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Barefoot

I walk on the deserted beach
listening to the ocean song;
the breeze holds my hand.
Is this where I belong?

I leave my footprints in the sand
feeling the grains between my toes.
Is it too late to dream,
I ask. Only God knows!

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Premiere Contest No. 7 by Skat A

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Carrie Richards

August 9, 2016 at 7:30 PM

What a lovely Quatrain......and questions are those we all will ask from time to time! Well done, Paul !

Paul Callus

August 11, 2016 at 4:41 PM

Thank you for the feedback, Carrie... glad you like it. ~ All the best. // paul

Tim Smith

August 9, 2016 at 7:18 PM

It is so great to read this one again Paul...congrats on the placement

Paul Callus

August 11, 2016 at 4:39 PM

Thank you, Tim; I truly enjoyed your winning entry! // paul

Charlie Smith

August 9, 2016 at 11:05 AM

I love the simplicity Paul, congratulations and thanks for sharing it with us...

Paul Callus

August 9, 2016 at 4:39 PM

I'm pleased that you like it, Charlie. Thank you. Regards // paul

Skat A

August 9, 2016 at 2:26 AM

Paul, Congratulations on your win. Stop by and enjoy my latest blog (MR PERIOD.....) it's another one of my lazy blogs. Luv **SKAT**

Paul Callus

August 9, 2016 at 5:03 AM

Thank you, Skat. So pleased to be on your winners' list. Hope you're keeping well and active:) Best regards // paul

R.A. Marschall

June 23, 2016 at 5:20 PM

Paul, A beautiful quatrain. great lines - "listening to the ocean song"...

Paul Callus

June 24, 2016 at 1:01 AM

Thank you, Richard; I'm so pleased that you enjoyed it! ~ Best regards // paul

Robert Lindley

November 22, 2015 at 10:11 AM

Paul , eleven years ago I crossed the wide ocean and took that barefoot walk on the beach with my filipina "bride to be" at the Boracay resort! Love this rendering and adding it to my fav list.A7 Thanks..

Paul Callus

November 22, 2015 at 12:04 PM

Thank you for stopping by and for the high rating+fav, Robert. I checked out Boracay resort, and island; truly enchanting environment in which the blue sea and white sand are so conspicuous. ~ Regards // paul

Edlynn Nau

November 14, 2015 at 6:40 PM

Everyday is a dream come true. You have simply arrived Paul. Destination HERE & now; how shall all your gifts be honed, harvested, shared, and passé (passed on) to those that will need to know what you have learned here. We think dreams have stopped. No! You finally just got there. Ha! There is great beauty in simplicity and this poem achieves that. It demonstrates elegance in pointed choice of words, in stress of syllable, in simplicity of rhyme. A little treasure.

Edlynn Nau

November 17, 2015 at 6:48 PM

Gee... "Their" work NOT "there" work! I hate Dragon. I'd be super wealthy if I'd write a program that could discriminate the correct homophone! :-D

Edlynn Nau

November 17, 2015 at 6:46 PM

Can hardly be called rambling Paul. Artists talking about there work receive that great privledge to learn from each other. This is the idea of the blog if it were used as such. I love the simplicity packed with all the elegance. Keep on doing this! Do you get to go in your community to read aloud? I suggest you look in to that.

Paul Callus

November 17, 2015 at 5:47 PM

Thank you, Edlynn. I feel encouraged and honored by your insightful feedback. That's exactly how I try to express my poetry...mostly in simple words, usually in rhyme, intending to please the mind and soul, so the reader won't lose concentration due to complicated reasoning or presentation. I prefer short to long poems. Poetry must never be burdensome; it has to please, give joy, make the heart flutter. When I posted an online book on Amazon, I made it clear that my poetry was for those who want enjoyment based on simplicity! Thank you for listening to my rambling:) ~ Regards // paul

CayCay Godwin

November 5, 2015 at 6:00 PM

I've had the same thought lead me to the same conclusion, but I never brought the thought to life as you just beautifully did ... CayCay

Paul Callus

November 6, 2015 at 12:38 PM

That is the beauty of poetry, CayCay...we can have the same thoughts, yet we are able to express them differently. Thank you for providing lovely feedback:) ~ Regards // paul

Laura Hay

November 3, 2015 at 7:42 AM

The swish of the waves rippling up the shore, i can feel the sense of calm this walk would provide. Wish i was there now! Lovely work as always Paul. Warm regards, Laura.

