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Charlie's Two Seven Four Contest ~ August 26, 2025

Autumn Zephyrs tsf

Wind blows
Fall's leaves
around.
Tumbling
without
mumbling
a sound.

The tree
then grieves
its loss.
Watching
them tossed
upon
the ground.

Autumn
zephyrs
bluster
as leaves
fluster,
wither
and die.

Nature's
last call
sends them
twirling.
swirling
alone...
goodbye.

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Andrea Dietrich Date: 9/14/2025 3:14:00 PM Wow. The internal rhyming made this extra special. A first place for me! Login to Reply Lin Lane Date: 9/15/2025 8:46:00 AM I truly appreciate your comments, Andrea. I left the same message on your 2nd place, which also deserved to be among the plethora of firsts.

Charles Messina Date: 9/14/2025 3:50:00 AM Very nicely written, Lin. Falls knocking on our doorsteps. Congratulations on your placement and thanks so much for entering my contest. Hugs Charlie Login to Reply

Victor Buhagiar Date: 8/27/2025 1:47:00 AM Brilliant. I cannot emulate, I'm afraid. Your contest entry should get first place. Victor Login to Reply Lin Lane Date: 8/28/2025 6:12:00 AM Thank you very much for your kind thoughts, Victor.

Connie Pachecho Date: 8/26/2025 8:07:00 PM Lin, I like Charlies contest, and the 274 form because it streamlines the poem, and keeps it balance and neat. You did a great job. Login to Reply Lin Lane Date: 8/27/2025 1:18:00 AM I rather like it, too. Many thanks. Connie.

Hilda Greenhough Date: 8/26/2025 2:04:00 PM This is a nice rhyme and tale. Login to Reply Lin Lane Date: 8/27/2025 1:17:00 AM Thank you, Hilda.

David Kavanagh Date: 8/26/2025 8:03:00 AM My driveway at the moment is testament to your poem Lin! I’ve never thought of the tree as grieving for its fallen leaves, no more than shedding old skin, the cycle of life personified quite emotively here, cheers David Login to Reply Lin Lane Date: 8/26/2025 9:26:00 AM I've always had a soft spot for fallen leaves. A bit unrealistic, but short-lived when Spring has them reappearing. Thanks a lot for your life cycle thoughts, David. Your driveway will clear itself when the first stiff wind comes along. ;-)

Duke Beaufort Date: 8/26/2025 6:55:00 AM Lin, thanks for this perspective. I am thinking why leaves fall. The tree can't supply them with nourishment in the winter and cuts them off. In a way, like a jilted lover. All pretty sad stuff, but nature seems to be full of some pretty hard choices. Just for the privilege of being specialized, we lose our longevity. Even the needles on pines eventually die and fall off. I am sweeping them up all the time, and now will do so with a slightly more sad understanding. Login to Reply Lin Lane Date: 8/26/2025 9:24:00 AM There's a long-term plan for many things. Mankind is not counted in that number... like a jilted lover. Good comparison, but at least we don't change mated with the coming and going of each season. ;-) Thanks, Duke.

Tania Kitchin Date: 8/26/2025 5:42:00 AM Lin, love the progression of Autumn in your poem and the beautiful imagery. Login to Reply Lin Lane Date: 8/26/2025 6:31:00 AM Good morning and thanks a lot for your thoughts. Enjoy the rest of your week and hope all is well with Ziggy.