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As I Was Walking In the Snow

Bladder bursting, I walked in the snow,

but got startled as I stooped to go!

Something more than just pee

sure got scared out of me.

My intruder was a wide-eyed doe!


Feb. 17 for Kevin Shaw's Contest "As I was Walking in the Snow"

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Jennifer Walker

Date: 2/27/2018 10:27:00 AM

Making me laugh with your humor.

Roy Pett

Date: 2/22/2018 3:48:00 PM

This is so funny Andrea, when you have to go you have to go, but who would expect to see a doe lol? G L in contest. :))

CayCay Jennings

Date: 2/20/2018 12:58:00 PM

Such a crappy thing to have happen! Lord a mercy, girl - you went there, the bathroom humor. I don't know whether to be proud or surprised, but I do know it was unexpected, making it all the better a read and the hook at the end was a great way to wrap it up. I'm not cleaning it up though! Love ya ... CayCay

Janice Canerdy

Date: 2/19/2018 12:05:00 PM

Good one, Andrea!! Janice

Alexis Y.

Date: 2/19/2018 9:50:00 AM

Lol! Andrea, Now this is funny. I wish you the best of luck in the contest:-) Alexis

Robert Warlov

Date: 2/19/2018 5:17:00 AM

Wider eyes apropos!

Becca Teagan

Date: 2/18/2018 10:20:00 PM

haha this is funny Andrea

Jack Horne

Date: 2/18/2018 1:06:00 PM

LOL, had a chuckle picturing this

Jesse Day

Date: 2/18/2018 11:32:00 AM

Cute and funny! I enjoy your sense of humor. Jesse

Sara Kendrick

Date: 2/18/2018 10:47:00 AM

Whoa!! Did this really happen? When one is out in a wooded area it can be scary especially so now as the coyote are increasing in numbers here, bobcats, and there are cougars around here also. Thanks for dropping by. If this one is for a contest reads like a good contender. Sara

Andrea Dietrich
Date: 2/18/2018 6:35:00 PM

Ha! like I would ever be out walking in the snow!!!

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 2/18/2018 8:43:00 AM

- Sounds like a cold experience, Andrea :))) - Best wishes and hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Silent One

Date: 2/18/2018 7:34:00 AM

haha! You are giving JAck Ellison a run for his money.. Loved your lim Andrea...

Arthur Vaso

Date: 2/18/2018 2:13:00 AM

so funny! The limerick is very very good!

Viv Wigley

Date: 2/18/2018 12:48:00 AM

Do-do due to Doe- doh! Fun write, Andrea, good luck x

Probir Gupta

Date: 2/18/2018 12:42:00 AM

Great ... Very enjoyable humour ...

Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart

Date: 2/17/2018 10:54:00 PM

You are hilarious! Love it ;) xomo!

Cheryl Hoffman

Date: 2/17/2018 10:33:00 PM

Lol, this is very funny as I can just imagine the whole pee scene! Love the humor in this bladder bursting (can relate!) snow scene! Good luck in the contest Andrea!~Che :)