Barn Swallows

Spring tramples the detachment of cold
          it heals a winter's damaged heart
Buds peddle new beauty as trees poke
          roots from defrosted ground

Barn swallows swoop in the cool air 
          of sparse meadows
To rest, to breed in man made roofs
A barn's hideaway nooks, soothing
          like a Sinatra tune
Birds of blue plummage
          tail feather streamers, deeply forked
          under breasts of white streaks 
          like jet smoke flashes

Witt, witt sounds, cheerful chirps
          that fill dark rafters
          that spice a world pushing itself to spring
Hot specks of flutter
Unmuted yearning
Chirps, feather light, a bounce of canoodling 
Bits of song that come and go
          like lovers kissing in the hay below






Poem composed: February 21, 2021
Copyright © | Year Posted 2021

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Kingston Avatar
December 29, 2021 at 7:20 PM
I love your simile "A barn's hideaway nooks, soothing like a Sinatra tune" Oh, that's perfect! I owned a house with a boathouse attached once. I got such a kick out of the birds as they flew in and out the roof rafters. Your lovely poem brought back this memory for me. I liked all your images so much. As I read I closed my eyes after each line and 'saw' your words. Such a pretty poem, so glad to have found it.
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December 29, 2021 at 7:33 PM
Thank you for your very gracious comments, Marikate. I am pleased that you found that the poem could evoke a past, pleasurable memory. Be well. Brian
Kauffman Avatar
March 13, 2021 at 2:41 PM
Your opening lines just drew me in with their amazing and unique word images Brian. True poetry followed by more wonderful images! Congratulations on your top place win. Well deserved!
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March 13, 2021 at 6:29 PM
Hello Sam Your generous, warm remarks are much valued + welcomed. Huge thanks. You frequently give me a thumbs up even when my submission receives an NA. I am surprised by the top placement of Barn Swallows + much appreciate the recognition. Best wishes, Brian
Kendrick Avatar
March 13, 2021 at 2:55 AM
Enjoyed reading this very descriptive winner. It says so much about spring and its beauty with new life. Congrats . Sara
Sambourne Avatar
March 13, 2021 at 6:32 AM
Thanks very much Sara. Indeed, coming spring is so much about renewal. Sincerely, Brian
Radice Avatar
March 13, 2021 at 1:21 AM
A great poem Brian. Congratulations on your win. I particularly like the style of writing: Very descriptive and - how can I articulate this next bit? I'll try - I can an envisage the barn sparrow just by the style and flow of your writing. I just hope that makes some sense. Well done.Cheers - Gary
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March 13, 2021 at 6:37 AM
Thank you, Gary, for your thoughtful input. I do hope that the reader catches some of the images and movement in a descriptive piece. Happiness + health, Brian
Swartz Avatar
March 12, 2021 at 7:52 PM
Congratulations on your win. This is a beautiful poem.
Sambourne Avatar
March 12, 2021 at 8:23 PM
Your kind remarks are much appreciated. Thank you for reading + responding to my small entry. All the best, Brian
Rodrigues Avatar
March 12, 2021 at 6:01 PM
The subtle romance, I love, and my parents love Frank Sinatra. Congratulations, Brian!
Sambourne Avatar
March 12, 2021 at 8:25 PM
Hi Kim Thank you for your thoughtful note. Yes Sinatra (for me) croons away the Blues. Spring birds (in song) have the same effect. Best wishes, Brian
La France Avatar
March 12, 2021 at 3:41 PM
Brian, congratulations on your win in the All Yours contest with this terrific Free Verse poem, well done _Constance
Sambourne Avatar
March 12, 2021 at 4:23 PM
Hi Constance, Kind of you to comment again, as the poem is a re-submission from your earlier contest on spring birds. But twice is always nice. Cheers Brian
Andresen Avatar
February 28, 2021 at 12:06 PM
- Brian, congratulations on your lovely winning poem, music in our ears :) - // Anne-Lise :)
Sambourne Avatar
February 28, 2021 at 12:45 PM
Hello Anne-Lise, Thank you for your thoughtful remarks. Barn Swallows is well down the list of placements so I doubly appreciate your words after seeking it out. Cheers Brian
La France Avatar
February 28, 2021 at 8:35 AM
Brian, lovely poem, congratulations on your win in my Spring Birds Challenge, well done _Constance
Sambourne Avatar
February 28, 2021 at 8:40 AM
Thank you, Constance. Best wishes, Brian
Gauthier Avatar
February 28, 2021 at 6:27 AM
Beautiful, I particularly love you last two lines ~ congrats on your top win
Sambourne Avatar
February 28, 2021 at 6:40 AM
Thank you, Line. I am far down the list of acknowledgements. So nice that you scrolled down to discover my small verse. My appreciation for your kind note. Brian
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February 25, 2021 at 5:55 AM
“Witt Witt” sounds was a really clever touch of realism.
Sambourne Avatar
February 25, 2021 at 9:17 AM
You are most thoughtful, Caren. Thank you for posting a positive note. Best regards, Brian
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