Paul Callus

November 3, 2015 at 4:38 PM

Thank you, Laura. Sea and sand are a source of therapeutic charm...serenity and peace. Glad that you like:) Warm regards // paul

Anne-Lise Andresen

October 28, 2015 at 2:04 PM

- A beautiful little poem, Paul - I love to go barefoot ..... both in sand and snow :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Paul Callus

October 29, 2015 at 4:09 AM

Hi Anne Lise! Thank you for stopping by with lovely comments. I have been barefooted on sand and grass, but never on snow! ~ Regards & hugs // paul

Rainbow Promise

October 28, 2015 at 11:28 AM

Beautiful. Describes what happens to our bare feet in the sand. I enjoyed reading this. God bless.

Paul Callus

October 28, 2015 at 12:47 PM

Thank you, Rainbow, for reading and commenting. All the best and God bless. // paul

Ravi Sathasivam

October 28, 2015 at 1:05 AM

Excellent. Well penned. Beautiful verses. Enjoyed reading your poem today. Thanks for sharing it.

Paul Callus

October 28, 2015 at 9:43 AM

Your positive comments are most welcome, Ravi; thank you! ~ All the best. // paul

Maurice Rigoler

October 27, 2015 at 9:45 AM

Haha! Ah. perchance to dream! At a certain age it's all some men can do! Thanks for comments, Paul. Best to you. / M

Paul Callus

October 27, 2015 at 12:31 PM

Thank you for stopping by and lighting my page, Maurice:) We experienced men of wisdom know what life has to offer...and take!:) All the best. // paul

Charmaine Chircop

October 27, 2015 at 9:41 AM

Never too late to dream... They can steal away our freedom..but not our dreams..No one can take dreams from us. Loved your poem. A fave.

Paul Callus

October 27, 2015 at 12:27 PM

Love your feedback, Charm...it's truly appreciated. Thank you for a lovely visit ... and the fav!:) ~ Regards // paul

Viv Wigley

October 27, 2015 at 5:24 AM

Your heart is still in the first flush of youth, Paul, even if all of the other bits creak. A gentle, introspective write. Regards, Viv

Paul Callus

October 27, 2015 at 12:24 PM

You are right, Viv!! The heart does yearn for more, but the body is not always so willing! Thank you for stopping by. Regards // paul

Lindsay Laurie

October 27, 2015 at 3:07 AM

G'day Paul... a dream is where it all begins. Nice serene poetry - thank you Paul - Lindsay

Paul Callus

October 27, 2015 at 12:21 PM

I am pleased that you find serenity in this poem, Lindsay; it's something that I aimed at. Thank you for reading and commenting. ~ All the best. // paul

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser

October 26, 2015 at 9:28 AM

Paul, metaphorical verse 1 but very nice reflecting, and the second verse more reality striking, challenging... I like the ending marks it suits well the message you want to convey!~Olive Eloisa =`)

Paul Callus

October 27, 2015 at 12:04 PM

Hi Olive_eloi:) Your comments are always lovely, sincere and insightful. Thank you:) Hugs // paul

Tim Smith

October 26, 2015 at 3:52 AM

Lovely verse Paul. We can always dream.

Paul Callus

October 27, 2015 at 11:43 AM

Thank you, Tim. Yes, we can dream, but some dreams need time to blossom...and time is so short! // paul

Kim Merryman

October 25, 2015 at 9:21 PM

A delightful write, Paul! Love, Kim

Paul Callus

October 27, 2015 at 11:29 AM

Thank you, Kim, for reading and liking! ~ regards // paul

Poet Destroyer A

October 25, 2015 at 8:42 PM

A beautiful poem, a delightful read. I sense a small realization to my favorite poem of all time. "footprints." God is light, reaching every question of the heart. Love this Paul. LINDA

Paul Callus

October 27, 2015 at 11:28 AM

Hi Linda! missed your visits! Hope all is well. Thank you for stopping by with lovely feedback. Glad you enjoyed. Hugs // paul