Jan Allison Poet Rhyme

Autumn Stripped Bare

Autumn’s pretty dress drifts slowly to the ground 
She shivers as the rich russet robe gently  falls
Her dress dances in the breeze, making a rustling sound

It floats down leaving a crunchy blanket under our feet
We must wait for spring until her green dress is complete

Autumn’s glorious colour fades and soon winter calls
Nature’s ever changing beauty is such a wonderful treat 
I adore how the seasons transform our countryside around


10-26-16

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Jannie Breedt November 16, 2016 at 11:50 PM Hi Jan , yes very visual indeed. Congratulations on your placement. Jan Allison November 17, 2016 at 3:14 AM Thanks so much Jannie:-) hugs Jan xx

Nette Onclaud November 9, 2016 at 2:56 PM just remarkable, jan... congrats to you; well done!..huggs Jan Allison November 9, 2016 at 4:02 PM Thanks Nette:-) hugs Jan xx

Barry Stebbings November 9, 2016 at 9:15 AM Congratulations on you win, Jan. I always think of Autumn as female. Lovely pictorial write. Barry Jan Allison November 9, 2016 at 9:15 AM Thanks Barry:-) hugs Jan xx

Alexis Y. November 9, 2016 at 6:43 AM Hi Jan, I'm just coming back to say congratulations on your fine win:-) Alexis Jan Allison November 9, 2016 at 6:56 AM Thanks Alexis:-) hugs Jan xx

Beautiful Scars November 8, 2016 at 1:48 PM beautiful Jan!! thank you for being a part of my contest and congratulations on your placement :) -luloo Jan Allison November 8, 2016 at 2:11 PM Many thanks for my great placement LuLoo:-) hugs Jan xx

Jean Murray October 29, 2016 at 9:18 AM I love the way she is female. It just seems so right. Beautiful poem Jan. Jan Allison October 29, 2016 at 10:21 AM I always think of autumn as female wearing a beautiful gown:-) hugs Jan xx

Darren White October 28, 2016 at 8:40 AM This is my favourite rhyme scheme, a form of enclosed rhyme that I use most often. Perhaps not on Soup, but most definitely on my blog. I love your poem very much! Good luck in the contest, and many hugs :) Jan Allison October 28, 2016 at 12:26 PM Thanks Darren I struggled with the ending as I am used to more formal rhyme schemes your comment has made my day:-) hugs Jan xx

Rainbow Promise October 27, 2016 at 6:06 PM A good description of Autumn's seasonal change. She gently eases us into the harshness of the next with many bare branches Jan Allison October 28, 2016 at 12:24 PM Thanks rainbow:-) I always smile when I see your name as a rainbow makes me smile:-) hugs Jan xx

Tim Smith October 27, 2016 at 1:58 PM I love the Autumn and it's beauty. Just not that excited what's behind. Reports are for the snowiest Winter in awhile here. Jan Allison October 27, 2016 at 2:34 PM Oh gosh Tim I hope it's not as bad as they predict:-( hugs Jan xx

John Lawless October 27, 2016 at 1:11 PM WOW!! That opening couplet is magnificent. I can see the pale skin of autumn as her radiance slowly falls. Beautifully visual Jan. Jan Allison October 27, 2016 at 1:52 PM Thanks John, autumn is my favourite season:-) hugs Jan xx

Anne-Lise Andresen October 27, 2016 at 8:33 AM - Jan, a glorious painting :) - Good luck in the contest - hugs // Anne-Lise :) Jan Allison October 27, 2016 at 12:09 PM Thanks Anne-lise :-) hugs Jan xx

Agnes Krampe October 27, 2016 at 7:24 AM I like the image of autumn's dress, Jan. Beautifully done. Good luck in the contest. Agnes Jan Allison October 27, 2016 at 12:10 PM I love this time of year Agnes:-) hugs Jan xx

Paloma P October 27, 2016 at 5:06 AM A beauty Jan, that second line is fabulous! Jan Allison October 27, 2016 at 12:11 PM Thanks Paloma:-) hugs Jan xx

White Wolf October 26, 2016 at 7:44 PM The first line really gets this moving, makes me think of the autumn as a goddess, or deity of sorts. Beautifully composed Jan. And good luck. Jan Allison October 27, 2016 at 12:13 PM I wanted to use personification throughout the poem utility ran out of steam at the end lol:-) thanks for the lovely comment Budgie hugs Jan xx

Ilene Bauer October 26, 2016 at 7:16 PM a lovely poem about my favorite season! best of luck in the contest, jan... Jan Allison October 27, 2016 at 12:14 PM It's my favourite too Ilene:-) hugs Jan xx

Alexis Y. October 26, 2016 at 5:59 PM Hi Jan, This is just beautiful. The imagery is good as well. I enjoyed the lovely scene. I wish you the best of luck in the contest:-) Alexis Jan Allison October 27, 2016 at 12:15 PM Thanks Alexis I love autumn and the glorious colours:-) hugs Jan xx

Daniel Turner October 26, 2016 at 5:20 PM Lovely imagery in this one Jan. I love "nature's ever changing beauty". Nothing comes close to her beauty! Jan Allison October 27, 2016 at 12:16 PM It's my favourite time of year Daniel:-) hugs Jan xx