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As the Sun Set

As the sun set, a dare unfolds
Black streaks tinged with orange and gold
One lone swimmer jumps and fast falls
In the dark abyss, maybe pall 
Dark sea waters, quickly enfolds

Will he rise, or on death's threshold 
Never heaven's beauty behold
Deeper into waters appall 
                 
                           As the sun set


Arise, oh, swimmer, break the mould
Look to the sky its blue grab hold
In the water, one dot so small
All the angels can hear the wrawl
Remember the view, a jump bold

                             As the sun set

Written: August 14, 2018
Picture # 3 the inspiration!
Copyright © | Year Posted 2018

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Dietrich Avatar
August 31, 2018 at 7:25 PM
I see you won with your descriptive poetry inspired by that twilight picture of the boy jumping to the sea. Congrats to you, Sara.I am sure he just came right back up!!
Kendrick Avatar
September 4, 2018 at 12:22 PM
Andrea, Thanks for the visit to my page with congrats. I appreciate the time spent here. I hope that he came up a proud jumper. Sara
Smith Avatar
August 31, 2018 at 10:45 AM
Great imagery Sara, loved the photo too, congratulations, well done...
Kendrick Avatar
September 4, 2018 at 12:21 PM
Charlie, Thanks for dropping by with congrats. Your time spent here is appreciated. Sara
Marcum Wong Avatar
August 31, 2018 at 1:08 AM
What a fantastic poem this is Sarah! We have a look-alike rock here at Waimea Bay that my children have jumped from. They are way more daring than me. I won't even jump in a swimming pool. Congratulations on your wonderful deserving first placement! : )
Kendrick Avatar
September 4, 2018 at 12:20 PM
Connie, Thanks for dropping by with congrats. I also would not jump even when I was young there would be too many what ifs in jumping. Sara
Gentry Avatar
August 30, 2018 at 8:02 PM
Congratulations on your #1 win. Beautiful.
Kendrick Avatar
September 4, 2018 at 12:19 PM
Susan, Thanks for the visit to my page with congrats. I appreciate the time spent here. Sara
Arowolo Avatar
August 30, 2018 at 3:13 PM
Wonderful and interesting piece, ..Congrats on your well deserved win,great poet..
Kendrick Avatar
September 4, 2018 at 12:19 PM
Olusegun, Thanks for dropping by with congrats. Your presence here is appreciated. Sara
Poteet Avatar
August 29, 2018 at 1:02 PM
Hopefully he has done this before and examined the waters beneath carefully. Great rondeau, Sara. Great win.
Kendrick Avatar
August 29, 2018 at 3:49 PM
Reason, I hope that all went well with the jump myself. Thanks for dropping by with congrats. Your presence is appreciated. Sara
Messina Avatar
August 28, 2018 at 10:21 PM
Beautiful poem, Sara. Wonderful imagery and for sure a well deserved winner. Blessings to you...Charlie
Kendrick Avatar
August 29, 2018 at 10:48 AM
Charles, I am glad that you saw beauty in this one. Thanks for the visit to my page with congrats. Sara
Canerdy Avatar
August 28, 2018 at 6:16 PM
CONGRATULATIONS on your well-deserved win! Janice
Kendrick Avatar
August 29, 2018 at 10:47 AM
Janice, Thanks for the visit to my page with congrats. Your presence is appreciated. Sara
May Avatar
August 28, 2018 at 6:00 PM
Beautiful depiction of the scene Sara...Congrats on your win
Kendrick Avatar
August 29, 2018 at 7:39 AM
Joseph, Thanks for letting me know I placed and for the honor of placing in your contest. Sara
Sands Avatar
August 28, 2018 at 5:14 PM
Congratulations for your win :)
Kendrick Avatar
August 29, 2018 at 7:40 AM
Heidi, Thanks for dropping by with congrats. I appreciate you stopping by and taking time to comment. Sara
Dutta Avatar
August 22, 2018 at 1:54 AM
Wonderful piece. i admire.
Kendrick Avatar
August 29, 2018 at 7:39 AM
Anisha, Thanks for the visit to my page. I appreciate your presence and comments. Sara
Ashley Avatar
August 15, 2018 at 9:39 PM
Your imagery is beautifully expressive, Sara. Best wishes for a win! ~Susan
Kendrick Avatar
August 16, 2018 at 8:26 AM
Susan, Your presence at my work is uplifting. I appreciate your comment and well wishes. Sara
Rodrigues Avatar
August 15, 2018 at 12:01 PM
A beauty to this! My husband jumped off a too high cliff during stark daylight! This would be greatly intimidating! Lovely, Sara!
Rodrigues Avatar
August 16, 2018 at 8:00 AM
Sara, It was the only time I saw fear in his eyes. He read the brochure wrong. The jump was much higher but he did it twice. As we were leaving, I thought about how I could take a video, but my husband wisely said “better not chance it” LOL
Kendrick Avatar
August 15, 2018 at 1:31 PM
Kim, I would not do that all by myself for I am not the adventurous type of person especially now. Thanks for stopping by. How did your husband do with his jump? Was he alright? Thanks for the visits to my page. Sara
Kiser Avatar
August 15, 2018 at 12:01 AM
Beautifully penned, a new fav of mine.
Kendrick Avatar
August 15, 2018 at 1:30 PM
M.L., I am so honored that you liked it enough to fav it. Your presence at my page is always uplifting. Thanks for dropping by. Sara
Daniel Avatar
August 14, 2018 at 10:26 PM
I can imagine the action going on, Sara, well written rondeau:)
Kendrick Avatar
August 15, 2018 at 1:29 PM
Jo, Amazing how it was on the news this past week end how a girl was pushed into a river off a bridge by one of her supposed friends. She had five broken ribs, air bubbles in her chest, I think maybe she also broke maybe her arm and leg. It was lucky that people were there to save her. That picture reminded me of the incident Thanks for the visit to my page. Sara
Michael Avatar
August 14, 2018 at 8:24 PM
Very lovely...Poetry in motion...All the best Sara
Kendrick Avatar
August 15, 2018 at 1:26 PM
Arturo, Thanks for the visit to my page. I appreciate the time spent here. Your comments are uplifting. Sara
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