As I Saw You

Your voice echoes in my mind
Your visage blacks my thoughts
I coundnt find you in the darkness
Your breathe is a lie I bought

Our bond is stronger than Earth
Held together with the mellow moon
Your eyes leads to another person
I sit alone indignant in the afternoon

Fire burns into my nostrils
A storm rages in my mind
Our taken by the sun's arms
No second chance would combine
Copyright © | Year Posted 2016

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Hamilton Avatar
September 22, 2016 at 10:35 AM
A nice effort, but a few errors in spelling and a few missing words, (I think) nice feel to it, but I'm left feeling incomplete, sorry but honest comment. Keep writing!
Farmer Avatar
September 22, 2016 at 4:45 PM
Thank You John. I'll revise it.
Wolf Avatar
September 22, 2016 at 9:45 AM
Nice job!!!
Farmer Avatar
September 22, 2016 at 4:46 PM
Thank You Rick.
Logan Avatar
September 22, 2016 at 9:01 AM
Well written on the whole but a few typos you might want to check over.
Farmer Avatar
September 22, 2016 at 4:45 PM
Absolutely Keith, I'll revise it. Thank You so much for reading it.
Gupta Avatar
September 22, 2016 at 5:44 AM
Well written ...
Farmer Avatar
September 22, 2016 at 4:46 PM
Thank You Probir.
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