Dr.Ram Mehta Poet Free verse

Atonement

Atonement 

I wish life had its own sharp erasers,
Like pencils have erasers, lead and point
And have erasers ready and handy
We can right our wrongs without traces.

Removing anything with firm yet soft strokes
Leaving no trace of the previous mistakes
Making it seem there was no imperfection.
Except, of course those pink remnants.

Erasers don’t pretend to justify errors,
What they do is only try to justify.
Don’t forget we have the greatest eraser
That leaves no those pink remnants.

That is prayer to the Lord for atonement
We can right our wrongs without traces.

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Motif : Religious/Philosophical
Date :2-5-14
Dr. Ram Mehta
FOURTH PLACE WIN
Contest: Impress Me III by Giorgio V.

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Carrie Richards February 12, 2014 at 9:06 PM yes........we have all wished for such a thing......to erase past mistakes...... I suppose we will never learn however without our mistakes to teach us. I love the theme of this one!

Verlena S. Walker February 12, 2014 at 12:32 AM Erase the past and move forward with the present... Good write and well written... Verlena - Dark Sunshine

John Loving Iii February 11, 2014 at 8:42 PM surprising from a religious man such as you. but it would seem you have all things in perspective and that is good. the rest of the world will one day be this way.

Cathy Moore February 11, 2014 at 6:46 AM Beautiful read I really enjoyed this piece. Thanks for sharing

Kelly Deschler February 10, 2014 at 5:24 PM Just to have the opportunity to atone for our mistakes is a gift in itself. I really enjoyed this inspiring poem! Very nicely written, Dr. Ram. Congratulations on your win, as well!

Abdulhafeez Oyewole February 10, 2014 at 12:27 AM Great verses! Congrats on your fine win, Dr. Ram!!!

Shi Ricks February 9, 2014 at 2:42 PM Congrats as well on your win!!

Shi Ricks February 9, 2014 at 2:41 PM LOve your work, an thank you for the congrats, keep in touch my friend . Shi

David Williams February 9, 2014 at 2:33 PM Dr. Ram I like it...David

Robert Pettit February 8, 2014 at 8:48 PM Congratulations on the winner you have here, Dr. Ram.

Aiyah Torres February 8, 2014 at 12:34 PM Dr. Ram..congratulations!!!!...

Teddy Kimathi February 8, 2014 at 12:57 AM I really love this work. Bravo Dr. Ram Mehta!

Anne-Lise Andresen February 7, 2014 at 7:45 PM Winner List: Impress me III! (Old / New) Sponsored by: Giorgio V. are posted and I will: Congratulate you with your winning poem,Dr.Ram !!! - oxox // Anne-Lise :)

Kayod5 Kayode February 7, 2014 at 11:58 AM A winning one I see here,the reality here is unbeatable; the flowery words decorate the reality; I have said without season : there are poets and there are poets. You stand out Dr. Ram.

Joe Maverick February 7, 2014 at 4:36 AM Enjoyed reading your thoughts and observations Yet the journey is not still easy..' Dr Ram; Good one indeed..'

Gautami Phookan February 6, 2014 at 6:43 AM Hello Dr Ram! First, Congratulations on all your wins and winning wishes for this fine poem.. sonnet! Your poems have always explored great variety of topics and they never fail to impress me! Yes, we can always seek atonement, we should..loved your perception here and as you write, this sonnet looks so effortless.Thank you Dr Ram for your compositions.. Regards, noyna

Robert Rogers February 5, 2014 at 9:57 AM Hello Dr. Ram Mehta, "Erasers don’t pretend to justify errors, What they do is only try to justify. Don’t forget we have the greatest eraser That leaves no those pink remnants." Great verse!...very inspiration work, with a hint of whimsy!...enjoyed it very much!//Sinclair

Deepak Chalise February 5, 2014 at 9:48 AM Dr. Ram. Yes, our last resort is Lord, to beg with Him every our wrongs to be forgiven.