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Asphyxia

I lay here alone I close my eyes and I listen there is nothing not even the sound of my breath the silence is so impervious and profuse I am suffocating in your reticence your muteness is congesting my lungs my airways are constricting in a panic my body begins to flail about clawing and scratching in an attempt for survival my exertion is desperate and in vain for there is no bag to escape nor a rope to loosen I can not physically save myself I gasp for a breath but I fail inhaling nothing but the emptyness of your quietude PLEASE SAVE ME... one word could extricate me acknowledgement being my lifeline a single tear trickles down my face its hopeless because in order to rescue me you have to kill yourself

Copyright © | Year Posted 2013




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Date: 8/30/2013 12:12:00 PM
Sad, you've already come to the conclusion the person who can save the subject of your poem doesn't love them enough to do so...very sad, but a very good write!!! MC
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Date: 6/9/2013 12:46:00 PM
"In order to rescue me you would have to kill yourself" Strong words. I'm really feeling this poem. Its like a suicide mission I'm on. Wishing you the best! Awesome job!
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Date: 4/26/2013 9:06:00 PM
Valerie, you took me in to the depth of your sadness. It is sad to know, some one can take your life away, without being there. I love this stimulating write, it has opened my mind with my words, you took me into a world of regrets. I'm not saying you regret but, something does not complete you. Your poem is awesome, and I love it. love~ SKAT
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Date: 4/26/2013 10:51:00 AM
I came back for another read..please tell me about this particular piece in soup mail if you can.
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Date: 4/26/2013 8:03:00 AM
Ooooo..this is super intense!! I love the way you kept me on the edge of my seat with this one.. :)
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