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Ashes To Ashes

THE FIRST TIME I SAW VERA… I saw: A scrawny, wrinkled, little thing with sallow, wrinkled skin, a head of fine white hair that looked like a dandelion gone to seed, and a pair of faded blue eyes that still managed to twinkle. A REAL BEAUTY WHEN SHE WAS YOUNG, they told me. There she sat in an old Lazy Boy Recliner, beneath a halo of floating blue smoke, lips stuck to the tail end of a Camel butt, as ashes fell onto her already pockmarked terrycloth bathrobe. With a toothless grin, she smiled at me, then coughed up what sounded like gravel as she thumped her chest with a balled up fist until the coughing finally ceased; whereupon she made another halo that rose high into the air…and fell apart. So….this was what an EARTHBOUND AGNEL looked like…NOT AT ALL WHAT I EXPECTED. From all accounts told to me, Vera had spent most of her life doing without so she could give to others less fortunate then herself, with the one exception: the money she spent on her CAMELS…Oh! How she loved them. She loved the feel of them, the smell of them and the sense of REWARD they gave her in exchange for all her good deeds. EVERYONE including ME, tried to tell her the relationship she had with them was unhealthy, but she refused to listen, claiming she had been kissin their butts for over 50 years, and it gave her great pleasure...thank you very much! All this, she sputtered as I swept up their droppings from the floor. For two more years I swept up their droppings as Vera advanced from a Lazy Boy Recliner to a wheelchair...still the Camel’s remained. They were her loyal companions. Day in and day out, they were always by her side, especially on those lonely nights when there was no one else to keep her company. MANY, MANY TIMES over those two years, I TRIED to convince her to let them go …BUT...she was addicted to that toxic relationship in MIND, BODY and SOUL. Still, I PRAYED she would come to her senses, but all in vain. ~~~ It was a rainy morning in September when…THE CHARRED REMAINS of this once EARTH BOUND ANGEL, were found in the smoldering ashes, after she had finally let go of her last Camel while falling asleep. Written: September 15, 2014 Author: Elaine Cecelia George of Canada Author’s Note: Every years in the US of A, over 1000 smokers and non-smokers Die in home fires caused by smoking.

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Date: 7/23/2015 10:05:00 PM
The unexpected twist to this story is sad, but so true. I hope many will read this and give up the habit... The rich details of this story just drew me in. Very, very well told, Elaine! Congrats on the win!
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Elaine George
Date: 7/24/2015 4:52:00 PM
Thank you for taking the time to read my writing and for your kind comments, Kelly. Elaine
Date: 7/17/2015 9:09:00 AM
You might like my poem titled "Ashes" if you type the title in the search box above including my name and you will find it.
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Date: 7/16/2015 7:13:00 PM
You are an excellent story teller, i was captivated from start to finish. My dad died of lung cancer at 56 years of age. He smoked from about the age of 11. It was his most enduring relationship. His three kids and four wives were no match for his addictions.
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Elaine George
Date: 7/16/2015 9:03:00 PM
Ah Richard!!! I am so sorry for your loss and I know your story all too well. So many beautiful souls all lost to addictions. Thank you for your kind comments on my writing. It means a great deal to me. Elaine
Date: 7/14/2015 2:04:00 AM
Hi Elaine, Congrats in Carol's story poem win. always ~~ LINDA ~~
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Elaine George
Date: 7/15/2015 7:58:00 PM
Thanks, Linda. Elaine
Date: 7/14/2015 12:17:00 AM
Hi Elaine, Congratulations on your sweet win. Love SKAT
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Elaine George
Date: 7/15/2015 7:59:00 PM
Thanks, Skat. Elaine
Date: 7/13/2015 2:00:00 PM
brilliant storytelling and a strong message to us all:-) congrats on your win:-) hugs Jan xx
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Elaine George
Date: 7/13/2015 3:24:00 PM
Thank you, Jan. Elaine . George
Date: 7/13/2015 12:24:00 PM
Not only is this a timely, and important message, but oh Elaine, your writing is so perfect. Descriptions are so true, "dandelion"....one can just picture her with her fluff of white hair, I have seen her in my mind, with the deep gravel voice, husky from a lifetime of smoking. Super storytelling !!!
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Date: 7/2/2015 10:46:00 AM
Great poem with a lovely message. Thanks for the Grade 7 share.
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Elaine George
Date: 7/9/2015 11:08:00 AM
Thank you for your kind comments, Funom
Date: 4/18/2015 7:20:00 PM
Thank you for your kind comments, dear Carrie. You always lift my spirits. Elaine
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Date: 4/18/2015 1:00:00 PM
I came here after such a long time, astounded that this poem has only one comment. Oh my, what a loss to those who have overlooked (including myself)...until now, what a gift your words, and stories are of the human condition, and the souls that run deep within us, and the things that make us who we are. You are a writer through and through. :) (Hope all is well in Canada ! Hugs !)
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Elaine George
Date: 4/25/2015 11:56:00 AM
Thank you for your kind comments, dear Carrie. bfn Elaine
Date: 9/15/2014 3:59:00 PM
So nice to hear from you Lanie & read your work. Light & Love
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Elaine George
Date: 7/13/2015 3:27:00 PM
Hi Debbie, It has been awhile. Hopefully I will get back to the soup in the near future. Hope all is well with you, my friend. Elaine

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