Beauty In Motion

His smile awaiting
His bright eyes like deep, dark pools
Skin so unblemished 
His walk---so swift and so smooth
Intense skipping of my heart
Copyright © | Year Posted 2010

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Smalling Avatar
October 1, 2010 at 6:13 AM
The heart must skip if we will play ... the game as beautiful as our poetry. One love
R Avatar
September 13, 2010 at 5:38 AM
A nice way to describe the one you love(especially liked the last line"Intense skipping of my heart". Emilia
K. Avatar
September 8, 2010 at 3:51 AM
Such a nice take on the challenge Brandee-- you sure expressed that beauty in a guy well ;) -- nikko :)
Richards Avatar
August 30, 2010 at 6:33 PM
My heart would pound too !!....hmmm, this is romantic and sensual ! Nicely done! ~ Carrie
Devonshire Avatar
August 30, 2010 at 5:46 PM
Brandee, Congratulations on your placement in Rick's contest tanka contest! Love, Carolyn
Mehta Avatar
August 30, 2010 at 5:28 PM
Congratulations on the win in the contest, Brandee
Brown Avatar
August 30, 2010 at 4:53 AM
Congratulations Brandee on your win in Rick Parise's contest "A Memory Of Beauty". Love, Carol
Johnson Avatar
August 29, 2010 at 8:55 PM
Very nice Brandee,. Congratulations Love, Joyce
Dietrich Avatar
August 29, 2010 at 7:33 PM
Love it , BRandee. Wish it could have scored even higher. Congratulations. LUv, Andrea
Sweetheart Avatar
August 29, 2010 at 6:49 PM
Congrats Brandee on your HM in Rick's Tanka contest... awesome as usual... enjoy your honor ..with luv..
Dietrich Avatar
August 27, 2010 at 2:04 PM
AHHH, real beauty!! I have seen it too. Luv, Andrea
Mehta Avatar
August 25, 2010 at 6:55 PM
A wonderful description of beauty in motion, Brandee. Good luck
Devonshire Avatar
August 25, 2010 at 3:25 PM
That sounds like true love, adoration of one who makes your heart skip a beat. Lovely tanka, Brandee. Best wishes, Carolyn
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