As My Pen Danced

I waited, dressed to kill
in red,
and in love

both, of which 
I could have been coaxed out of

You have turned a pale shade of white,
my Valentine

Al Green sang to me,
as my pen danced as your substitute 
we danced all night long,
stationary, our dance floor.

As we whirled to the emotions
of words' sounds; hand in hand,
we went round and round
and round

No one else in the room
most of all, not you
as my ink turned 
from red to blue

Copyright © | Year Posted 2009



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Date: 4/20/2016 12:43:00 AM
awesome poem, regina. linda
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Date: 11/4/2010 8:09:00 AM
Adding this to my list of favorites! Great job! - Best, Karen
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Date: 9/18/2010 3:53:00 PM
thank you for your kind words
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Date: 9/18/2010 3:48:00 PM
Didn't see the change coming beautifully done. One to add to my favorites. Monica
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Date: 7/22/2010 3:00:00 PM
I really enjoyed reading your write, how wonderful a pen is to help us pour our feelings out
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Date: 7/21/2010 8:13:00 PM
ENJOYED THIS CONGRATS ON BEING FEATURED! RHONDA HERO
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Date: 7/21/2010 1:57:00 PM
nice one, much enjoyed, congrats on having it featured this week
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Date: 7/19/2010 11:19:00 AM
Thanks to all for the comments. I am a bit confused because my poem was just featured in May, 2010 and now, after being entered in the finals for the International contest it is featured again, along with the winning poems - Did my poem place in the contest at all? Why would mine be featured with all the winning poems if mine did not win? Maybe a member here who is more familiar with how things work could explain.. thanks. Regina
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Date: 7/19/2010 6:11:00 AM
Congratulations on your poetry being featured this week Regina. Love, Carol
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Date: 7/18/2010 7:24:00 PM
love this...very visual!! JB
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Date: 7/18/2010 6:36:00 PM
Great job on this poem, Regina! I loved it. - All the best, Karen
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Date: 7/18/2010 1:06:00 PM
Great write that deserves the homepage feature..Congratulations..Sara
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Date: 7/18/2010 6:12:00 AM
Many congrats on your feature this week. Rgds Janette
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Date: 7/18/2010 12:14:00 AM
Regina, boy, I can see why this one was chosen to be featured. I love the metaphoric message. Congratulations!
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Date: 6/3/2010 8:44:00 AM
Congratulations on your poetry making it through the first round Regina. I wish you the best in the finals. Love, Carol
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Date: 5/31/2010 2:09:00 PM
Congratulations on making it through the first round of the Poetry Soup contest with this poem. Best wishes in the finals. Karen
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Date: 5/13/2010 9:45:00 AM
Interesting composition in this one...Like the metaphoric language used..Congratulations on your poem being featured on home page..Sara
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Date: 5/12/2010 6:29:00 PM
Al Green, that's a call for me. i'm the man for your party and you wont be disapionted. we'll dance and i'll sing into your ear all his songs. this was very well penned . John Henry Loving III
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Date: 5/12/2010 12:23:00 PM
Congratulations on your feature, I just finished reading it on the front page. Very nice poem, very touching. I've been there. Keep it up!! :)
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Date: 5/12/2010 5:49:00 AM
Congratulations on your featured write this week
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Date: 5/12/2010 2:34:00 AM
Congratulations on your featured write this week Regina. Love, Carol
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Date: 5/11/2010 7:00:00 PM
I like this lighthearted yet insightful view on writing. Congratulations on having your poem featured. Wishing you continued success. Karen
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Date: 5/11/2010 10:44:00 AM
Many congrats on your featured piece this week. Rgds Janette
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Date: 5/9/2010 5:15:00 PM
excellent write..good imagery!! JB
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Date: 5/9/2010 2:37:00 PM
Excellent writing. Well deserve feature on the home pate
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