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Behind Closed Doors

On their wedding day Carried across the threshold Now nursery door is closed Mother softly sobbing Her newborn baby was stillborn Such a sad sad sight Peeling paint, broken hinges Couldn’t bear the memories They had to move away Crumbling relics of times gone by Jan Allison 16th July 2014 Written for Door to a Wayra Contest Sponsored By Nette Onclaud ~Awarded 4th Place ~

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Date: 8/20/2014 10:11:00 AM
Thank you
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Date: 8/6/2014 10:46:00 PM
ALWAYS, ENJOY HEARING FROM YOU
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JAN ALLISON
Date: 8/7/2014 3:09:00 AM
Likewise Linda it is always a pleasure to see your beautiful smile:-) Hugs Jan xx
Date: 7/29/2014 12:44:00 PM
Jan, Congratulations, on making Nette's winning list. She's a tough judge. Take Care, LINDA :)
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JAN ALLISON
Date: 7/29/2014 7:28:00 PM
I adore Nette's contests and always strive to do my best in them Linda:-) hugs jan xx
Date: 7/29/2014 4:06:00 AM
Jan, beautiful contrast that lingers on the mind in a muse.. Congrats on your fine win!
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JAN ALLISON
Date: 7/29/2014 7:28:00 PM
Thanks for the lovely comment as ever Dave:-) Hugs jan xxxx
Date: 7/25/2014 2:23:00 PM
a most sensitive write that takes me there, jan.. your fabulous win in my contest gladdens me.. congrats and huggs
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JAN ALLISON
Date: 7/25/2014 3:36:00 PM
Nette I am always so glad when i get placed in your contests - the new forms you find for us are always a challenge and I try my best to get it right. i was so pleased to be placed with this poem it means a lot to me. Jan xx
Date: 7/25/2014 5:56:00 AM
And back again wid huge congrats Jan on this winsome write !
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JAN ALLISON
Date: 7/25/2014 5:59:00 AM
Hi Dr Sharma thanks so much for the lovely comment. Hugs Jan xx
Date: 7/24/2014 7:23:00 PM
Poignant is a good word for this gem. Congrats on your fine win, Jan.
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JAN ALLISON
Date: 7/25/2014 2:00:00 AM
Thanks Andrea even now i can still see the picture in my mind it was superb inspiration. Hugs jan xxx
Date: 7/24/2014 4:00:00 PM
Very well written and poignant Jan, wonderful...I entered as well but forgot the date...I must be getting old :)
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JAN ALLISON
Date: 7/24/2014 4:02:00 PM
Thanks for dropping by David - i enter the contests then forget about it and get a shock when congrats mails appear and Ive been placed which is always a great boost. Hugs jan xx
Date: 7/24/2014 4:00:00 PM
Wohoo way to go on your sweeet win sweetheart :)
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JAN ALLISON
Date: 7/24/2014 4:01:00 PM
Thanks Casarah for dropping by. Hugs jan xx
Date: 7/24/2014 11:39:00 AM
You added a great variety to Nette's wayra challenge with this sad piece. Congratulations on your win. PS thanks for the read and recognition of my own entry. I appreciate your time.
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JAN ALLISON
Date: 7/24/2014 12:16:00 PM
Thanks for dropping by and commenting on my peom. i do try and comment on all the winning poems :-) Hugs Jan xx
Date: 7/24/2014 11:15:00 AM
Good for you! A nice placement with this sad poem. BG
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JAN ALLISON
Date: 7/24/2014 12:16:00 PM
Thanks for dropping by Barbara. Hugs jan xx
Date: 7/24/2014 9:53:00 AM
A great write, a sad message. All so finely written in a very short poem!! You touch the reader's heart deeply with this fine write my friend! BBBBBBBRRRAAVVVOOOO!!!!!!!
