As We Wait

pink roses hang heavy in the undulating heat
a partial arch over the laneway
gentle sway midst the silver dust

a youth with his pug dog pauses
half in shadow beneath the flowery portal
the air lit by scent from a hidden inside
the dog restless
pulls at its leash like harbored want

wing-like, the boy lifts the dog to better sniff
delightedly, blooms in the soft swell of summer
unfazed wonderment caught in the dog's wagging tail
cheerful in this limited space
before what a lad hopes to remember is shadowed by age
before what bridges gaps gets undone

an unpredictable moment
a chemistry
when we outreach ourselves
in a patchwork of senses 
to know an airborne longing
in the pathways behind us

Copyright © | Year Posted 2025



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Date: 2/6/2025 1:43:00 PM
You just never know when magic will happen in an unpredictable instant, Brian. You have so wonderfully painted this sweet moment of floral and visceral delight! So well written, I am witnessing this moment with you. Congratulations on your first place win! Blessings of roses to you!
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Brian Sambourne
Date: 2/6/2025 9:54:00 PM
With much appreciation for your thoughtful response to my small posting, Sam. Yes, it was an unpredictable moment. In a sense, one has to be at the right place at just the precise moment to catch an indelible image. My poetry is fairly predictable - I view an image, store it, muse over it, and then try to give it structure + thought, poetically. Thank you for your insights. Best wishes. Brian
Date: 2/3/2025 9:02:00 PM
amazing write. congratulations on your win dear poet. Cheers!!!
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Brian Sambourne
Date: 2/4/2025 6:43:00 AM
Thanks very much, Thriveni, for your congratulatory message. This small event (a teenage boy with his dog beneath an arched rose bush) unfolded last July + sparked joy along with this small write. Best wishes + good health.
Date: 2/3/2025 10:27:00 AM
Such a wonderfully crafted poem with stunning imagery and well-picked diction is just magical, Brian. My hearty congratulations on your trophy winner my friend.
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Brian Sambourne
Date: 2/3/2025 12:38:00 PM
Greetings Sotto Poet. Thank you for your kind words of acknowledgement. I am surprised at the placement as I feel the poem needs more revision. So many incredible scenes + images about us. I value the thoughts such images engender. Hope that you are well. Best wishes. Brian
Date: 1/28/2025 11:46:00 PM
An unpredictable moment, yes and a beautiful one. Beautiful in its words and structure Brian. I sense this was something you may have witnessed but whether or not that is the case, I feel that I witnessed that little moment of unexpected magic myself. From the lovely descriptive introduction, through the narrative that expertly sets up your final verse with its message this is another of your poems that you should be rightly proud of. Cheers - Gary
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Brian Sambourne
Date: 1/29/2025 7:33:00 AM
Hello Gary, My goodness, such encouraging, insightful remarks. Thank you. You are quite right, this was a scene that I observed as many of my ramblings are based on observations that just present themselves unexpectedly. It was a joy to view the pug dog sniffing roses excitedly. Clearly, the young man wanted the dog to have a sensory experience up close. It is an image that has stayed with me since July. Be well. With appreciation. Brian
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