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We planted love inside our hearts a rooted tree, when but a seedling Carved our initials deep in the trunk with rings worn on our left fingers In early Spring of its second year a budded sprout began to grow By mid Summer of its fourth year branches drooped and became brittle In Autumn, its leaves fluttered and fell roots were exposed to the ground above Winter snows left it gasping for breath The tree weakened, hollow and dying Uprooted, it fell upon the ground and now lays covered in fungi and moss Long ago in my memory, a tree grew roots Limbs entwined like a groom and his bride The carving in its bark crumbled and I cried From somewhere near, a lone owl hoots

Copyright © | Year Posted 2017




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Date: 8/28/2017 4:39:00 PM
Very nice personification and imagery, telling the story. Amen, only Jesus what we do with and for Jesus will last. His is Love, personified. Amen
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Date: 8/15/2017 4:55:00 AM
I love the inclusion of the last line, "From somewhere near, a lone owl hoots," this carries many symbolic references, from love to lost love, and seasons come and gone! What a beautifully crafted poem my friend! I really enjoyed reading this illustrious piece this morning, Great Work!!
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Date: 8/15/2017 5:09:00 AM
Thank you, Russell. Your comments are always packed full of details and that is encouraging to poets.
Date: 8/14/2017 7:52:00 PM
It saddens me when another tree falls...lovely metaphor Lin
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Date: 8/14/2017 8:15:00 PM
It certainly is a waste of wood...metaphorically speaking
Date: 8/14/2017 3:16:00 PM
a sad but beautifully written poem, your metaphors are outstanding...dear poet
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Date: 8/14/2017 3:29:00 PM
Thank you most sincerely, Frederic. I treasure the comments you bestow upon this poem.
Date: 8/14/2017 3:13:00 PM
Even from its demise new life is born and hope renews its self, one might surmise, so sadly well done Lin.
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Date: 8/14/2017 3:28:00 PM
One might surmise as you do, and rightfully so, Charlie. Thank you.
Date: 8/14/2017 2:44:00 PM
The years pass, the seasons come and go as did the relationship Lin. I think many can relate to your sad and emotional poem so eloquently written:-) hugs jan xx
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Date: 8/14/2017 3:28:00 PM
Thank you very much for such lovely thoughts, Jan.
Date: 8/14/2017 2:18:00 PM
This is sad, but so well written Lin. You do well with expression of feelings in your poetry. It really reaches the reader. I like how you brought this through the seasons!
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Date: 8/14/2017 3:27:00 PM
Thanks so very much, Heidi. I appreciate your encouraging words.

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