David Mohn Poet Villanelle

Ashen Snow

An innocence we used to know
As morning dourly turns to night
Entombed beneath an ashen snow 

A cell phone yearning for hello
With hopes of answer growing slight
An innocence we used to know

Within a stampede’s torrid flow
Bifocals lost in jostled fright
Entombed beneath an ashen snow 

A playbill from three days ago
Once read with wonder and delight
An innocence we used to know

Pillars raised in commerce glow
Now broken pencils thrown in spite
Entombed beneath an ashen snow 

So many hearts in fervent throes
So many souls in heaven’s sight
An innocence we used to know
Entombed beneath an ashen snow 

Chopped  - Poetry Contest
Including:
Playbill dated 08 Sep 2001
Cell Phone
Broken Pencil
Bifocals

-23 Oct 2014-

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I Am Anaya March 5, 2022 at 1:02 PM What is what was what has been, this is so nice. I am glad your poems came to me!

Valerie Staton January 29, 2022 at 5:09 PM Nicely done! I thoroughly enjoyed reading this villanelle.

Cona Adams January 5, 2015 at 7:10 AM An excellent Villanelle, David. An enjoyable read for me. Thanks.

Brenda Meier-Hans November 3, 2014 at 11:57 AM So beautifully written David. Congratulations on your well deserved top podium place.

Faye Gibson November 2, 2014 at 6:25 PM David, this is so beautiful, capturing the tragedy and sadness in a compelling, heart rending way. I do not know how it could have been written better. Congratulations.

Maurice Yvonne November 2, 2014 at 7:26 AM Congratulations, this one was a win regardless of any contest. A huge win for you both ways, good luck in the next rounds of this intruiguing contest.

Maurice Yvonne November 2, 2014 at 7:23 AM Brilliant! A Fav for me!

Roy Jerden November 2, 2014 at 6:25 AM Clearly the best, David! You took an already tough form and weaved in the ingredients perfectly. Very poignant! Cheers, Roy

Joseph May November 1, 2014 at 6:43 PM I knew this would top the list...Congrats on a great win David

Debbie Guzzi November 1, 2014 at 3:10 PM Lovely use of form-will you continue? Do a string of Villanelle? Congrad's on your win! Light & Love

Carrie Richards November 1, 2014 at 2:34 PM You have taken this form by storm, and the sadness of a terrible day is hard to do in rhyme.....but your success and the descriptions are so moving.....what a wonderful deserved win!

Jan Allison November 1, 2014 at 1:13 PM many congratulations David you hit the top spot with this imaginative write:-) hugs jan xxx

M. L. Kiser October 28, 2014 at 2:49 PM Shades of the past.

Andrea Dietrich October 26, 2014 at 12:07 PM I think you really nailed the atmosphere he was looking for with his contest. Good one, I think you will go far in this unusual contest!

Joseph May October 25, 2014 at 6:27 PM Brilliant write David.....you captured the theme very well...

Paul Callus October 25, 2014 at 2:20 PM I enjoyed this lovely Villanelle, David. Excellent final two lines on which you based this poem. Top marks for this one! // paul

Leon Enriquez October 24, 2014 at 10:26 PM Dear David: Well done. Lovely read. All the best then, Leon.