As Darkness Falls Upon Me

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I lie awake while
Desperate for sleep
Time it keeps passing
Yet the hours bleak

I've come to the conclusion
That I must be doing something
Wrong or maybe it's just my 
Patience long gone

I don't know what others think
Before settling for bed
But sure wish I could abandon
these festering thoughts
As the pillow cradles my head

Mostly because of anger
Maybe because of rage
Mostly because I desperately seek
The key that opens this cage

How am I to love a man
Who has no sympathy for my grief
Instead of holding my hand
He shuns and grinds his teeth

What the f*** am I supposed to do
With this disdain for life I feel
Cut the wounds even deeper to see
If by all means it ends or heals

Copyright © | Year Posted 2013



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Date: 7/20/2013 7:13:00 PM
Raw emotion. I respect you. Hope your heart doesn't weigh you down too much. From what I see you are such an uplifting poet, but I must say I am glad to see a different shade in your work. Very emotional one. Loved it. Always, Laura
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Madelin Barton
Date: 7/22/2013 10:14:00 AM
I love that you've taken the time to read my poetry and understood them. I write from a very obscure and painful place. I am but a novice trying to find an outlet to hurt and make it into something better thank you so much for your encouraging words friend
Date: 3/14/2013 4:21:00 PM
Great poem! I love the haunting ending. Definitely one of my favorites.
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Madelin Barton
Date: 3/14/2013 4:30:00 PM
Hi Jacob thanks for commenting on my poetry and visiting my page -Maddie
Date: 2/11/2013 2:33:00 PM
God is a very jealous god.
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Date: 2/11/2013 7:19:00 AM
A touching poem, Madelin - Thank you. - Hope your week will be beautiful and good. - oxox / / Anne-Lise :)
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Madelin Barton
Date: 2/20/2013 4:29:00 PM
Thank you!!!
Date: 2/10/2013 1:21:00 PM
Painful...i love it!
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Madelin Barton
Date: 2/20/2013 4:31:00 PM
;) It's an outlet nothing more... A pen can wear many faces but the heart knows with what intentions it writes Thank you
Date: 2/8/2013 9:53:00 PM
Good stuff there ps, smart people cant sleep
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Madelin Barton
Date: 2/27/2013 1:58:00 PM
Thank you for visiting my page and commenting on my poetry ;)
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