Asylum

Asylum Buzzzzzz!!! Buzzzzzzzz!!! Where is that sneaky stinger? (as he swats away at his imaginary insect) I know it's here somewhere I can hear him buzzing around Buzzzzzz!!! Buzzzzzzzz!! See there it is again! This damn Bee is gonna make me crazy! (no pun intended) And where's my lunch? It's egg salad day! (it's only 6 am and it is tuna day) I'm tired of the games from these helpers! Ethel!! We need to fire these bastards now! Where is my damn lunch? (Ethel has been dead for 3 years) Buzzzzz!!! Buzzzzzzz!!! Ohhh well I'll get you Bee! Ouch! Hey I need some attention here I've just been stung! I'm allergic to that bee & the stinger was at least 6 inches long! Help!!! Help!!! Help!!! (but no help will come) Damn you miserable bastards! Damn you all! Where is Ethel she'll take care of this sting...she'll... (he falls to his knees and begins to weep uncontrollably) Buzzzz!!! Buzzzzzz!!! Buzzzzzzzz!!! Buzzzzzzzzzzz!!! (there are no bee's in this padded room only madness) revised@05/06/17

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Charlotte Puddifoot

Date: 3/25/2017 11:30:00 AM

this would've been a good one for the 'completely different' contest! it's good to step outside the box sometimes...i wrote a modern sonnet 'soul-stung' on a similar theme...congrats on your win in the contest!

Brian Davey
Date: 3/31/2017 4:36:00 AM

Thank you and I believe you are right it would've been good for that contest. I am gonna head on over to your page now and check out soul-stung!

Moon Flower

Date: 5/14/2016 10:13:00 AM

First time I read a poem like this. I was like 'whoa' and 'omg' sort of haha. Well done, Brian. I hope I could join your contest.

Brian Davey
Date: 5/15/2016 4:00:00 PM

Thank you Moon Flower and darker poetry takes more to getting use to because most people don't want to face the reality of struggle!

Mark Peterson

Date: 5/13/2016 8:57:00 PM

Well, at least he's not in solitary. Enjoyable little write, Brian.

Brian Davey
Date: 5/14/2016 1:22:00 AM

Thank you Mark

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 5/12/2016 8:06:00 PM

a good depiction of a crazed man in a padded room, Brian. what made you think to do this one?

Brian Davey
Date: 5/13/2016 2:45:00 AM

Well basically after I posted my new contest "Split Personalities" to where I stated to all who may enter that I wanted to see some craziness in their writes I decided to do a poem with a bit of craziness in it but on a little bit different theme than my contest! And Wa-La

Constance La France

Date: 5/12/2016 3:25:00 PM

wow, incredible write, I was enthralled from word one

Brian Davey
Date: 5/12/2016 6:24:00 PM

Thank you Constance I am ecstatic my words can capture your attention and enthrall you while reading them! Ding there is my first real smile of the day!