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Beginning to Remember

The first sense from the portal destination was contentment and a smile to the eyes- of barnyard kin and neighbor, those curious smiles welcomed in tandem with an expectance, something I cannot put my finger on or elaborate, but only as that I was a visitor but not a stranger. Eager but calm faces silhouetted amidst the moonlight's particle beam, dusts that danced like Fairy-folk in training held spotlight and stage to announce me in theatrical swirl. The scent of damp straw permeated just enough to add to the ambience. Then I looked out and slightly skyward, just below mountain level- to the east. There sat a great City- which looked to be made of Topaz and Steel and an impossible white material that reminded me of alabaster and taffy. That is where I remembered, that I met her.

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Date: 3/15/2024 4:58:00 PM
Hey Jude, this is a mesmerizing journey into memory and sensation. The imagery you created is evocative, drawing the reader into the world of your recollection. The contrast between the rural setting and the majestic city adds layers of intrigue and emotion. A very captivating piece of introspection and discovery. - Blessings, Daniel
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Jude Herrick
Date: 3/15/2024 6:44:00 PM
Thank you, Daniel.
Date: 3/15/2024 12:19:00 AM
Dear jude what a profound and fantastic write that describes and delivers such imaginative thoughts so poetically phrased in a seamless manner. I especially loved “ There sat a great City- which looked to be made of Topaz and Steel and an impossible white material ” how magical and captivating. A city i would like to see too. Absolutely gorgeous and you do paint imagery so very well. So artistic with many great lines. Pleasure always reading your work.
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Jude Herrick
Date: 3/15/2024 6:44:00 PM
Thank you, Ink Empress.

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