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Autumn Stripped Bare

Autumn’s pretty dress drifts slowly to the ground 
She shivers as the rich russet robe gently  falls
Her dress dances in the breeze, making a rustling sound

It floats down leaving a crunchy blanket under our feet
We must wait for spring until her green dress is complete

Autumn’s glorious colour fades and soon winter calls
Nature’s ever changing beauty is such a wonderful treat 
I adore how the seasons transform our countryside around


10-26-16

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Jannie Breedt Date: 11/16/2016 11:50:00 PM Hi Jan , yes very visual indeed. Congratulations on your placement. Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 11/17/2016 3:14:00 AM Thanks so much Jannie:-) hugs Jan xx

Nette Onclaud Date: 11/9/2016 2:56:00 PM just remarkable, jan... congrats to you; well done!..huggs Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 11/9/2016 4:02:00 PM Thanks Nette:-) hugs Jan xx

Barry Stebbings Date: 11/9/2016 9:15:00 AM Congratulations on you win, Jan. I always think of Autumn as female. Lovely pictorial write. Barry Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 11/9/2016 9:15:00 AM Thanks Barry:-) hugs Jan xx

Alexis Y. Date: 11/9/2016 6:43:00 AM Hi Jan, I'm just coming back to say congratulations on your fine win:-) Alexis Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 11/9/2016 6:56:00 AM Thanks Alexis:-) hugs Jan xx

Beautiful Scars Date: 11/8/2016 1:48:00 PM beautiful Jan!! thank you for being a part of my contest and congratulations on your placement :) -luloo Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 11/8/2016 2:11:00 PM Many thanks for my great placement LuLoo:-) hugs Jan xx

Jean Murray Date: 10/29/2016 9:18:00 AM I love the way she is female. It just seems so right. Beautiful poem Jan. Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 10/29/2016 10:21:00 AM I always think of autumn as female wearing a beautiful gown:-) hugs Jan xx

Darren White Date: 10/28/2016 8:40:00 AM This is my favourite rhyme scheme, a form of enclosed rhyme that I use most often. Perhaps not on Soup, but most definitely on my blog. I love your poem very much! Good luck in the contest, and many hugs :) Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 10/28/2016 12:26:00 PM Thanks Darren I struggled with the ending as I am used to more formal rhyme schemes your comment has made my day:-) hugs Jan xx

Rainbow Promise Date: 10/27/2016 6:06:00 PM A good description of Autumn's seasonal change. She gently eases us into the harshness of the next with many bare branches Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 10/28/2016 12:24:00 PM Thanks rainbow:-) I always smile when I see your name as a rainbow makes me smile:-) hugs Jan xx

Tim Smith Date: 10/27/2016 1:58:00 PM I love the Autumn and it's beauty. Just not that excited what's behind. Reports are for the snowiest Winter in awhile here. Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 10/27/2016 2:34:00 PM Oh gosh Tim I hope it's not as bad as they predict:-( hugs Jan xx

John Lawless Date: 10/27/2016 1:11:00 PM WOW!! That opening couplet is magnificent. I can see the pale skin of autumn as her radiance slowly falls. Beautifully visual Jan. Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 10/27/2016 1:52:00 PM Thanks John, autumn is my favourite season:-) hugs Jan xx

Anne-Lise Andresen Date: 10/27/2016 8:33:00 AM - Jan, a glorious painting :) - Good luck in the contest - hugs // Anne-Lise :) Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 10/27/2016 12:09:00 PM Thanks Anne-lise :-) hugs Jan xx

Agnes Krampe Date: 10/27/2016 7:24:00 AM I like the image of autumn's dress, Jan. Beautifully done. Good luck in the contest. Agnes Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 10/27/2016 12:10:00 PM I love this time of year Agnes:-) hugs Jan xx

Paloma P Date: 10/27/2016 5:06:00 AM A beauty Jan, that second line is fabulous! Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 10/27/2016 12:11:00 PM Thanks Paloma:-) hugs Jan xx

White Wolf Date: 10/26/2016 7:44:00 PM The first line really gets this moving, makes me think of the autumn as a goddess, or deity of sorts. Beautifully composed Jan. And good luck. Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 10/27/2016 12:13:00 PM I wanted to use personification throughout the poem utility ran out of steam at the end lol:-) thanks for the lovely comment Budgie hugs Jan xx

Ilene Bauer Date: 10/26/2016 7:16:00 PM a lovely poem about my favorite season! best of luck in the contest, jan... Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 10/27/2016 12:14:00 PM It's my favourite too Ilene:-) hugs Jan xx

Alexis Y. Date: 10/26/2016 5:59:00 PM Hi Jan, This is just beautiful. The imagery is good as well. I enjoyed the lovely scene. I wish you the best of luck in the contest:-) Alexis Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 10/27/2016 12:15:00 PM Thanks Alexis I love autumn and the glorious colours:-) hugs Jan xx

Daniel Turner Date: 10/26/2016 5:20:00 PM Lovely imagery in this one Jan. I love "nature's ever changing beauty". Nothing comes close to her beauty! Login to Reply Jan Allison Date: 10/27/2016 12:16:00 PM It's my favourite time of year Daniel:-) hugs Jan xx