Bedroom of Doom

A child shrieks on darkness’ edge
For fear of what’s within the black
A tense reaction, shivering too
At thoughts of something to attack
But no, there’s nothing that so comes
Yet, child cries and prays for light
With blanket pulled above the brow
He does his best to cope with fright
He fears the coming of the night
And prays that all will turn out right

His eyes so close before the dawn
As sleep prevails and fear subsides
So stretching then on morning’s wake
From the bed, he leaves to rise
The fear he had was but erased
As light had won the battle well
With feet then touching on the floor
A new fear came and then he fell
As talons clawed, he met his doom
The child had never escaped his room

Copyright © | Year Posted 2009



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Date: 8/1/2010 2:52:00 PM
sounds like the daily grind of my warped and wasted youth
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Date: 1/5/2010 12:25:00 AM
sweet.nice write.most times our fears rush back when we think we've escaped it
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Date: 11/21/2009 11:32:00 PM
Where have you been, Michael? We've missed you! Love, Carolyn
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Date: 10/22/2009 9:12:00 AM
darkness and death two best friends. jhl
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Date: 9/9/2009 4:31:00 PM
Hi Michael...just thinking about you and wondering how your doing. I miss you on the soup. BG
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Date: 7/27/2009 11:37:00 AM
Nice rhyme Michael, Bill
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Date: 7/25/2009 4:20:00 PM
Very interesting Rhyme. It brought back memories of childhood and adulthood horror of nightmares and also what a new day can bring. Sara
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Date: 6/24/2009 1:56:00 PM
Micheal how are you doing. I feel the fear in this poor child who lost his way. Hope all is well with you and your family. God Bless Phyl
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Date: 5/23/2009 4:11:00 AM
Wonderful and beautiful piece of art. Thank you sir for sharing us this piece. Ernilando
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Date: 4/20/2009 5:25:00 PM
horrible. because so many animals meet this fate millions of times a day. john h loving iii
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Date: 4/16/2009 11:07:00 PM
i love this poem, michael. way to keep em' guessing. one of my favs
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Date: 4/10/2009 12:21:00 AM
Hi Michael, this poem reminds me of my children when they were still very young. Almost everyone have this experience too. Thank you for sharing this to us. Ernilando
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Date: 3/27/2009 8:29:00 PM
I did not expect that ending. I must admit. I sometimes have nightmares that feel so real that when I wake I expect to find whatever was haunting me in my sleep. Clever write and ending, I truly love to read your words as they flow so wonderfully on paper, or rather computer screen. Aleera
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Date: 3/26/2009 4:17:00 AM
Michael, This is so reminiscent of......? Oh yeah, me when I was little(l.o.l.). You've captured the whole scenario perfectly. Great(but chilling) write. Thanks for all of your welcome and appreciated comments. DOUG
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Date: 3/24/2009 9:01:00 AM
whoa that was scary........my son and i deal with this scenario on occassion ....great job! this is personal to me!
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Date: 3/20/2009 8:44:00 PM
Great twist at the end, Michael! Did not see that coming. I agree with Sharon's comment about Stephan King. Great piece! Love, Robin
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Date: 3/19/2009 9:49:00 AM
The suspense and fright expressed in this one is awesome. Wonderful write to get the group going today! Scary for the poor child but very well done. Smiles from Lolita
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Date: 3/19/2009 9:21:00 AM
A haunting image of the child who is afraid of the dark, Michael. I used to leap several feet from my bed each morning because I didn't know what was lying beneath it. Great write!
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Date: 3/19/2009 8:22:00 AM
Yikes..glad I didnt read this when I was a child. I absolutely knew for sure that there was an alligator under my bed. Made for some long nights for my mother. I'm smiling. BG
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Date: 3/19/2009 7:47:00 AM
Wow, did not expect that ending. Stephen King would be proud. Awesome! Love, Shar
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Date: 3/19/2009 5:20:00 AM
pins and needles read, Michael, nice! Jim
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Date: 3/19/2009 5:15:00 AM
Mike two thumbs up like your theme this morning... )
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