare,
and others would even glare,
but she never had a fake grin on her face,
feigning indifference was a disgrace,
but not to her,
she liked people in general,
she loved to talk,
as she held her head up and continued her walk,
everywhere she went it was the same,
it was God she loved, and life she thirst,
but she felt no shame,
in being a woman first.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2009



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Date: 8/15/2011 8:54:00 AM
Anyway, great write :)
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Date: 8/15/2011 8:53:00 AM
I love reading comments people leave, realizing that everyone can take such different meaning from the same poem. I personally read it as the story of a muslim woman who is veiled, but that is because I am living in the middle east so that is how my mind relates. I love how the woman was not a pawn under man's command, that it was tradition and that she was filled with honor and pride. Too often, people impose their own personal feelings on those who choose to veil and view them as repressed.
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Date: 4/23/2009 10:24:00 PM
face covered-made me think of a muslim,then this made me think of a woman hiding her identity,of royalties or stars hiding who they are,then it made me think of a simple woman,face covered but she made it to the foreign land,isee amysterious woman here with lot to say,and yes she talks;-)she loved God-never faking a grin-remarkable woman frank,life she thirst-give her water;-)----wonderful write,so talented my friend---charma
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Date: 4/23/2009 9:17:00 PM
What an elegant portrait of an intriguing woman, Frank. You have a gift for capturing the female spirit.
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Date: 4/23/2009 10:43:00 AM
A life like hers...in such contrast to the rest of us...so hard for us to understand, but your insight, the look behind the veil, is moving. ~
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Date: 4/23/2009 6:22:00 AM
It is very difficult to understand another's customs. At Disney I once say a man, woman and two children. She was dressed in full burqa with the screen. It was probably 98* and the material was heavy. I was facinated with her so I followed her. She walked behind and never joined in conversation and on most occassions when drinks were bought she did not have one. I didnt enjoy the rest of the day.
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Date: 4/23/2009 5:10:00 AM
this is absoutley stunning. i will defintely be rading more of your work.
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Date: 4/23/2009 4:55:00 AM
This is some of your best work Frankie..love the way you took me into this and show us the woman then let us understand her first love..so well done.
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