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Caress.... as you undress me Express... your tenderness Confess... that you adore me Posses.... me to excess Submerge yourself completely Splurge... on every urge Merge... your love with passion Surge... as we converge Eileen Manassian

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White Sage

Date: 10/10/2016 5:13:00 PM

hot and burning, if I'll say. artistically romantic and passionately affectionate. nice one Eileen

Justin Bordner

Date: 10/1/2016 6:54:00 PM

The melody of passion's pulse is robust throughout this hot poem Eileen. Each word has such a distinct spirit of lust, yet love is always upon the tongue's tip...J.A.B.

Eileen Manassian
Date: 10/2/2016 6:14:00 AM

Yes, Justin....love and lust coexist well. There is no dichotomy when love is true. Thank you for the visit...

Matthew Anish

Date: 9/24/2016 7:02:00 PM

Very sensuous work here! Peace & Love Matthew Anish

Eileen Manassian
Date: 10/27/2016 8:56:00 PM

Thank you, Matthew. I appreciate the visit.

Paul Callus

Date: 9/10/2016 5:42:00 PM

Captivating in its expressive simplicity...after all love and passion need not be complicated:) As to your suggested last line, Eileen, I would not change it, but add it right at the end. Hugs // paul

Eileen Manassian
Date: 9/11/2016 3:27:00 AM

No, passion can be very elementary in its demands, dear. I do like your suggestion for the last line. Perhaps I will incorporate it. Thanks, dear. Hugs

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 9/10/2016 10:42:00 AM

I agree with Cay Cay, you should bring your brand of ooh la la to the world!!!!!

Eileen Manassian
Date: 9/11/2016 3:26:00 AM

Hey...maybe the volume of poetry will be called...Oooh la la! Thanks, Richard. At least here on PS...I can write what pleases me. Hugs

Daniel Turner

Date: 9/9/2016 9:23:00 PM

Wow, somebody's on fire tonight! I love this write, Eileen.

Eileen Manassian
Date: 9/11/2016 3:25:00 AM

Story of my life, Daniel. Thanks for the visit. Glad you liked this piece.

Caycay Jennings

Date: 9/9/2016 9:17:00 PM

Oh yes, take me! Oh, we aren't alone, are we? And I almost forgot I'm not gay. Seriously, who needs foreplay? I'll take the computer to bed and read my love your poems instead. Our collective poems on a broad range of topics, may not sell, but surely a book of poetry erotica would - you should consider it ... CayCay

Eileen Manassian
Date: 9/11/2016 3:24:00 AM

What a sizzling post, dear. I've recently found out that a young lady has part of my poem on a very suggestive instagram photo....I should remember to use the pseudonym Jade Celeste for the steamy writes. What needs foreplay? Yes...at times...that can be skipped. ;) Hugs, dear....

Arthur Vaso

Date: 9/9/2016 8:49:00 PM

Oh la la, you didn't have to put your name at the end of this poem! I would have known this is you!!!!! Better keep my far away, or I just might!!!!! :)

Daniel Turner
Date: 9/9/2016 9:21:00 PM

I'd leave it just as it is. It's perfect!

Eileen Manassian
Date: 9/9/2016 9:11:00 PM

Oh Arthur....You really know how to give a girl a compliment! Thanks ever so much. I was playing around with words...some of it sounds contrived, but...what to do? I had to go with it. That last line could have read....Surge...to heaven's verge. What do you think? Is it a better ending? Hugs