Ashen Snow

An innocence we used to know
As morning dourly turns to night
Entombed beneath an ashen snow 

A cell phone yearning for hello
With hopes of answer growing slight
An innocence we used to know

Within a stampede’s torrid flow
Bifocals lost in jostled fright
Entombed beneath an ashen snow 

A playbill from three days ago
Once read with wonder and delight
An innocence we used to know

Pillars raised in commerce glow
Now broken pencils thrown in spite
Entombed beneath an ashen snow 

So many hearts in fervent throes
So many souls in heaven’s sight
An innocence we used to know
Entombed beneath an ashen snow 

Chopped  - Poetry Contest
Including:
Playbill dated 08 Sep 2001
Cell Phone
Broken Pencil
Bifocals

-23 Oct 2014-

Copyright © | Year Posted 2014



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Date: 3/5/2022 1:02:00 PM
What is what was what has been, this is so nice. I am glad your poems came to me!
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Date: 1/29/2022 5:09:00 PM
Nicely done! I thoroughly enjoyed reading this villanelle.
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Date: 1/5/2015 7:10:00 AM
An excellent Villanelle, David. An enjoyable read for me. Thanks.
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Date: 11/3/2014 11:57:00 AM
So beautifully written David. Congratulations on your well deserved top podium place.
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Date: 11/2/2014 6:25:00 PM
David, this is so beautiful, capturing the tragedy and sadness in a compelling, heart rending way. I do not know how it could have been written better. Congratulations.
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Date: 11/2/2014 7:26:00 AM
Congratulations, this one was a win regardless of any contest. A huge win for you both ways, good luck in the next rounds of this intruiguing contest.
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Date: 11/2/2014 7:23:00 AM
Brilliant! A Fav for me!
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Date: 11/2/2014 6:25:00 AM
Clearly the best, David! You took an already tough form and weaved in the ingredients perfectly. Very poignant! Cheers, Roy
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Date: 11/1/2014 6:43:00 PM
I knew this would top the list...Congrats on a great win David
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Date: 11/1/2014 3:10:00 PM
Lovely use of form-will you continue? Do a string of Villanelle? Congrad's on your win! Light & Love
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Date: 11/1/2014 2:34:00 PM
You have taken this form by storm, and the sadness of a terrible day is hard to do in rhyme.....but your success and the descriptions are so moving.....what a wonderful deserved win!
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Date: 11/1/2014 1:13:00 PM
many congratulations David you hit the top spot with this imaginative write:-) hugs jan xxx
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Date: 10/28/2014 2:49:00 PM
Shades of the past.
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Date: 10/26/2014 12:07:00 PM
I think you really nailed the atmosphere he was looking for with his contest. Good one, I think you will go far in this unusual contest!
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Date: 10/25/2014 6:27:00 PM
Brilliant write David.....you captured the theme very well...
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Date: 10/25/2014 2:20:00 PM
I enjoyed this lovely Villanelle, David. Excellent final two lines on which you based this poem. Top marks for this one! // paul
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Date: 10/24/2014 10:26:00 PM
Dear David: Well done. Lovely read. All the best then, Leon.
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