Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart Poet Narrative

Asteroid Gravity Graced

Asteroid


You were out of this world 
named for the Perseids
the meteor 
that exploded in two striking the blue 
between the sun and the moon 
the massive spark an exclamation mark
that punctuated perfectly my
“hey we’re going to see some awesome...”

fireworks tonight and
a week later


    Gravity 


led me to you
all arctic and wolfy
all wild and white
a firecracker alright
You were out of this world 
a brilliant light in my life for
fourteen years


     Graced


after you died 
I learned a meteor 
had streaked
that very same sky
the same day

my gift from the heavens 
the heavens reclaimed


 Asteroid 2000-2014



8.13.2020


Composed for Constance La France’s
All Pets Go To Heaven Poetry Contest

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Vijay Pandit September 9, 2020 at 7:20 AM Your poem deserves all the accolades it has received, Maureen--a touching write--superb ending lines. Congrats on being featured near the TOP of best poems ..and congrats on your win in the contest.

Susan Lawrence September 8, 2020 at 1:07 PM Pigeon, Wonderful...endearing, mystical, soulful. I love this tribute as it brings me from ancient past into heavenly present. The love you felt and still feel vibrates. "...the massive spark an exclamation mark ..." love this. there is nothing like the unconditional love of a pet. congrats, Susan

Constance La France August 31, 2020 at 10:32 AM Pigeon, congratulations on your win in my All Pets Go to Heaven challenge _Constance Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart September 2, 2020 at 7:01 AM Thank you so much for my placement, and for inspiring. Warm wishes and hugs, xomo

Tom Cunningham August 28, 2020 at 1:57 AM They leave such a void when they go Maureen, congrats on your win and being number one, well deserved. Tom Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart August 28, 2020 at 4:57 AM Thank you Tom (& wow!) :))) xomo!

V. Deepa August 27, 2020 at 7:04 AM A touching ,poignant write about your asteroid...you must be missing him a lot..I understand your deep feelings.. reading this tale Mo mam.. Take care.Have a lovely day.Much love:-) V. Deepa August 27, 2020 at 7:23 AM Thankyou for sharing your joy with me Mo mam... And for clarifying me that Asteroid was a "She":-) I love your doves names :-) Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart August 27, 2020 at 7:10 AM Thank you Deepa! Asteroid was a she, I got an idea where that “b“ word got it’s use, giggles, her nicknames was “Megab****”. I seem to like my dogs female, and my doves male... my old birds are named “Loverboy” and “Prince Charming” ;), A wonderful day to you my friend! xomo

Joseph P. DiMino August 27, 2020 at 5:29 AM They are precious love. Beautiful, touching tribute. I sympathize. A fav! Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart August 27, 2020 at 6:50 AM Thank you Joe! She, my muse, was spectacular. ;), xomo!

Anne-Lise Andresen August 25, 2020 at 12:23 PM - Fourteen years is a lot ... but, great sorrow when they die :) - Congratulations on your win, Maureen :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :) Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart August 25, 2020 at 5:37 PM Thank you Anne-Lise. She was my first, I found it was the count down from 8 weeks... I rather like not knowing how old my present dog is, she’s getting up there, but every day is a gift. Hugs! xomo

Rob Carmack August 24, 2020 at 4:36 PM Clever and well done. I like how you did this. Congratsl Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart August 25, 2020 at 5:33 PM Thank you a Rob! xomo

John Watt August 22, 2020 at 4:30 PM Pidge, I just adore how you wrote this, framed by the three words in your title and interconnecting the themes of light, meteors, firecrackers, and all the celestial references of sky, world, sun, moon, gravity. Like your beloved dog and you were meant to orbit around each other. Beautiful, soulful writing, my friend. A fav for the archives ~ John Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart August 23, 2020 at 12:06 PM Thank you so much John. I do indeed believe we were fated for one another. I saw so many puppies that day, the moment she was in my arms my gut just knew. Have a lovely day my friend! xomo

Caren Krutsinger August 20, 2020 at 3:20 PM the meteor was the perfect touch Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart August 21, 2020 at 9:21 AM It really was! Blew me away :))) xomo! <3

Sharon Keely August 17, 2020 at 9:02 AM This is beautiful PT. Another "fave". Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart August 18, 2020 at 7:22 PM Thank you Sharon! xomo!

