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Becoming Autumn

If I were to become Autumn
you would see me transform
all around  me in mid fall
leaves suspended 
a freeze frame of rustic life
my dress of quilted, rusty leaves
splattered in warm shades 
sunset painted in my hair, and
everywhere it seems 
  red-red-red

If I became Autumn 
would you love me in Spring
with all the pastel beauties
parading every where.
they are so temporary 
soft beauty fades and dies
remember I’ll be yours - Forever Autumn.

Still in progress......not sure about the second stanza.
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Fenn Avatar
December 4, 2020 at 7:27 PM
Great new slant on autumn! I think the second stanza is fine as is.
Carber Avatar
November 27, 2020 at 8:01 AM
My favorite season--and the 2nd stanza is just fine, Suz
Delaney Avatar
November 28, 2020 at 6:53 AM
Thanks Len: It is. All but gone here. Waved a golden goodbye. SuZ
Laurie Avatar
November 15, 2020 at 3:47 PM
Hello Suzanne … There is something about autumn that demands respect for the offerings of bounty, rustic beauty, and the most calming season. I really did enjoy your poem Suzanne - Lindsay
Delaney Avatar
November 15, 2020 at 6:06 PM
You know, Lindsay: You really nailed it with your description. I really do find Autumn very calming. Thanks for the idea for another Haiku. Thanks always for your friendship. SuZ
Mcintosh Avatar
November 11, 2020 at 3:55 AM
I love autumn too... it's a gentle season filled with serenity. I love your poem so far. Let me know when you add to it. God bless you
Delaney Avatar
November 15, 2020 at 6:09 PM
Hi Regina: I love your description of Autumn as being a gentle season. I feel the serenity too. Thanks for looking in on me. Most appreciated. SuZ
Horsman Avatar
November 1, 2020 at 11:09 PM
LOve this Suzanne, Autumn exists so spring becomes reborn again and again. I think you would look lovely all gold rusty and fiery red. love the poem, and its creation, different way to write on this subject, that's what makes it so special...
Delaney Avatar
November 15, 2020 at 5:58 PM
Thanks you Harry. Your replies mean so much.
Andresen Avatar
October 26, 2020 at 7:36 AM
- It's beautiful ... from beginning to end, SuZ :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
One Avatar
October 25, 2020 at 12:21 PM
If you became Autumn it would mean part of you would die and if you are not evergreen, you may not return.... Second stanza seems fine... Soft beauty does fade and die... You are right.
Dietrich Avatar
October 24, 2020 at 5:18 PM
I love that second stanza. I love it all. It's so great to see you here, Suz!
Cunningham Avatar
October 24, 2020 at 8:20 AM
I'd say yes because I love autumn, second stanza looks fine to me Suze. Hope your weekend going well. Tom
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