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As Heaven Gazed

Why wallflower hearts need such a hard shove tho' reckoning an endless friendship grown. Wi' turned pedal eyes' slow blossom to love in yesterday's finest summer wind blown. Wonder will unquiet heart stop midbeat boyish peril calm and sweat'd palm betrays. Enticed perfume's smell as trembling lips meet fulfilled in deep need under heaven's gaze. So easy said as two friends forever, could I've but known alone's high price to pay. Promise kept in knife's sharpest endeavor.. when fool bravado'd soul gave yours away. Once so familiar heart left at love's feet, still savor days heaven chose ne'er complete.

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Robert Lindley

Date: 6/5/2023 7:50:00 AM

A wonderful sonnet my friend. I've myself encountered that -let just be friends a few times in my youth. Only once did the friendship thing work out for me well. And that because she was an angel and a very intelligent person that I so enjoyed talking to. A fav. a very good sonnet, closing couplet on the mark true.

Juliet Ligon

Date: 1/17/2023 2:49:00 PM

Beautiful poetic expression of being stuck in the "friend zone" forever. For women, though difficult, it can be done, even if there is still a fondness.

Shirley Hawkins

Date: 1/3/2023 6:57:00 PM

Your lovely sonnet is pure poetry; I wish I had penned that, Richard. A Happy New Year to you and yours, Take care, Shirley

Beata Agustin

Date: 12/30/2022 6:30:00 AM

Thanks for sharing this. By God's grace, I greet you with the peace and joy of Christmas toward a prosperous New Year along this present: "the gift of God is eternal life through Jesus Christ our Lord" (Romans 6:23 of the King James Bible). God bless you.

Deb M

Date: 12/29/2022 2:28:00 AM

Just beautiful Richard!!( I think its Richard?? Ha) Love it….Debx

Quoth Theraven
Date: 12/29/2022 6:17:00 PM

Hi Deb, Thanks for that comment. It is I. -Richard

Suzette Richards

Date: 12/29/2022 12:42:00 AM

Oh, this resonated with me on so many levels, Richard. To kill off potential love with: "Friends forever."

Suzette Richards
Date: 12/29/2022 10:50:00 PM

Richards, this brings us to the age-old conundrum: Can men and women be "only friends?" I loved the way you opened the sonnet with the innocence of youth: "wallflower hearts" and "boyish peril calm and sweat'd palm betray", and concluding with your final couplet that says it all: an unrequited love.

Quoth Theraven
Date: 12/29/2022 6:14:00 PM

Suzette, First thank you for your comment. Better to win their friendship than nothing? ~ con·so·la·tion prize : /?käns?'laSH?n priz/ noun ~ a prize given to a competitor who narrowly fails to win or who finishes last. "two hundred runners-up will get a consolation prize". -Richard