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Atonement

Atonement
I wish life had its own sharp erasers, Like pencils have erasers, lead and point And have erasers ready and handy We can right our wrongs without traces. Removing anything with firm yet soft strokes Leaving no trace of the previous mistakes Making it seem there was no imperfection. Except, of course those pink remnants. Erasers don’t pretend to justify errors, What they do is only try to justify. Don’t forget we have the greatest eraser That leaves no those pink remnants. That is prayer to the Lord for atonement We can right our wrongs without traces.
+++++ Motif : Religious/Philosophical Date :2-5-14 Dr. Ram Mehta FOURTH PLACE WIN Contest: Impress Me III by Giorgio V.

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Date: 2/12/2014 9:06:00 PM
yes........we have all wished for such a thing......to erase past mistakes...... I suppose we will never learn however without our mistakes to teach us. I love the theme of this one!
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Date: 2/12/2014 12:32:00 AM
Erase the past and move forward with the present... Good write and well written... Verlena - Dark Sunshine
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Date: 2/11/2014 8:42:00 PM
surprising from a religious man such as you. but it would seem you have all things in perspective and that is good. the rest of the world will one day be this way.
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Date: 2/11/2014 6:46:00 AM
Beautiful read I really enjoyed this piece. Thanks for sharing
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Date: 2/10/2014 5:24:00 PM
Just to have the opportunity to atone for our mistakes is a gift in itself. I really enjoyed this inspiring poem! Very nicely written, Dr. Ram. Congratulations on your win, as well!
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Date: 2/10/2014 12:27:00 AM
Great verses! Congrats on your fine win, Dr. Ram!!!
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Date: 2/9/2014 2:42:00 PM
Congrats as well on your win!!
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Date: 2/9/2014 2:41:00 PM
LOve your work, an thank you for the congrats, keep in touch my friend . Shi
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Date: 2/9/2014 2:33:00 PM
Dr. Ram I like it...David
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Date: 2/8/2014 8:48:00 PM
Congratulations on the winner you have here, Dr. Ram.
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Date: 2/8/2014 12:34:00 PM
Dr. Ram..congratulations!!!!...
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Date: 2/8/2014 12:57:00 AM
I really love this work. Bravo Dr. Ram Mehta!
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Date: 2/7/2014 7:45:00 PM
Winner List: Impress me III! (Old / New) Sponsored by: Giorgio V. are posted and I will: Congratulate you with your winning poem,Dr.Ram !!! - oxox // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 2/7/2014 11:58:00 AM
A winning one I see here,the reality here is unbeatable; the flowery words decorate the reality; I have said without season : there are poets and there are poets. You stand out Dr. Ram.
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Date: 2/7/2014 4:36:00 AM
Enjoyed reading your thoughts and observations Yet the journey is not still easy..' Dr Ram; Good one indeed..'
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Date: 2/6/2014 6:43:00 AM
Hello Dr Ram! First, Congratulations on all your wins and winning wishes for this fine poem.. sonnet! Your poems have always explored great variety of topics and they never fail to impress me! Yes, we can always seek atonement, we should..loved your perception here and as you write, this sonnet looks so effortless.Thank you Dr Ram for your compositions.. Regards, noyna
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Date: 2/5/2014 9:57:00 AM
Hello Dr. Ram Mehta, "Erasers don’t pretend to justify errors, What they do is only try to justify. Don’t forget we have the greatest eraser That leaves no those pink remnants." Great verse!...very inspiration work, with a hint of whimsy!...enjoyed it very much!//Sinclair
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Date: 2/5/2014 9:48:00 AM
Dr. Ram. Yes, our last resort is Lord, to beg with Him every our wrongs to be forgiven.
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