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As the sun set, a dare unfolds
Black streaks tinged with orange and gold
One lone swimmer jumps and fast falls
In the dark abyss, maybe pall 
Dark sea waters, quickly enfolds

Will he rise, or on death's threshold 
Never heaven's beauty behold
Deeper into waters appall 
                 
                           As the sun set


Arise, oh, swimmer, break the mould
Look to the sky its blue grab hold
In the water, one dot so small
All the angels can hear the wrawl
Remember the view, a jump bold

                             As the sun set

Written: August 14, 2018
Picture # 3 the inspiration!

Copyright © | Year Posted 2018




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Date: 8/31/2018 7:25:00 PM
I see you won with your descriptive poetry inspired by that twilight picture of the boy jumping to the sea. Congrats to you, Sara.I am sure he just came right back up!!
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Sara Kendrick
Date: 9/4/2018 12:22:00 PM
Andrea, Thanks for the visit to my page with congrats. I appreciate the time spent here. I hope that he came up a proud jumper. Sara
Date: 8/31/2018 10:45:00 AM
Great imagery Sara, loved the photo too, congratulations, well done...
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Date: 9/4/2018 12:21:00 PM
Charlie, Thanks for dropping by with congrats. Your time spent here is appreciated. Sara
Date: 8/31/2018 1:08:00 AM
What a fantastic poem this is Sarah! We have a look-alike rock here at Waimea Bay that my children have jumped from. They are way more daring than me. I won't even jump in a swimming pool. Congratulations on your wonderful deserving first placement! : )
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Date: 9/4/2018 12:20:00 PM
Connie, Thanks for dropping by with congrats. I also would not jump even when I was young there would be too many what ifs in jumping. Sara
Date: 8/30/2018 8:02:00 PM
Congratulations on your #1 win. Beautiful.
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Date: 9/4/2018 12:19:00 PM
Susan, Thanks for the visit to my page with congrats. I appreciate the time spent here. Sara
Date: 8/30/2018 3:13:00 PM
Wonderful and interesting piece, ..Congrats on your well deserved win,great poet..
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Date: 9/4/2018 12:19:00 PM
Olusegun, Thanks for dropping by with congrats. Your presence here is appreciated. Sara
Date: 8/29/2018 1:02:00 PM
Hopefully he has done this before and examined the waters beneath carefully. Great rondeau, Sara. Great win.
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Sara Kendrick
Date: 8/29/2018 3:49:00 PM
Reason, I hope that all went well with the jump myself. Thanks for dropping by with congrats. Your presence is appreciated. Sara
Date: 8/28/2018 11:37:00 PM
Congratulations on your wonderful win, Sara!
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Date: 8/29/2018 10:48:00 AM
Carol, Thanks for the visit to my page with congrats. I appreciate the time spent here. Sara
Date: 8/28/2018 10:21:00 PM
Beautiful poem, Sara. Wonderful imagery and for sure a well deserved winner. Blessings to you...Charlie
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Date: 8/29/2018 10:48:00 AM
Charles, I am glad that you saw beauty in this one. Thanks for the visit to my page with congrats. Sara
Date: 8/28/2018 6:16:00 PM
CONGRATULATIONS on your well-deserved win! Janice
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Date: 8/29/2018 10:47:00 AM
Janice, Thanks for the visit to my page with congrats. Your presence is appreciated. Sara
Date: 8/28/2018 6:00:00 PM
Beautiful depiction of the scene Sara...Congrats on your win
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Date: 8/29/2018 7:39:00 AM
Joseph, Thanks for letting me know I placed and for the honor of placing in your contest. Sara
Date: 8/28/2018 5:14:00 PM
Congratulations for your win :)
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Date: 8/29/2018 7:40:00 AM
Heidi, Thanks for dropping by with congrats. I appreciate you stopping by and taking time to comment. Sara
Date: 8/22/2018 1:54:00 AM
Wonderful piece. i admire.
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Date: 8/29/2018 7:39:00 AM
Anisha, Thanks for the visit to my page. I appreciate your presence and comments. Sara
Date: 8/15/2018 9:39:00 PM
Your imagery is beautifully expressive, Sara. Best wishes for a win! ~Susan
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Sara Kendrick
Date: 8/16/2018 8:26:00 AM
Susan, Your presence at my work is uplifting. I appreciate your comment and well wishes. Sara
Date: 8/15/2018 7:41:00 PM
Great imagery in this well written rondeau, Sara! I wish you all the best in the contest. :-)
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Sara Kendrick
Date: 8/16/2018 8:25:00 AM
Carol, Your comments are encouraging. One kind word can mean the difference in whether a person has a great day or a horrible one. Thanks for dropping by. Sara
Date: 8/15/2018 12:01:00 PM
A beauty to this! My husband jumped off a too high cliff during stark daylight! This would be greatly intimidating! Lovely, Sara!
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 8/16/2018 8:00:00 AM
Sara, It was the only time I saw fear in his eyes. He read the brochure wrong. The jump was much higher but he did it twice. As we were leaving, I thought about how I could take a video, but my husband wisely said “better not chance it” LOL
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Sara Kendrick
Date: 8/15/2018 1:31:00 PM
Kim, I would not do that all by myself for I am not the adventurous type of person especially now. Thanks for stopping by. How did your husband do with his jump? Was he alright? Thanks for the visits to my page. Sara
Date: 8/15/2018 12:01:00 AM
Beautifully penned, a new fav of mine.
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Date: 8/15/2018 1:30:00 PM
M.L., I am so honored that you liked it enough to fav it. Your presence at my page is always uplifting. Thanks for dropping by. Sara
Date: 8/14/2018 10:26:00 PM
I can imagine the action going on, Sara, well written rondeau:)
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Sara Kendrick
Date: 8/15/2018 1:29:00 PM
Jo, Amazing how it was on the news this past week end how a girl was pushed into a river off a bridge by one of her supposed friends. She had five broken ribs, air bubbles in her chest, I think maybe she also broke maybe her arm and leg. It was lucky that people were there to save her. That picture reminded me of the incident Thanks for the visit to my page. Sara
Date: 8/14/2018 8:24:00 PM
Very lovely...Poetry in motion...All the best Sara
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Date: 8/15/2018 1:26:00 PM
Arturo, Thanks for the visit to my page. I appreciate the time spent here. Your comments are uplifting. Sara