Behind His Knowing Eyes Premiere Contest Winner

While in the moonlit night he stood, his crew below asleep, the captain gazed with knowing eyes upon the ocean deep. A sinister tranquility was fleeing in the path of moaning wind grown resolute in showing forth its wrath. The moon, a pale pearl paradox, stared calmly down at him. Then angry clouds obscured its face and everything was dim. Behind the captain’s knowing eyes, his thoughts had grown astray. They took him to another place where once he used to play. He stood among the acres of unmoving solid ground, where waves became tall stalks of grain the wind blew all around. The first of many undulations crashed onto the ship. He pictured rippling golden wheat and felt his vessel dip. The men, awakened, clamored now. He prayed their deaths be swift and gripped the wheel to navigate a ghastly forceful lift. Imagining hot prairie sun, he viewed the huge cold swell that came to bury them. . . and closed those eyes that knew too well. Written years before it was posted here at Soup on 6/6/2010 Submitted 8/26/2022 for Mark Toney's 2022 Poetry Marathon Mile 13 Poetry Contest

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Date: 9/20/2022 5:23:00 PM
arg, I thought I had left you a comment and congrats here but now I see I hadn't. An exquisite display of rhyme and meter, and story telling of the highest caliber. Big congrats for your #1 win, my friend!
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Date: 9/16/2022 9:57:00 AM
Andrea, congratulations on your top win! You have masterfully told this sad yet dynamic story - dynamic as the storm wave that sank the ship. It is gripping from beginning to end. Wonderfully written.
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Date: 9/13/2022 1:05:00 AM
Wow! What a fantastic piece of gripping and emotive poetry, Andrea. I loved it and it's not hard to see why Mark placed it top of the list. I haven't written poetry for months now but this has ignited my love of the art. Congratulations.
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Date: 9/12/2022 10:41:00 AM
Dear Andrea, your poem is so beautifully written and rolls off the tongue with the rhythm of the sea. Expressive and impressive, my friend. So many great phrases framing gripping imagery. Congratulations for your excellent trophy win in Mark’s contest. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
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Date: 9/12/2022 9:59:00 AM
Andrea, a wonderful poem and congratulations on your top win, blessings ~
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Date: 9/12/2022 7:22:00 AM
Congrats, Andrea. I could visualize that ship on the troubled sea. Nice work, my friend. Blessings always.
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Date: 9/12/2022 6:31:00 AM
Just simply brilliant - I just love it, too. Awesome write and wonderful win. Congrats to you and God bless you too. Love, Gina
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 9/16/2022 8:16:00 PM
I went to comment on your latest poem and my comment won't go through, so I hope you see it here: More of your inspirational verse, Regina. you will have a book two in no time. Love ya!!
Date: 9/12/2022 1:19:00 AM
Wow.... ! Beautiful ! Hearty Congratulations, Andrea on your trophy win!
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Date: 9/11/2022 8:20:00 PM
Wow! Indeed, his eyes knew well. Beautiful writing. Congratulations!
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Date: 9/11/2022 8:18:00 PM
A fave for sure! Congrats on your trophy win, Andrea ~ this poem is a masterpiece!
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 9/12/2022 7:43:00 AM
thanks for the high praise!
Date: 9/11/2022 7:50:00 PM
Andrea, great title, and the lines "navigate a ghastly forceful lift" and "he viewed the huge cold swell that came to bury them ..." reminded me of "The Perfect Storm". When I was younger, I always wished I could sail a tall ship across the ocean. Now, not so much! Congratulations on your first-place finish on Mile 13 of my 2022 Poetry Marathon Contest. Keep your running shoes on, because Mile 14 has already started.
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 9/11/2022 8:13:00 PM
wow, I am so happily amazed, Mark. This is one of my most beloved poems I wrote many years ago, and I always wished more people would see it. Thanks so much for a trophy win on it.
Date: 9/11/2022 7:11:00 PM
June 7th 2010 i set eyes and commented, on this Titanic effort, love it then as i do now, and a well deserved first place in the marathon. Congratulations Andrea.
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 9/11/2022 8:14:00 PM
thanks so much, Harry. Just think, you saw it 12 whole years ago!!
Date: 3/19/2018 10:22:00 AM
The Perfect Storm...Congratulations
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Date: 3/2/2018 7:30:00 PM
Wow - what a grand tale so well delivered. Awesome write, no wonder it's your favourite. Congrats on your winning poem, Andrea.
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Date: 2/28/2018 8:04:00 PM
Such beauty in the content, rhythm and rhyme of your amazing poem Andrea. A captivating write wonderfully expressed with your stunning imagery and flow.. congratulations on your excellent win!
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Date: 2/28/2018 6:00:00 PM
Nicely done, Andrea, congratulations on your win.
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Date: 2/28/2018 3:23:00 PM
Sorry it took me this long to read this one Andrea, I can see why it's your favorite, congratulations...
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Date: 2/28/2018 11:01:00 AM
smooth and great imagery, loved this sweet lady :) thank you and congrats on your placement :)-luloo
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Date: 9/12/2016 11:55:00 AM
Congrats Andrea: I remember this one.....powerful write. SuZ
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Date: 9/12/2016 8:21:00 AM
Congrats on your top placement Andrea.
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Date: 9/10/2016 11:54:00 AM
How blessed I am that this poem was refreshed. It is sooooo deserving of 1st place and was an absolute pleasure to read. I loved how you wrote each stanza, how poetically drawn in I was by your pen. A WOW ... CayCay
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Date: 9/9/2016 10:55:00 AM
Great, Andrea; but, I was waiting for the whale -- Moby-Dick, to be exact! Congrats on your well-written # 1 win. :-)
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Date: 9/9/2016 8:35:00 AM
Such a great poem, Andrea:) Congratulations on your win:)
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Date: 9/8/2016 12:24:00 PM
Congratulations on your win, Andrea. What a marvelous poem!
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Date: 9/8/2016 11:45:00 AM
I raced sailboats around Lake Ontario for many years. This poem invokes the emotions I have felt when facing natures fury in a small boat. Love everything about this piece! Congratulations! ...Fran
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