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with the sun setting, dusk darkens the ground below and vistas fade out~ days flee like defeated youth as we tread slow to our grave

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Date: 7/31/2022 8:03:00 AM
Whoa!! A reminder that death comes to us all at some time which is unknown only to God. I enjoyed reading this one today. My spirit was aloft from your visit to my poem. Sara
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Date: 7/30/2022 12:08:00 PM
Hi Valsa, I felt the depth of this wonderful Tanka. You let your metaphorical heart sing within this one. "Days flee like defeated youth, as we tread slow to our grave." Those words say it all. An excellent Tanka. Have a wonderful evening. Hugs always ..... Mike. XX. Another fave for this evening.
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Date: 7/30/2022 11:10:00 AM
Stirring emotive poetry Valsa, you have captured the inexorable path through life with beautiful metaphor, tread slow indeed, cheers David
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Date: 7/30/2022 7:06:00 AM
Valsa, you have created an atmosphere that compels one to think with this tanka that uses metaphors. Such is life, my friend, everyone " tread slowly to our grave".Be blessed
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Date: 7/29/2022 6:30:00 PM
But with COVID-19, monkeypox, polio, et al, some of us are taking the Express ride.Enjoyed! Aloha!
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Date: 7/29/2022 8:46:00 AM
With this heat and low BP, I felt your poem alive. Hugs.
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Date: 7/29/2022 7:34:00 AM
I really like this metaphorical tanka, Valsa.
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Date: 7/29/2022 6:42:00 AM
You set the thought-provoking mood. Excellent. Hugs ~ Kim
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Date: 7/29/2022 5:36:00 AM
I find the essence of your poem in this line: days flee like defeated youth--such is life.
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