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6/20/2025 for Stones Poems Poetry Contest sponsored by Oliver Mckeithan

Angie and Ruby, the Honky Tonk Women, wanted to paint the honkytonk.  Their heads started swimmin' when I says, "Ruby, Tuesday's a good day to paint. It should be sunny, but even if it ain't, I'll have my radio blasting The Rolling Stones. What kind of colors you want? What tones?" "Paint it Black" says Ruby, but Angie, she says "white". I says, "Tumblin' Dice can decide which is right." Ruby said, "We got this old black paint from DuPont - Angie, You Can't Always Get What You Want". I painted up the honkytonk, nothing more to discuss. I gazed at some Wild Horses, and picked a mean ol' cuss, tired of all these women folks's bickering and fuss. I had paint Under My Thumb, and my clothes were in a muss as I saddled up the horse, thinking, Some Girls are pretty funny, and I won't paint no more honkytonks for that kind of money.

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Date: 6/20/2025 3:47:00 PM
a fabulous and creative take on the contest....wasn't it fun?! best wishes with the contest, yellow rose
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David Crandall
Date: 6/20/2025 7:35:00 PM
Thanks Yellow Rose, and yes, it was fun! I love these contests where you have to use a bunch of words and doing it with songs that I'm familiar with is all the better.
Date: 6/20/2025 2:31:00 PM
A good patchwork poem that reveals in a final sentence. Good reading
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David Crandall
Date: 6/20/2025 7:34:00 PM
Thanks Hilda! Kind of a challenge to make a cohesive story - lol!
Date: 6/20/2025 11:29:00 AM
What a fun read and creative write/story "Good Luck" I enjoyed reading this one. Have a fun day writing away...............
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David Crandall
Date: 6/20/2025 7:33:00 PM
Thanks Paula!

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