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JAN ALLISON
Date: 7/24/2014 9:55:00 AM
Thanks so much for the lovely comment Robert. Hugs Jan xxx
Date: 7/24/2014 9:44:00 AM
I may copy and paste congrats but I have read your work and find its quality very good..Sara
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JAN ALLISON
Date: 7/24/2014 9:54:00 AM
Thanks so much for the personal comment Sara it is much appreciated! Hugs Jan xxx
Date: 7/24/2014 9:38:00 AM
Wow......you have told a complete story, in so few lines, and such a sad twist to this contest. Well done, Jan!
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JAN ALLISON
Date: 7/24/2014 9:41:00 AM
Thanks Carrie. Hugs Jan xxx
Date: 7/24/2014 6:11:00 AM
Very sad and tragic theme, congrats on the win, Jan
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JAN ALLISON
Date: 7/24/2014 6:17:00 AM
Thanks for the lovely comment Dr Mehta. Hugs Jan xx
Date: 7/24/2014 5:51:00 AM
Tragic and so sad Jan however despite such we must move on and gang on.. Congratulations ! Hugs,.:)
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JAN ALLISON
Date: 7/24/2014 6:17:00 AM
Oh I didn't know it had been judged! Thanks for the lovely comment. Hugs Jan xx
Date: 7/19/2014 5:05:00 AM
Very well expressed, Jan, and so sad. Sometimes I guess the best thing to do is to remove ourselves from such vivid reminders that are causing so much sadness. masterfully written and I agree that this is a 7. Bless you my dear... Robert.
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JAN ALLISON
Date: 7/19/2014 7:00:00 AM
Thanks for the lovely understanding comment Robert. Hugs Jan xxx
Date: 7/16/2014 7:32:00 PM
Love this one Jan, good luck in the contest, take care my friend.............Vera......
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JAN ALLISON
Date: 7/16/2014 11:09:00 PM
Thanks Vera o am overwhelmed by the positive comments I've had Hugs Jan xxx
Date: 7/16/2014 5:21:00 PM
wow, I really like where you took THIS one. You have given me an idea what I might do for mine, but I will have to check out the form. this one was poignantly described.
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JAN ALLISON
Date: 7/16/2014 5:32:00 PM
Thank you so much Andrea for those lovely words of encouragement:-) I feel I am growing as a poet with every write. Hugs Jan xxx
Date: 7/16/2014 11:33:00 AM
Wow that's emotional Jan! Well penned,, gl in contest!
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JAN ALLISON
Date: 7/16/2014 11:35:00 AM
Thank you so much for the lovely comment. It is not my normal type of poem and I am thrilled at the comments I am getting:-) Hugs Jan xx
Date: 7/16/2014 7:55:00 AM
I can feel the pain of emotion in this one..Reads like top of the list to me..Way to go for the contest..Thanks for the visit to my page..Sara
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JAN ALLISON
Date: 7/16/2014 10:13:00 AM
thanks for the lovely comment:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 7/16/2014 7:23:00 AM
This is absolutely beautiful penning. In few words you conveyed such sorrow that it's heart breaking. Very well written. Loved this.
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JAN ALLISON
Date: 7/16/2014 7:25:00 AM
Thank you so much for your lovely comment:-) Hugs Jan xx
Date: 7/16/2014 7:00:00 AM
Wow! Jan! Hats off to you girl! Such a moving story told in such few words.. Good luck in the contest dear.. Hugs.. Arlene
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JAN ALLISON
Date: 7/16/2014 7:03:00 AM
Thanks Arlene I am so touched with the wonderful comments I've had:-) Hugs Jan xxx
Date: 7/16/2014 6:55:00 AM
I hope you win. This is wonderful. I enjoyed reading it. Happy writing and God bless you.
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JAN ALLISON
Date: 7/16/2014 6:59:00 AM
Thank you so much Regina - its amazing how something as simple as a closed door can bring back such a sad memory and a poem flows.
Date: 7/16/2014 5:19:00 AM
A poignant and powerful piece Jan. Wow, what a great entry for the contest!
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JAN ALLISON
Date: 7/16/2014 6:39:00 AM
Thank you so much for the lovely comment Connie:-) Hugs Jan xx
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