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Behind Closed Doors

On their wedding day
Carried across the threshold
Now nursery door is closed
Mother softly sobbing
Her newborn baby was stillborn

Such a sad sad sight 
Peeling paint, broken hinges
Couldn’t bear the memories
They had to move away
Crumbling relics of times gone by

Jan Allison
16th July 2014
Written for Door to a Wayra Contest Sponsored By Nette Onclaud
~Awarded 4th Place ~

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Poet Destroyer A Date: 8/20/2014 10:11:00 AM Thank you Login to Reply

Poet Destroyer A Date: 8/6/2014 10:46:00 PM ALWAYS, ENJOY HEARING FROM YOU Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 8/7/2014 3:09:00 AM Likewise Linda it is always a pleasure to see your beautiful smile:-) Hugs Jan xx

Poet Destroyer A Date: 7/29/2014 12:44:00 PM Jan, Congratulations, on making Nette's winning list. She's a tough judge. Take Care, LINDA :) Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 7/29/2014 7:28:00 PM I adore Nette's contests and always strive to do my best in them Linda:-) hugs jan xx

Nette Onclaud Date: 7/25/2014 2:23:00 PM a most sensitive write that takes me there, jan.. your fabulous win in my contest gladdens me.. congrats and huggs Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 7/25/2014 3:36:00 PM Nette I am always so glad when i get placed in your contests - the new forms you find for us are always a challenge and I try my best to get it right. i was so pleased to be placed with this poem it means a lot to me. Jan xx

Dr. Upma A. Sharma Date: 7/25/2014 5:56:00 AM And back again wid huge congrats Jan on this winsome write ! Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 7/25/2014 5:59:00 AM Hi Dr Sharma thanks so much for the lovely comment. Hugs Jan xx

Andrea Dietrich Date: 7/24/2014 7:23:00 PM Poignant is a good word for this gem. Congrats on your fine win, Jan. Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 7/25/2014 2:00:00 AM Thanks Andrea even now i can still see the picture in my mind it was superb inspiration. Hugs jan xxx

David Mohn Date: 7/24/2014 4:00:00 PM Very well written and poignant Jan, wonderful...I entered as well but forgot the date...I must be getting old :) Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 7/24/2014 4:02:00 PM Thanks for dropping by David - i enter the contests then forget about it and get a shock when congrats mails appear and Ive been placed which is always a great boost. Hugs jan xx

Casarah Nance Date: 7/24/2014 4:00:00 PM Wohoo way to go on your sweeet win sweetheart :) Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 7/24/2014 4:01:00 PM Thanks Casarah for dropping by. Hugs jan xx

Reason A. Poteet Date: 7/24/2014 11:39:00 AM You added a great variety to Nette's wayra challenge with this sad piece. Congratulations on your win. PS thanks for the read and recognition of my own entry. I appreciate your time. Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 7/24/2014 12:16:00 PM Thanks for dropping by and commenting on my peom. i do try and comment on all the winning poems :-) Hugs Jan xx

Barbara Gorelick Date: 7/24/2014 11:15:00 AM Good for you! A nice placement with this sad poem. BG Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 7/24/2014 12:16:00 PM Thanks for dropping by Barbara. Hugs jan xx

Robert Lindley Date: 7/24/2014 9:53:00 AM A great write, a sad message. All so finely written in a very short poem!! You touch the reader's heart deeply with this fine write my friend! BBBBBBBRRRAAVVVOOOO!!!!!!! Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 7/24/2014 9:55:00 AM Thanks so much for the lovely comment Robert. Hugs Jan xxx

Sara Kendrick Date: 7/24/2014 9:44:00 AM I may copy and paste congrats but I have read your work and find its quality very good..Sara Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 7/24/2014 9:54:00 AM Thanks so much for the personal comment Sara it is much appreciated! Hugs Jan xxx

Carrie Richards Date: 7/24/2014 9:38:00 AM Wow......you have told a complete story, in so few lines, and such a sad twist to this contest. Well done, Jan! Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 7/24/2014 9:41:00 AM Thanks Carrie. Hugs Jan xxx

Dr.Ram Mehta Date: 7/24/2014 6:11:00 AM Very sad and tragic theme, congrats on the win, Jan Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 7/24/2014 6:17:00 AM Thanks for the lovely comment Dr Mehta. Hugs Jan xx

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser Date: 7/24/2014 5:51:00 AM Tragic and so sad Jan however despite such we must move on and gang on.. Congratulations ! Hugs,.:) Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 7/24/2014 6:17:00 AM Oh I didn't know it had been judged! Thanks for the lovely comment. Hugs Jan xx

Robert Nehls Date: 7/19/2014 5:05:00 AM Very well expressed, Jan, and so sad. Sometimes I guess the best thing to do is to remove ourselves from such vivid reminders that are causing so much sadness. masterfully written and I agree that this is a 7. Bless you my dear... Robert. Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 7/19/2014 7:00:00 AM Thanks for the lovely understanding comment Robert. Hugs Jan xxx

Vera Duggan Date: 7/16/2014 7:32:00 PM Love this one Jan, good luck in the contest, take care my friend.............Vera...... Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 7/16/2014 11:09:00 PM Thanks Vera o am overwhelmed by the positive comments I've had Hugs Jan xxx

Andrea Dietrich Date: 7/16/2014 5:21:00 PM wow, I really like where you took THIS one. You have given me an idea what I might do for mine, but I will have to check out the form. this one was poignantly described. Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 7/16/2014 5:32:00 PM Thank you so much Andrea for those lovely words of encouragement:-) I feel I am growing as a poet with every write. Hugs Jan xxx

Dr. Upma A. Sharma Date: 7/16/2014 11:33:00 AM Wow that's emotional Jan! Well penned,, gl in contest! Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 7/16/2014 11:35:00 AM Thank you so much for the lovely comment. It is not my normal type of poem and I am thrilled at the comments I am getting:-) Hugs Jan xx

Sara Kendrick Date: 7/16/2014 7:55:00 AM I can feel the pain of emotion in this one..Reads like top of the list to me..Way to go for the contest..Thanks for the visit to my page..Sara Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 7/16/2014 10:13:00 AM thanks for the lovely comment:-) hugs Jan xx

Priyanshi Dass Date: 7/16/2014 7:23:00 AM This is absolutely beautiful penning. In few words you conveyed such sorrow that it's heart breaking. Very well written. Loved this. Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 7/16/2014 7:25:00 AM Thank you so much for your lovely comment:-) Hugs Jan xx

Arlene Smith Date: 7/16/2014 7:00:00 AM Wow! Jan! Hats off to you girl! Such a moving story told in such few words.. Good luck in the contest dear.. Hugs.. Arlene Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 7/16/2014 7:03:00 AM Thanks Arlene I am so touched with the wonderful comments I've had:-) Hugs Jan xxx

Regina Mcintosh Date: 7/16/2014 6:55:00 AM I hope you win. This is wonderful. I enjoyed reading it. Happy writing and God bless you. Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 7/16/2014 6:59:00 AM Thank you so much Regina - its amazing how something as simple as a closed door can bring back such a sad memory and a poem flows.

Connie Marcum Wong Date: 7/16/2014 5:19:00 AM A poignant and powerful piece Jan. Wow, what a great entry for the contest! Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 7/16/2014 6:39:00 AM Thank you so much for the lovely comment Connie:-) Hugs Jan xx

David Williams Date: 7/16/2014 4:11:00 AM Jan, an unusual topic for verse...David Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 7/16/2014 4:15:00 AM Yes I agree David it is a very emotive subject but it was written from the heart. Hugs Jan xx

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