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This poem is dedicated to my good friend Jonathan French. He asked me to write a poem about the song by Sting called fields of gold.  I actually prefer the Eva Cassidy version.

Sting wrote it after he moved in to a new house with this partner Trudie Styler. The story is chronological. It is about courtship, marriage, and eventual death. The two people in the song meet, court, fall in love (at this point, he reveals that he has never really made such a strong promise/commitment to someone) but feels he is ready to now. "See the children run," their offspring and the "jealous sky" refer to the Heavens. Even Heaven is jealous of their love/relationship. The esteemed sun is jealous. Eventually, he dies and tells his love that they will always remember their love specifically, when she thinks of him, he wants to be personified as such... walking in fields of gold (barley). (www.songfacts.com)

Eva Cassidy's version was used for an advert about cancer, which is ironic as Eva died from cancer.  It is a song that is very personal to me also

What has become of me? Like a madman laughing in the rain, wandering through fields of barley, where ghosts whisper my name. Hesitantly venturing forward, reluctant to turn back, loved ones desperately hold my hand. Time is no longer a friend of mine. I'm aware this path shall be my last, but I'm smiling - satisfied, knowing the pain will end. Reminiscing seasons gone by, memories are like rose petals, softening each step - my mind is at peace knowing thorns can't cut me any more. Images flash by my first kiss, my last tear, words spoken, words lost in silence, and how the wind danced at sunset illuminating golden crops. Birds sing songs of goodbye, tomorrow there will be no sunrise. My heart will never again harvest upon nature's rewards. Scarecrows watch over barren fields, suffocated by absent hands. As each breath becomes shorter, my soul prepares to depart. But I'm lost in thought, wondering: Will it be celestial lullabies, or dancing with the devil? Simple Musings Silent One 2 January 2018

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Date: 1/29/2019 9:34:00 AM
Hi Silent, such a touching, moving write, when it comes to emotions, you know how to paint the heart of every emotion you use. An excellent write. I am sure your friend must have loved the content of this write. I can tell you that I do. Have a wonderful Tuesday. Your friend always....Mike.
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Date: 1/25/2018 5:42:00 PM
I love Eva Cassidy c.d.'s You friend must be satisfied with this poem.. I am in awe of "GLORY of HER MAGNIFICENCE, TWILIGHT OF AURORA. How does a mind like yours create such beauty with words. My stuff is so simple, thanks for encouragement from brilliant poet!!!
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Date: 1/25/2018 5:49:00 PM
Thank you Barbara, just simple words...
Date: 1/24/2018 12:39:00 PM
Great! A salty solution obscured my oculars. (~;
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Date: 1/18/2018 6:26:00 PM
An excellent poem my friend.Have a nice evening my friend.
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Date: 1/18/2018 7:07:00 AM
Wonderful write! Love it even in its sadness
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Date: 1/17/2018 12:40:00 PM
So touching my dear friend!!! Eloquently scribed...
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Date: 1/14/2018 11:26:00 AM
Exceptional, faved!
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Date: 1/11/2018 7:03:00 PM
Very good stuff....;-)
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Date: 1/8/2018 6:00:00 PM
wow, that third verse is so gorgeous comparing the rose petals to memories softening each step. LOVED that. Got to the bottom and thought, Silent One, I do not believe there is a devil waiting to dance with you. Maybe for the truly evil, but not for the many good folks I know!!!
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Date: 1/8/2018 10:25:00 AM
Wonderful write SO, I prefer original song, as sting is a genius...these words are also very special, as only you can write. Will reflect on these words for days, thanks for posting this jewel.
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Date: 1/8/2018 3:39:00 AM
Hi S.O. Masterfully crafted here and with a feeling af melancholy about the inevitable. I also pefer Eva Cassidys take on it. Exquisite write
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Date: 1/7/2018 9:25:00 AM
In a word, exquisite.....I'm blown away, so masterful!
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Date: 1/5/2018 8:40:00 PM
Altogether, a beautifully emotional presentation Silent One. The picture and the song are so poignant, but your poem is breathtaking melancholy at its artistic and poetic finest, deep, moving and tender. Golden poetry..
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Date: 1/4/2018 8:32:00 AM
Very lovely: picture, song and most of all this emotional poem, S-1. A poem that touches heart & soul. Regards // paul
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Date: 1/4/2018 3:09:00 AM
Celestial lullabies for you my dear dear friend. You are one of the kindest of God's Earth angels. And your wonderful poetry will live on as will you, always. Now don't make me start crying again. Love you....Carole hugssss to you... and Johnathon too. P.S. Loved the song. Eva Cassidy is one of my very favorite singers of all time.
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Date: 1/3/2018 10:28:00 PM
Beautiful and tender gift of pen Silent One, elegant, and eloquent.
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Date: 1/3/2018 2:41:00 PM
Your poem is as lovely as the song Silent! Death can be as beautiful as life. It all depends upon how you perceive it. : )
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Date: 1/3/2018 8:18:00 AM
This is too sad. There should be no wondering whether it will be celestial lullabyes or dancing with the devil. I hope Jonathan is ok. Beautiful writing though, Silent.
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Date: 1/3/2018 5:25:00 AM
Deep realization. Flash on journey of life. Your composition always touches excellence.
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Date: 1/2/2018 10:10:00 PM
They say when death is near, one’s entire life flashes before them. That being said you have created this masterpiece so exacting in its imagery It is almost like watching a film unravel from the beginning to the end. All the events starting at one’s birth leading to death are flashed before your readers.The mark of a brilliant poet to lead their readers to a depth of despair as in this case. The song choice is perfect too. Bravo and a fave....Maria
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Date: 1/2/2018 8:28:00 PM
beautiful my friend, :)
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Date: 1/2/2018 6:31:00 PM
I really relate to this deep and quiet personal musing. A fav to re-read.
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Date: 1/2/2018 4:05:00 PM
The song is beautiful but Your poem is absolutely breathtaking! I love it and a fave... hugs and smiles :)
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Date: 1/2/2018 3:41:00 PM
Beautiful song tinged with sadness...Well penned Silent
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Date: 1/2/2018 12:18:00 PM
This so wonderfully melancholy, Silent One! Emotions that so many of us face or will face, so beautifully put into words. I love it.
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