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He scorns all these young potheads and their habits. He vows he’d never do a thing like that. He pours himself a glass of amber liquid, Locates his keys and dons his tattered hat. He drives down the street a little over legal, He surely doesn’t want to check in late. The light turns red just as he gets right to it, He drives on through, he hasn’t time to wait. He’s just a good old boy and steady worker. His boss depends on him, he’s told him so. He is admired by all his fellow workers. Although he drinks a bit, it doesn’t show. He carries a big lunch pail and a thermos And counts the hours as they go slowly by. It’s not so much he’s hungry, but he’s thirsty, When a man works hard, he gets a little dry. The afternoon goes slower than the morning. It seems the hours grow longer every day. He’s thinking of the tavern on the corner. He always stops in there to cash his pay. His dried out supper doesn’t even tempt him He tells his wife, “No man can eat this slop.” Just to be sure she understands the message He throws it on the floor, “Now get the mop.” As she bends down to try to mop the juices Before they run across her nice clean floor, He gives her a small nudge with his sharp boot tip, And warns her if she hollers, she’ll get more. Next morning he awakens with the daybreak, In good humor and no memory of the night. His wife shrugs off his hug and keeps on sleeping, And he feels a bit rejected at the slight. On the TV, cops arrest a drunken driver As he’s filling up his thermos at the sink. He shakes his head and says “It is a pity. A guy who cannot hold his ‘likker’, shouldn’t drink.” I consider this my best twisted poem because I was trying to show the twisted thinking of the individual in the poem and how we do not see ourselves as we truly are.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2011




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Date: 3/23/2013 8:30:00 PM
Joyce, this is different for you and I am happy to see it again on a winners' list. Congrats!!
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Date: 3/23/2013 5:26:00 PM
Joyce, :-) Congratulations ~ Thanks for supporting my "descriptive poem" contest. Always yours truly* Linda
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Date: 9/28/2011 8:16:00 PM
You sure nailed it Joyce and in a very lady-like way! Congrad's on your win! Light & Love
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Date: 9/28/2011 8:14:00 AM
Dear Joyce, I'm here to give all my old contest winners a late congratulations. Sorry, I forgot to leave everyone a thank you *comment* of appreciation~ I hope you don't mind my copy paste congratulations.. Don't worry I have read every entry more than 3 times. lol. or how else would have I closed it with out reading. Can you accept my apology and old congrats on your poem.. Honestly I don't like my contest winners with out a quick congrats,.. thank you,..p.d. the late bloomer
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Date: 9/24/2011 10:52:00 PM
wow, you really nailed your message at the end of this one, Joyce. GREAT job for the twisted contest. Luv, Andrea
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Date: 9/24/2011 6:13:00 PM
Congrats Joyce on another grand win my friend with this dazzling delight of twisted poetry... unique one..
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Date: 9/24/2011 5:44:00 PM
Congratulations on your win with your twisted poetry Joyce. Love, Carol
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Date: 9/24/2011 10:43:00 AM
This is a wonderful write Joyce. It certainly portrays your message. Every once in a while you read a poem you wish you had written. This is one of them. Congratulations
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Date: 9/24/2011 4:38:00 AM
Congratulations on the win in the contest of P.D., Joyce
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Date: 1/15/2011 2:20:00 PM
Congratulations on the well deserved win in the contest, Joyce
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Date: 1/14/2011 4:15:00 AM
Congratulations on your win Joyce in Paula Swanson's contest "Not As It Seems". Love, Carol
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Date: 1/10/2011 5:46:00 PM
I was so sure this would be a winning poem....so glad to see it is !!!!!!
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Date: 1/10/2011 5:25:00 PM
Congrats Joyce on your super success in Paula's contest with this exciting entry my friend.. enjoy another top ten win with luv..
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Date: 1/9/2011 2:41:00 PM
wow, joyce, I LOVE how you showed a human fraility, all too common, with THIS one. YOu did it JUST RIGHT so I expect to see it high. I don't suppose my Greed sonnet fit her description of how she wanted the contest done. I found it a difficult topic to address. But yours is one of the best I have seen. LUv ,Andrea
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Date: 1/9/2011 12:17:00 PM
Oh wow! Joyce, this is amazing! Your poems are always beautiful and interesting! A mutual friend and I were just discussing them the other night and we love your work! Thanks for inspiring us with all your poems! Much love, Audrey
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Date: 1/9/2011 5:24:00 AM
Reads like a winner..The truth that touches on many lives in the whole world for sure..Sad that this should be but truth says that it is..I am glad that I chose this one to read this morn..Good luck in the contest...Your presence at my blog lightened my morn..Our daughter, Phyllis is going to Atlanta this morning to bring our son home to get ahead of the possible storm..Sara
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Date: 1/9/2011 2:06:00 AM
Human frailty well depicted,Joyce.Fine poetry with sweet lines.Thank you for congratulating me.
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Date: 1/8/2011 6:01:00 PM
Very good poem...good luck in the contest...Jimmy
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Date: 1/8/2011 3:57:00 PM
This could be anyone we know....a neighbor, perhaps someone who sits next to us in church, or the friendly guy that waves from across the street. We never know who is "not what they seem" ...it would be surprising I'm sure, to know what happens behind closed doors. Well done, Joyce! love, Carrie
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Date: 1/8/2011 1:25:00 PM
People who live in glass houses shouldn't cast stones -- that's the first thing that came to my mind. I have a friend who drinks all the time and doesn't remember what he said or did the next morning. The way this man treats his wife is despicable, Joyce. Some people are "functional alcoholics" and few know their secrets. It could very well have been this man that was arrested for drunk driving. Excellent take on the "Not as it Seems" contest. Wishing you success, dear. Love, Carolyn
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Date: 1/8/2011 12:18:00 PM
Very good, so true... always Michael
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