Bastard Sun

Life is a bastard son, prodding the fertile horizon
poking into places tender, tearing the expanse of dawn
he taunts, rude and bellicose, so full of himself
spewing into the weakest streams, a wet dream.

With platitudes he prances, son of a fearsome father
promising eternity, singing a lover's song of praise.
Light bearer, holder of the golden scalpel, night cutter
leaving glare where softness once held sway.

May the abyss, the gentle dark, the yin forgive you..son.
From the pear-shaped loins of sister Eve, you have burst
washed in the waters of she, a caul of white adorned,
pray, stay your hand, do not bludgeon your better half.

Existence, endless, fleeting, meld and join this randy pair
for universes swing between this bastard and his dreams.  


Dedicated to my muse Brenda Atry
please read her "Black Diamond Night"

Copyright © | Year Posted 2012



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Date: 9/15/2012 6:47:00 AM
POWERFUL write! As Elizabeth so aptly phrased it... "a amazing description of raw emotion" Kudos Debbie! Love and hugs, Jack xox
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Date: 9/14/2012 7:13:00 AM
You sure probe the depths here Debbie, some amazing descriptions of raw emotion. The message moved me deeply.
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Date: 9/14/2012 1:55:00 AM
If I don't see this take top honors, there is no justice. You have outdone yourself on this one Deb. One of your best. I will go have a look now at Brenda's.
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Debbie Guzzi
Date: 9/14/2012 6:15:00 AM
Thanks so much BUT it's not for a contest ..its just for me, Brenda & the readers!
Date: 9/12/2012 8:22:00 AM
Bloody hell this is good Debbie, blown me away really, love the end stanza, why not a sonnet? or is the subject matter wrong:
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Debbie Guzzi
Date: 9/14/2012 6:16:00 AM
not a sonnet because there is NO end rhyme
Date: 9/10/2012 10:06:00 PM
Debbie; this is one heck of a poem. I like it and you did a great job. Thanks for sharing. Lucilla
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Date: 9/10/2012 10:55:00 AM
wow awesome personification on this well written piece. The title caught my attention. love phyl
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Date: 9/10/2012 10:41:00 AM
An amazing personification, Debbie! Enjoyed the read and will read Brenda's Black Diamond Night. Hugs, Rhonda
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Date: 9/10/2012 10:30:00 AM
Very well written Debbie - You asked about the weather: It's a gray day, with little rain - it is autumn. - I hope the sun shines on you. - Have a exciting new week. - oxox love Anne-Lise :)
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