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Before the Gates of Alahsar - Original Version

"Before The Gates Of Alahsar." By, Michael .P. Clarke. (Bardic Style) (Original Short Version) (Version-1) Sweet Alahsar, thy golden crowns adorned the sky of verdant blue, sweet land of dream, throne of Amethyst, land of sunlight, ever shining. Children of the mortal kind, on silver walkways, they find their way to the very heart of dream, the golden gates of Alahsar. Before these gates in long ago, the dark ones came to conquer light. Upon the timeless battlements an Angel stood, sweet womanhood, Her soft brown eyes beheld the foe, as darkness came upon the scene, She watched as mortal men did march through the golden gates, as if in dream. Brave the knights that rode away, armour bright in Summer light, followed by the infantry, bedecked in Summer's brightest colours. Brave the soldiers of that day, hearts of steel, they marched away, Upon Badicha's mighty plain, life's battle for to fight this day. Womanhood did watch from on high, as Fathers, Sons and Lovers marched away. Into the light, the glory bright which e'er did shine on badicha. Her womanhood stood with the rest upon bright battlements of gold, tears, in eyes so young and bold, above the gates of Alahsar. Upon Badicha's mighty plain where man and beast both had come, weapons of destruction meeting, tortured hearts in anguish crying, pain and death their victims seeking, Hearts on darkening pain a-dying, clashing of Faith against Faith, divinity weeping at such a sight. As women's eyes were sorrowfully watching, tears did fall as they watched the red, not but Fifteen minutes passing, sweet Alahsar's manhood lying dead. Wondrous eyes this pain had watched, now looked up to God's Heavenly blue, crying out to the friend of darkness to come and do what he does do. Still, some survive, running blindly to the gates where safety lies, Beasts of darkness do not follow, they stay 'neath the darkening skies. Darkness, oh, Badicha is fallen, will light shine their, e'er again? As the darkness ever deepens, hearts are dismal, all is pain. soldiers running, madly rushing, safety held within golden gates, wide eyes mortals, fear exploding, hearts all burning with fear's light. Shall all dreams be filled with darkness? never light to guide the way, darkened dreams all filled with sadness, will; the light come out of day? __________________________ To Be Continued..........

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Date: 4/1/2019 1:36:00 PM
Hello Viadislay, Raven, your first part of this poem is well done. Looking forward to part 2. have a nice day my friend.
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Date: 3/17/2019 9:40:00 AM
You created another masterpiece, dear Vladislav.. Wonderful piece added to your series.. I look forward to your continuation! Have a blessed day, my friend..
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Date: 3/6/2019 1:07:00 PM
This poem was thrilling to read and excellent in its content Mike. I look forward to reading the next. "clashing of Faith against Faith, divinity weeping at such a sight." So impressive my friend! This is going into my Faves! : ) xxoo
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Date: 3/11/2019 10:41:00 AM
Hi Connie, thank you for dropping by, the comment and the fave on this piece, it is much appreciated. I am so glad you liked the piece. This is the original, first version of my Alahsar write. I did so enjoy writing this version. Have a wonderful Monday. Hugs....Mike. XX
Date: 3/2/2019 9:36:00 AM
I would like to thank all those who drop by to view this piece. Your visits help a poet to keep singing. Hugs....Mike. XX
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Date: 2/28/2019 5:57:00 PM
Fascinating topic, Vladislav, and written in a compelling manner that makes the reader want to know more. You have a gift for narratives. Striking detail makes for a compelling read! Hugs, Carolyn
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Vladislav Raven
Date: 3/2/2019 9:17:00 AM
Hi Carolyn, thank you for dropping by and the comment on this piece, it is much appreciated. I am so glad you liked the piece. This piece comes from a recurring dream. This is the original short version of my epic piece. I think this is the first time I have posted it on the Soup. Have a wonderful Saturday. Hugs....Mike. XX
Date: 2/28/2019 2:42:00 PM
Poems such as this one are meant to be read more than once, Mike, just for their sheer beauty, imagery, and striking narrative power. Even Keats would have given you the thumbs up, my friend! Best regards // paul
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Vladislav Raven
Date: 3/2/2019 9:06:00 AM
Hi Paul, thank you for dropping by and the comment on this piece, it is much appreciated. I am so glad you liked the piece. This is the original short version of the piece that started the epic write. I think this is the first time I have put this version the Soup. Have a wonderful Saturday. Your friend always....Mike.
Date: 2/28/2019 7:58:00 AM
- Good to see they will be posted again ... never delete them, my friend Mike ... a wonderful series - You write them so vividly - Best wishes and hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 3/2/2019 8:58:00 AM
Hi Anne-Lise, thank you for dropping by and the comment on this piece, it is much appreciated. I am so glad you liked the piece. This is the original short version of the epic, the write that started it all. I shall be keeping this write on. Have a wonderful Saturday. Hugs....Mike. XX
Date: 2/28/2019 4:45:00 AM
I remember these poems... Nice to see you posting them again..
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Vladislav Raven
Date: 3/2/2019 8:28:00 AM
Hi Silent, thank you for dropping by and the comment on this piece, it is much appreciated. I am so glad you liked the piece. This is the original short version of the piece. am not sure whether I have posted this version on soup before. This version started it all. Have a wonderful Saturday. Your friend always....Mike.
Date: 2/28/2019 1:45:00 AM
Amazing, beautiful, Sentimental, Sad, Awesome, Breathtaking! Poetry hugs Vladislav, Jennifer.
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Date: 3/2/2019 8:13:00 AM
Hi Jennifer, thank you for dropping by and the comment on this piece, it is much appreciated. I am so glad you liked the piece. This is the original, short version of the piece. I don't think I have ever posted this version before. Have a wonderful Saturday. ...Mike. XX

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