Ashes

Hell's perpetual fires Burning up my frenzied desires I'm gurgling up a rebellion Can you feel it frothing? You sure have claws That scratched my skin raw The blood is everywhere Do you see it spilling? I barely recognised your voice Cold and harsh like beaten up ice My ephemeral lovesong was meant to be sung Can you hear it dying? Just one more knot Tied up your body to the cot I'm pouring the fuel around Don't you smell it burning? Goodbye my sweet love Endure what you deserve I've been waiting to burn you to ashes Did you see this coming?

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Teddy Kimathi

Date: 5/6/2016 10:53:00 AM

I love the way you've fused your emotions together with your musings, to come up with this masterpiece!! Congrats Sohini, for your top placement in the contest!! ;-)

Casarah Nance

Date: 5/4/2016 9:31:00 PM

This is the kind of poem that empowers me, I love the raw emotional writes that take us to the core of it all. I don't know if I had read you before, but I am going to start following you and see what you can do! Very well done, thanks for entering :)

Sohini Mukherjee
Date: 5/5/2016 5:09:00 AM

Thanks so much Casarah!!!! I'm glad you like my work! I'll try my best not to disappoint you :D

Vladislav Raven

Date: 4/19/2016 6:22:00 AM

Hi Sohini, Congratulations on your 3rd place win in the contest....Mike.

Sohini Mukherjee
Date: 4/19/2016 6:33:00 AM

Thank u so much :)

Tom Quigley

Date: 4/8/2016 6:33:00 AM

Very nice in a twisted kind of way! Congrats. :-)

Sohini Mukherjee
Date: 4/8/2016 9:59:00 AM

Thank you so much :)

Timothy Hicks

Date: 4/7/2016 7:50:00 PM

So dark and ... well ... poetically homicidal! (if that makes sense) ... Very well written with intensity and forthcoming-ness ... no punches withheld. Your ending question-lines really immerses the reader in your searing emotions. Can you see me smiling? Congrats on your podium win!

Sohini Mukherjee
Date: 4/7/2016 11:45:00 PM

Thank you so much !!! :)

Anand Parmale

Date: 4/7/2016 3:21:00 AM

Congrats Sohini for your excellent win!!!

Sohini Mukherjee
Date: 4/7/2016 4:47:00 AM

Thank you so much :)

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 4/6/2016 10:43:00 PM

Sohini, Congratulations on your 3rd top spot in Justin's "Where Freedom Finds The Fire Contest." Love LINDA

Sohini Mukherjee
Date: 4/7/2016 4:48:00 AM

Thank you so much Linda!!

Dr. Upma A. Sharma

Date: 4/6/2016 2:19:00 AM

Congrats on a worthy win with this superb poem Sohini..

Sohini Mukherjee
Date: 4/6/2016 2:35:00 AM

Thank you so much ??

Lu Loo

Date: 4/5/2016 11:45:00 AM

Sohini congrats in your placement in the contest -luloo

Sohini Mukherjee
Date: 4/6/2016 2:36:00 AM

Thank you so much !!!

Justin Bordner

Date: 4/4/2016 9:16:00 PM

The romantic vengeance and grity passion made me admire the spirit of this intense poem of justice and liberation Sohini. I've always thought, that if I were to be murdered, I'd prefer it be done by the woman I love...this poem relates to my heart in many ways. "Cold and harsh like beaten up ice, my ephemeral love song was meant to be sung, can you hear it dying..." powerful poetry, this really slaps my heart beautifully...J.A.B.

Sohini Mukherjee
Date: 4/5/2016 2:41:00 AM

Omggg thank you sooooo muchhhh!!!! I'm really glad you liked my poem and it could touch your heart!! Thanks alot!

Charlie Smith

Date: 4/4/2016 9:04:00 PM

Congratulations Sohini, well done...

Sohini Mukherjee
Date: 4/5/2016 2:41:00 AM

Thank u so much!