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Asteroid Gravity Graced

Asteroid You were out of this world named for the Perseids the meteor that exploded in two striking the blue between the sun and the moon the massive spark an exclamation mark that punctuated perfectly my “hey we’re going to see some awesome...” fireworks tonight and a week later Gravity led me to you all arctic and wolfy all wild and white a firecracker alright You were out of this world a brilliant light in my life for fourteen years Graced after you died I learned a meteor had streaked that very same sky the same day my gift from the heavens the heavens reclaimed Asteroid 2000-2014 8.13.2020 Composed for Constance La France’s All Pets Go To Heaven Poetry Contest

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Vijay Pandit

Date: 9/9/2020 7:20:00 AM

Your poem deserves all the accolades it has received, Maureen--a touching write--superb ending lines. Congrats on being featured near the TOP of best poems ..and congrats on your win in the contest.

Susan Lawrence

Date: 9/8/2020 1:07:00 PM

Pigeon, Wonderful...endearing, mystical, soulful. I love this tribute as it brings me from ancient past into heavenly present. The love you felt and still feel vibrates. "...the massive spark an exclamation mark ..." love this. there is nothing like the unconditional love of a pet. congrats, Susan

Constance La France

Date: 8/31/2020 10:32:00 AM

Pigeon, congratulations on your win in my All Pets Go to Heaven challenge _Constance

Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 9/2/2020 7:01:00 AM

Thank you so much for my placement, and for inspiring. Warm wishes and hugs, xomo

Tom Cunningham

Date: 8/28/2020 1:57:00 AM

They leave such a void when they go Maureen, congrats on your win and being number one, well deserved. Tom

Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 8/28/2020 4:57:00 AM

Thank you Tom (& wow!) :))) xomo!

V. Deepa

Date: 8/27/2020 7:04:00 AM

A touching ,poignant write about your asteroid...you must be missing him a lot..I understand your deep feelings.. reading this tale Mo mam.. Take care.Have a lovely day.Much love:-)

V. Deepa
Date: 8/27/2020 7:23:00 AM

Thankyou for sharing your joy with me Mo mam... And for clarifying me that Asteroid was a "She":-) I love your doves names :-)

Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 8/27/2020 7:10:00 AM

Thank you Deepa! Asteroid was a she, I got an idea where that “b“ word got it’s use, giggles, her nicknames was “Megab****”. I seem to like my dogs female, and my doves male... my old birds are named “Loverboy” and “Prince Charming” ;), A wonderful day to you my friend! xomo

Joe Dimino

Date: 8/27/2020 5:29:00 AM

They are precious love. Beautiful, touching tribute. I sympathize. A fav!

Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 8/27/2020 6:50:00 AM

Thank you Joe! She, my muse, was spectacular. ;), xomo!

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 8/25/2020 12:23:00 PM

- Fourteen years is a lot ... but, great sorrow when they die :) - Congratulations on your win, Maureen :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 8/25/2020 5:37:00 PM

Thank you Anne-Lise. She was my first, I found it was the count down from 8 weeks... I rather like not knowing how old my present dog is, she’s getting up there, but every day is a gift. Hugs! xomo

Rob Carmack

Date: 8/24/2020 4:36:00 PM

Clever and well done. I like how you did this. Congratsl

Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 8/25/2020 5:33:00 PM

Thank you a Rob! xomo

John Watt

Date: 8/22/2020 4:30:00 PM

Pidge, I just adore how you wrote this, framed by the three words in your title and interconnecting the themes of light, meteors, firecrackers, and all the celestial references of sky, world, sun, moon, gravity. Like your beloved dog and you were meant to orbit around each other. Beautiful, soulful writing, my friend. A fav for the archives ~ John

Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 8/23/2020 12:06:00 PM

Thank you so much John. I do indeed believe we were fated for one another. I saw so many puppies that day, the moment she was in my arms my gut just knew. Have a lovely day my friend! xomo

Caren Krutsinger

Date: 8/20/2020 3:20:00 PM

the meteor was the perfect touch

Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 8/21/2020 9:21:00 AM

It really was! Blew me away :))) xomo! <3

Sharon Keely

Date: 8/17/2020 9:02:00 AM

This is beautiful PT. Another "fave".

Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 8/18/2020 7:22:00 PM

Thank you Sharon! xomo!

Quoth Theraven

Date: 8/15/2020 5:06:00 PM

You said it was so and so it was. 'all arctic and wolfy..all wild and white' - Such a worthwhile cause to take up for 14 turns 'round the sun. And such a fine tribute to the 'brilliant light in my life'. -Richard

Quoth Theraven
Date: 8/16/2020 3:25:00 PM

Summer Sunday suffering from ennui and reminiscing over sad songs. Perfectly fine day. "] -R

Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 8/16/2020 5:56:00 AM

Thank you Richard. I was owned by a wolf dog, now I own a dog; it is so much easier, but I wouldn’t trade the experience for the world. I am a serial dog owner now, and I work with dogs, thanks to her. Have a wonderful day! xomo

Robert Lindley

Date: 8/15/2020 4:36:00 PM

A beautifully crafted poem my friend.. A gem and a fav too... God bless...X8K

Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 8/16/2020 6:02:00 AM

Thank you so much Robert! I did get crafty. So much I could write about her I was afraid I would never finish, so I stuck to the story. Have a wonderful day! xomo

Janice Canerdy

Date: 8/14/2020 12:41:00 PM

Maureen, this is SO beautiful and moving--especially the last two lines! Janice

Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 8/16/2020 6:04:00 AM

Thank you Janice! I was blown away when I heard about it the next day, glad I appear to have captured that. xomo!

John Lawless

Date: 8/14/2020 5:09:00 AM

...and thus she saved her words and wove them into majesty. Great work Mo. If this don't top the list we'll start a senate investigation

Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 8/14/2020 5:47:00 AM

...not so fast. I’m not sure this is emotive enough for the sponsor’s taste. Thank you John! It wasn’t that I didn’t know where to begin, I was afraid I wouldn’t end ~x

David Kavanagh

Date: 8/14/2020 4:26:00 AM

Great piece of free verse super Mo Exclamation mark and punctuation brilliant lines, so versatile a poet cheers David

Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 8/14/2020 5:48:00 AM

Thank you fabulous Dave, xomo!

Jeff Connelly

Date: 8/13/2020 8:12:00 PM

Maureen an amazing bright and shining star in your array of poetry!!! I love how the title (something YOU taught me about) makes this poem so tight and one within itself. Pardon, but it made me think about "alignments"; gravitational pull, BUT most certainly about Mark Twain and Halley's comet. If needed to remember Mark Twains' age at death: he was born and died on the arrival of that comet every 75 years. Maybe I'm throwing in unrelated facts reading your poem, but Maureen, this works for me.

Jeff Connelly
Date: 8/14/2020 1:03:00 PM

So true about Twain. He made some sort of comment about how two oddities came into the world the same day; so they should also go out the same. 75 years later Haley's Comet came back and left; as did Twain.

Jeff Connelly
Date: 8/14/2020 12:58:00 PM

Rose, how sweet. Mi Musa just rescued a very sweet and intelligent Border Collie named Sade, and I told her the same, "He was fated to be saved by you." Videos and photos I've seen show the love in his eyes.

Maureen Mcgreavy
Date: 8/14/2020 5:56:00 AM

I did not know that but it’s relevance is sparkling! We were fated her and I, I know that. And my second dog too. Have I mentioned my love of “The Little Prince”? ...my second came with the name Rose. ;),