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as the last petal falls
onto silk sheets
as the candles bloom
with electricity
as she shakes loose
her virginity
and beds her groom
as his blood drains
from his countenance
doomed
to her eyes
her breasts
her hips
time and time
again
as the last petal falls
from her pedestal
pink roses
of her youth
his eyes still melt
his heart beats fast
his smile upticks
until
death consummates
and
pries
the dynamic duo apart
the shadow of roses falling
she’s beyond the pale
in the pink
of blossoms beyond descriptive scent
depth
walking as if on rose water
waiting
seems but a moment for her
seems like forever to him
until forever after again

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Date: 3/13/2025 11:14:00 PM
"as the candles bloom with electricity' - the end is so deeo, Kim "forever after again"
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 4/17/2025 7:42:00 PM
Thank you, my dear friend!
Date: 3/6/2025 3:08:00 AM
Excellent verse. Happy weekend.
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 3/6/2025 1:14:00 PM
Happy-ness to you, sweet friend!
Date: 3/3/2025 12:39:00 PM
Beautifully imagined, Kim! Best of luck in the contest. :)
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 3/6/2025 1:14:00 PM
Thank you, Evelyn!
Date: 3/3/2025 10:40:00 AM
- Romantic, Kim :) - GL in the contest :) - hugs
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 3/6/2025 1:13:00 PM
Thank you, my friend! Hugs!
Date: 3/2/2025 5:11:00 PM
Lovely romantic words, Kim. Good luck in contest.
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 3/6/2025 1:13:00 PM
Thank you, Ann!
Date: 3/2/2025 4:06:00 PM
Wow. Such a sensual gem. Sure to be a winner
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 3/6/2025 1:13:00 PM
Thank you, my friend!
Date: 2/28/2025 9:39:00 PM
From youth to old age till the last petal falls, she has been perfuming the air with her fragrance. Beautiful poem showing how a woman blossoms as a flower from her nuptial bed to her death bed. All the best, dear Kim.
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 3/1/2025 4:53:00 AM
Thank you, Valse! Blessings to you, sweet Valsa!
Date: 2/28/2025 2:30:00 PM
Beautiful poem Kim. The imagery is excellent. Good luck with the contest
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 2/28/2025 2:36:00 PM
Thank you, Oliver!
Date: 2/28/2025 10:40:00 AM
I enjoyed reading your lovely write. "Good Luck" Have a blessed day/weekend writing away...............
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 2/28/2025 1:18:00 PM
Thank you, sweet, Paula, my friend!

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