beating the rain

                 beating the rain

    
           splashing out some bling
           as raindrops disintegrate
             on hummingbird wing


By
David Kavanagh

natureperspectivehaiku

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Victor Buhagiar

July 3, 2024 at 1:53 AM

Perfect haiku. Loved your imagery.

David Kavanagh

July 20, 2024 at 3:38 AM

Thank you Victor, was a nice picture to interpret!

I Am Anaya

June 30, 2024 at 11:11 AM

This one is very sweet, you've captured its purity, "beating the rain" humorous. Beautiful photo. Precious, David. You are a sweet poet. Cheers

David Kavanagh

July 1, 2024 at 4:34 AM

Thank you Anaya, we all have a little sweet side to us, regardless of our approach to poetry, I’m taking a break from the soup, hopefully be back in a couple of weeks, cheers David

Jan Allison

June 29, 2024 at 3:30 PM

wonderful poem and accompanying picture, hope you feel better soon David:-) hugs Jan xx

David Kavanagh

June 30, 2024 at 1:57 AM

Thanks Jan, think I’m getting there slowly but surely, unlike the hummingbird in my haiku, hope you’re keeping well too, cheers David

Karen Jones

June 29, 2024 at 2:16 PM

Great photo and I love the haiku!

David Kavanagh

June 29, 2024 at 2:58 PM

Thank you Caren, the photo was way too good not to post, and seems to capture the moment I had in my head perfectly, cheers David

Lin Lane

June 29, 2024 at 2:26 AM

A very clever title, David. Ya know I love rhyming, even in a Haiku.

Lin Lane

June 29, 2024 at 3:48 AM

oh, I'm sad to learn you haven't been well. It's a gem of a Haiku. Hope you feel better soon. Hugs.

David Kavanagh

June 29, 2024 at 3:32 AM

I had this one in mind for Tania’’s contest, unfortunately I’m out of sorts at the moment, and missed the deadline, but thought it worth posting anyway, thanks so much Lin, cheers David