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Barn Swallows

Spring tramples the detachment of cold it heals a winter's damaged heart Buds peddle new beauty as trees poke roots from defrosted ground Barn swallows swoop in the cool air of sparse meadows To rest, to breed in man made roofs A barn's hideaway nooks, soothing like a Sinatra tune Birds of blue plummage tail feather streamers, deeply forked under breasts of white streaks like jet smoke flashes Witt, witt sounds, cheerful chirps that fill dark rafters that spice a world pushing itself to spring Hot specks of flutter Unmuted yearning Chirps, feather light, a bounce of canoodling Bits of song that come and go like lovers kissing in the hay below Poem composed: February 21, 2021

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Date: 12/29/2021 7:20:00 PM
I love your simile "A barn's hideaway nooks, soothing like a Sinatra tune" Oh, that's perfect! I owned a house with a boathouse attached once. I got such a kick out of the birds as they flew in and out the roof rafters. Your lovely poem brought back this memory for me. I liked all your images so much. As I read I closed my eyes after each line and 'saw' your words. Such a pretty poem, so glad to have found it.
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Brian Sambourne
Date: 12/29/2021 7:33:00 PM
Thank you for your very gracious comments, Marikate. I am pleased that you found that the poem could evoke a past, pleasurable memory. Be well. Brian
Date: 3/13/2021 2:41:00 PM
Your opening lines just drew me in with their amazing and unique word images Brian. True poetry followed by more wonderful images! Congratulations on your top place win. Well deserved!
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Brian Sambourne
Date: 3/13/2021 6:29:00 PM
Hello Sam Your generous, warm remarks are much valued + welcomed. Huge thanks. You frequently give me a thumbs up even when my submission receives an NA. I am surprised by the top placement of Barn Swallows + much appreciate the recognition. Best wishes, Brian
Date: 3/13/2021 2:55:00 AM
Enjoyed reading this very descriptive winner. It says so much about spring and its beauty with new life. Congrats . Sara
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Brian Sambourne
Date: 3/13/2021 6:32:00 AM
Thanks very much Sara. Indeed, coming spring is so much about renewal. Sincerely, Brian
Date: 3/13/2021 1:21:00 AM
A great poem Brian. Congratulations on your win. I particularly like the style of writing: Very descriptive and - how can I articulate this next bit? I'll try - I can an envisage the barn sparrow just by the style and flow of your writing. I just hope that makes some sense. Well done.Cheers - Gary
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Brian Sambourne
Date: 3/13/2021 6:37:00 AM
Thank you, Gary, for your thoughtful input. I do hope that the reader catches some of the images and movement in a descriptive piece. Happiness + health, Brian
Date: 3/12/2021 7:52:00 PM
Congratulations on your win. This is a beautiful poem.
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Brian Sambourne
Date: 3/12/2021 8:23:00 PM
Your kind remarks are much appreciated. Thank you for reading + responding to my small entry. All the best, Brian
Date: 3/12/2021 6:01:00 PM
The subtle romance, I love, and my parents love Frank Sinatra. Congratulations, Brian!
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Brian Sambourne
Date: 3/12/2021 8:25:00 PM
Hi Kim Thank you for your thoughtful note. Yes Sinatra (for me) croons away the Blues. Spring birds (in song) have the same effect. Best wishes, Brian
Date: 3/12/2021 3:41:00 PM
Brian, congratulations on your win in the All Yours contest with this terrific Free Verse poem, well done _Constance
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Brian Sambourne
Date: 3/12/2021 4:23:00 PM
Hi Constance, Kind of you to comment again, as the poem is a re-submission from your earlier contest on spring birds. But twice is always nice. Cheers Brian
Date: 2/28/2021 12:06:00 PM
- Brian, congratulations on your lovely winning poem, music in our ears :) - // Anne-Lise :)
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Brian Sambourne
Date: 2/28/2021 12:45:00 PM
Hello Anne-Lise, Thank you for your thoughtful remarks. Barn Swallows is well down the list of placements so I doubly appreciate your words after seeking it out. Cheers Brian
Date: 2/28/2021 8:35:00 AM
Brian, lovely poem, congratulations on your win in my Spring Birds Challenge, well done _Constance
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Brian Sambourne
Date: 2/28/2021 8:40:00 AM
Thank you, Constance. Best wishes, Brian
Date: 2/28/2021 6:27:00 AM
Beautiful, I particularly love you last two lines ~ congrats on your top win
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Brian Sambourne
Date: 2/28/2021 6:40:00 AM
Thank you, Line. I am far down the list of acknowledgements. So nice that you scrolled down to discover my small verse. My appreciation for your kind note. Brian
Date: 2/25/2021 5:55:00 AM
“Witt Witt” sounds was a really clever touch of realism.
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Brian Sambourne
Date: 2/25/2021 9:17:00 AM
You are most thoughtful, Caren. Thank you for posting a positive note. Best regards, Brian

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