Quoth Theraven August 15, 2020 at 5:06 PM You said it was so and so it was. 'all arctic and wolfy..all wild and white' - Such a worthwhile cause to take up for 14 turns 'round the sun. And such a fine tribute to the 'brilliant light in my life'. -Richard Quoth Theraven August 16, 2020 at 3:25 PM Summer Sunday suffering from ennui and reminiscing over sad songs. Perfectly fine day. "] -R Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart August 16, 2020 at 5:56 AM Thank you Richard. I was owned by a wolf dog, now I own a dog; it is so much easier, but I wouldn’t trade the experience for the world. I am a serial dog owner now, and I work with dogs, thanks to her. Have a wonderful day! xomo

Robert Lindley August 15, 2020 at 4:36 PM A beautifully crafted poem my friend.. A gem and a fav too... God bless...X8K Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart August 16, 2020 at 6:02 AM Thank you so much Robert! I did get crafty. So much I could write about her I was afraid I would never finish, so I stuck to the story. Have a wonderful day! xomo

Janice Canerdy August 14, 2020 at 12:41 PM Maureen, this is SO beautiful and moving--especially the last two lines! Janice Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart August 16, 2020 at 6:04 AM Thank you Janice! I was blown away when I heard about it the next day, glad I appear to have captured that. xomo!

John Lawless August 14, 2020 at 5:09 AM ...and thus she saved her words and wove them into majesty. Great work Mo. If this don't top the list we'll start a senate investigation Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart August 14, 2020 at 5:47 AM ...not so fast. I’m not sure this is emotive enough for the sponsor’s taste. Thank you John! It wasn’t that I didn’t know where to begin, I was afraid I wouldn’t end ~x

David Kavanagh August 14, 2020 at 4:26 AM Great piece of free verse super Mo Exclamation mark and punctuation brilliant lines, so versatile a poet cheers David Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart August 14, 2020 at 5:48 AM Thank you fabulous Dave, xomo!

Jeff Connelly August 13, 2020 at 8:12 PM Maureen an amazing bright and shining star in your array of poetry!!! I love how the title (something YOU taught me about) makes this poem so tight and one within itself. Pardon, but it made me think about "alignments"; gravitational pull, BUT most certainly about Mark Twain and Halley's comet. If needed to remember Mark Twains' age at death: he was born and died on the arrival of that comet every 75 years. Maybe I'm throwing in unrelated facts reading your poem, but Maureen, this works for me. Jeff Connelly August 14, 2020 at 1:03 PM So true about Twain. He made some sort of comment about how two oddities came into the world the same day; so they should also go out the same. 75 years later Haley's Comet came back and left; as did Twain. Jeff Connelly August 14, 2020 at 12:58 PM Rose, how sweet. Mi Musa just rescued a very sweet and intelligent Border Collie named Sade, and I told her the same, "He was fated to be saved by you." Videos and photos I've seen show the love in his eyes. Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart August 14, 2020 at 5:56 AM I did not know that but it’s relevance is sparkling! We were fated her and I, I know that. And my second dog too. Have I mentioned my love of “The Little Prince”? ...my second came with the name Rose. ;),

Gershon Wolf August 13, 2020 at 6:38 PM This is simply amazing, Maureen! Here's to a #1 win in the contest! Light and Life, Gershon Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart August 14, 2020 at 5:56 AM Thank you Wolf Man, warm hugs! xomo

Rico Leffanta August 13, 2020 at 1:12 PM 14 Years? Must have been a Godsend! Good luck in the contest! Aloha! Rico Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart August 14, 2020 at 5:57 AM Little bit of God, a dash of devil, all deity. ;), xomo!

Belden Raiser August 13, 2020 at 10:10 AM Razor sharp Pigeon Tart! Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart August 14, 2020 at 5:57 AM Thank you Belden! She was ;), xomo

Ilene Bauer August 13, 2020 at 8:30 AM very powerful and touching, maureen! best of luck in the contest... Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart August 14, 2020 at 5:58 AM Thank you Ilene, xomo, true story!

Michelle Faulkner August 13, 2020 at 8:07 AM So beautiful, such a richly layered story, those closing lines went straight to my heart, Fave! Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart August 14, 2020 at 5:59 AM Thank you Michelle! <3

Jeanne Mcgee August 13, 2020 at 8:04 AM this is such an awesome write! I'm glad he is shinning bright. Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart August 14, 2020 at 5:59 AM Thank you Jeanne! She was spectacular :))) xomo