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Autumn Stripped Bare

Autumn’s pretty dress drifts slowly to the ground She shivers as the rich russet robe gently falls Her dress dances in the breeze, making a rustling sound It floats down leaving a crunchy blanket under our feet We must wait for spring until her green dress is complete Autumn’s glorious colour fades and soon winter calls Nature’s ever changing beauty is such a wonderful treat I adore how the seasons transform our countryside around 10-26-16

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Jannie Breedt

Date: 11/16/2016 11:50:00 PM

Hi Jan , yes very visual indeed. Congratulations on your placement.

Jan Allison
Date: 11/17/2016 3:14:00 AM

Thanks so much Jannie:-) hugs Jan xx

Nette Onclaud

Date: 11/9/2016 2:56:00 PM

just remarkable, jan... congrats to you; well done!..huggs

Jan Allison
Date: 11/9/2016 4:02:00 PM

Thanks Nette:-) hugs Jan xx

Barry Stebbings

Date: 11/9/2016 9:15:00 AM

Congratulations on you win, Jan. I always think of Autumn as female. Lovely pictorial write. Barry

Jan Allison
Date: 11/9/2016 9:15:00 AM

Thanks Barry:-) hugs Jan xx

Alexis Y.

Date: 11/9/2016 6:43:00 AM

Hi Jan, I'm just coming back to say congratulations on your fine win:-) Alexis

Jan Allison
Date: 11/9/2016 6:56:00 AM

Thanks Alexis:-) hugs Jan xx

Lu Loo

Date: 11/8/2016 1:48:00 PM

beautiful Jan!! thank you for being a part of my contest and congratulations on your placement :) -luloo

Jan Allison
Date: 11/8/2016 2:11:00 PM

Many thanks for my great placement LuLoo:-) hugs Jan xx

Jean Murray

Date: 10/29/2016 9:18:00 AM

I love the way she is female. It just seems so right. Beautiful poem Jan.

Jan Allison
Date: 10/29/2016 10:21:00 AM

I always think of autumn as female wearing a beautiful gown:-) hugs Jan xx

Darren White

Date: 10/28/2016 8:40:00 AM

This is my favourite rhyme scheme, a form of enclosed rhyme that I use most often. Perhaps not on Soup, but most definitely on my blog. I love your poem very much! Good luck in the contest, and many hugs :)

Jan Allison
Date: 10/28/2016 12:26:00 PM

Thanks Darren I struggled with the ending as I am used to more formal rhyme schemes your comment has made my day:-) hugs Jan xx

Rainbow Promise

Date: 10/27/2016 6:06:00 PM

A good description of Autumn's seasonal change. She gently eases us into the harshness of the next with many bare branches

Jan Allison
Date: 10/28/2016 12:24:00 PM

Thanks rainbow:-) I always smile when I see your name as a rainbow makes me smile:-) hugs Jan xx

Tim Smith

Date: 10/27/2016 1:58:00 PM

I love the Autumn and it's beauty. Just not that excited what's behind. Reports are for the snowiest Winter in awhile here.

Jan Allison
Date: 10/27/2016 2:34:00 PM

Oh gosh Tim I hope it's not as bad as they predict:-( hugs Jan xx

John Lawless

Date: 10/27/2016 1:11:00 PM

WOW!! That opening couplet is magnificent. I can see the pale skin of autumn as her radiance slowly falls. Beautifully visual Jan.

Jan Allison
Date: 10/27/2016 1:52:00 PM

Thanks John, autumn is my favourite season:-) hugs Jan xx

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 10/27/2016 8:33:00 AM

- Jan, a glorious painting :) - Good luck in the contest - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Jan Allison
Date: 10/27/2016 12:09:00 PM

Thanks Anne-lise :-) hugs Jan xx

Agnes Krampe

Date: 10/27/2016 7:24:00 AM

I like the image of autumn's dress, Jan. Beautifully done. Good luck in the contest. Agnes

Jan Allison
Date: 10/27/2016 12:10:00 PM

I love this time of year Agnes:-) hugs Jan xx

Paloma P

Date: 10/27/2016 5:06:00 AM

A beauty Jan, that second line is fabulous!

Jan Allison
Date: 10/27/2016 12:11:00 PM

Thanks Paloma:-) hugs Jan xx

White Wolf

Date: 10/26/2016 7:44:00 PM

The first line really gets this moving, makes me think of the autumn as a goddess, or deity of sorts. Beautifully composed Jan. And good luck.

Jan Allison
Date: 10/27/2016 12:13:00 PM

I wanted to use personification throughout the poem utility ran out of steam at the end lol:-) thanks for the lovely comment Budgie hugs Jan xx

Ilene Bauer

Date: 10/26/2016 7:16:00 PM

a lovely poem about my favorite season! best of luck in the contest, jan...

Jan Allison
Date: 10/27/2016 12:14:00 PM

It's my favourite too Ilene:-) hugs Jan xx

Alexis Y.

Date: 10/26/2016 5:59:00 PM

Hi Jan, This is just beautiful. The imagery is good as well. I enjoyed the lovely scene. I wish you the best of luck in the contest:-) Alexis

Jan Allison
Date: 10/27/2016 12:15:00 PM

Thanks Alexis I love autumn and the glorious colours:-) hugs Jan xx

Daniel Turner

Date: 10/26/2016 5:20:00 PM

Lovely imagery in this one Jan. I love "nature's ever changing beauty". Nothing comes close to her beauty!

Jan Allison
Date: 10/27/2016 12:16:00 PM

It's my favourite time of year Daniel:-) hugs Jan xx