Valsa George Poet Free verse

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March. 4. 2025

As the last Petal Falls Poetry Contest

Sponsor-  Sara Jama

Re-entered For 2025 Marathon Race. No.3. by Mark Toney

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As the Last Petal Falls

When Death comes knocking at the door,
And as the last petal finally falls,
My voice will be stilled.
My heart, now ticking off like a clock,
Will ever be silent.
My footfalls shall no more be heard
All my songs will be stifled in the throat
All my crazy thoughts will be frozen,
And I shall take leave of all
And the whole lot of petty things I hold dear.

But what difference does it make?
The earth will continue to spin as before.
Stars will illumine the night sky.
Days will follow days in endless succession.
Time, chanting refrains of joy and sorrow,
On wings, shall fly to destinations unknown.

Will there be anyone to grieve my absence?
Will my loved ones still hold me close to their hearts?

May be for a while
A short little while.

But as years glide,
And my tomb lies overgrown with weeds
And the engraving on my head stone
Fades out into morbid grime and moss,
When I merge with the dust as dust,
When I lie inert, a rattling heap of bones under the sod,
When my spirit still hovers around in vain
With insatiable longing for all your love,

Then give me, my Lord! A ride in your chariot!
Remove from my spirit the languor of endless waiting!
Carry me to Thy bosom!
Embalm me with Thy love,
That I shall no more crave for earthly love
And with you in bliss, ever united,
Look down evermore content-
As the wheels roll down to Eternity!

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Joanna Daniel March 6, 2025 at 12:26 AM Superb, it's the ending that makes it perfect:)

Sara Kendrick March 5, 2025 at 1:13 PM Ahh!! So, we all hope that our death will be one that will be easy, peaceful and a meeting with the Savior that we all love. This one reads like a good contender for the contest to me. Way to go. Thanks for sharing. Sara K

Sally Eslinger March 5, 2025 at 9:46 AM Hi Valsa! Enjoyed reading of your deep faith and hope for heaven, God bless your days to be years more before you find your last petal falling! Hugs, sally

Kai Michael Neumann March 5, 2025 at 3:41 AM Great poem. We are so insignificant in the larger scheme of things. Many loving wishes to you, Kai

Joseph P. DiMino March 4, 2025 at 8:22 AM "Carry me to Thy bosom! Embalm me with Thy love," -- with all the faith espoused, death yet indeed a quivering mystery for the loving heart. Thoughtful, profound write.

Hilda Greenhough March 4, 2025 at 6:22 AM It seems sad to be dead. Your poem gives hope of eternity. I like the peaceful inspiration. A new existence begins. I commend your heartfelt true belief.

Ghairo Daniels March 4, 2025 at 4:52 AM Lovely rendition of Divine Love. I enjoyed the simplicity of expression. I liked the phrase - give me a ride in your chariot : such a beautiful childlike expression: loved this . Xx

Anne-Lise Andresen March 4, 2025 at 3:58 AM - Grief is part of life - it is the price of attachment ... but, painful and brutal - A poem with deep feelings, Valsa - Beautifully written :) - Best wishes in the contest :) - hugs

Tom Cunningham March 4, 2025 at 12:24 AM Quite an emotional write Valsa, I can feel the sadness in your words. Good luck in the contest. Tom

Maria Williams March 3, 2025 at 11:11 PM Dear Valsa, your poem is a deeply moving reflection on mortality, love, and the passage of time. The imagery is beautifully woven, capturing both the inevitability of death and the lingering echoes of human longing. The contrast between personal loss and the world's unceasing rhythm is poignant, reminding us of life’s transient nature. The final plea for divine solace and eternal peace adds a spiritual depth that is both profound and comforting. This piece resonates with the universal human experience, making it both personal and timeless. Truly a heartfelt and evocative composition! hugs

Bj Legros Kelley March 3, 2025 at 10:46 PM Valsa, what a deeply moving poem. You are a precious rose, and your poetry is like soft petals, stirring one's heart with your written words. I am sure the loss of your presence will hurt all those who have loved you and known you, so stick around a long, long time, ok? <3 I see this is written for a contest, it looks like a great contender to be sure. I love the ending, filled with hope and great joy, it will be so lovely to see the Savior! :)

Ink Empress March 3, 2025 at 9:51 PM Dear sweet valsa, this is such a profound and deeply moving poem that is so well articulated and delivered! I felt so much reading this. I especially love the lines "Days will follow days in endless succession. Time, chanting the refrains of joy and sorrow, On wings, shall fly to destinations unknown." I think many can resonate with those lines and the ending shows your need for eternal bliss away from the materialism of this world! How spiritual and soulful is this! Best wishes: pleasure reading you today. Sending you light always