Richard Lamoureux Poet I do not know?

Ars Poetica

A poem should be smooth and flat
As a jagged rock
A poem should wander
As well as be expected
Wandering through a mind
Still minding it's own business
A poem should laugh and cry
As we wade through tiered rivers
A poem should drown us
As we take in breath
Liquid life forming gills
Filtering our bottled fear
A poem should be intoxicating
As cutting as a broken glass

I'm not sure if I understand the form but I gave it a go.

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Eileen Manassian June 19, 2015 at 3:25 PM I don't know about this form, but I know that you rock poetry, Richard. :) Hugs Richard Lamoureux June 20, 2015 at 12:30 AM Thanks and a big smile and hug back Eileen.

Verlena S. Walker June 14, 2015 at 7:01 PM Well done Richard. I like how you depict a poem... Verlena

Monterey Sirak June 10, 2015 at 11:32 AM I don't understand the form either but I love your poem! "A poem should drown us as we take in breath." , wow, I think you just described the impact your poetry has on us, your adoring readers. Richard Lamoureux June 10, 2015 at 5:02 PM What a nice thing to say Monterey. Thanks.

Skat A June 9, 2015 at 12:18 PM Richard. Congratulations on your awesome win. HUGS **SKAT**

Poet Destroyer A June 8, 2015 at 11:28 PM a wonderful win Richard. LINDA

Andrea Dietrich June 8, 2015 at 11:27 PM well thank Goodness it is on the winners' list. Let me be the first to say CONGRATULATIONS.

Andrea Dietrich June 8, 2015 at 11:26 PM I think your poem followed the most closely that example that he had given us . Don't know how you placed but I think it deserved a high win. I really like this one. A few of the lines echoed my own thoughts on Ars Poetica!! (hmmm, I am not seeing congrats?? Did this not place??? Gotta go see!)

Ravindra K Kapoor June 8, 2015 at 2:01 AM How beautifully you have named those wonderful colors without which even the beauty of a very vivid and heavily loaded poem often gets dim. A7 for this sweet lovely creative write dear friend. I would make it a favorite one to keep in mind the essentials of a real good Poem. Love and best wishes always Richard ...Ravindra K Kapoor . Richard Lamoureux June 8, 2015 at 7:32 AM Thanks Ravindra, a very thoughtful response to my poem.

Pandita Sietesantos June 7, 2015 at 7:40 PM Richard, this is such an inspirational write that provides a wonderful guideline for new poets as well as veterans. It is one that deserves to go to the Favs! Love it, my friend! Well done amd I rate it a solid "7!" Pandita Richard Lamoureux June 7, 2015 at 7:49 PM Thanks Pandita. Hugs Rick.

Charmaine Chircop June 7, 2015 at 6:33 PM A poem should love and cry,.I so love this line. An excellent poem Richard. By the way , re your comment on my mac donalds gingle, Im going to Scotland in July,and now you got me all curious about the kilt : ) Richard Lamoureux June 7, 2015 at 7:30 PM Ha ha! That makes me smile. Have a great trip!

Afolabi Muideen June 7, 2015 at 2:07 AM This is more than 7 to me I really like your poem. Liquid life forming gill filtering our battle fear, a poem should be intoxicating as cutting as broken glass. Excellent write Richard........A.M. Richard Lamoureux June 7, 2015 at 8:29 AM Thanks A.M. You are kind.

Constance La France June 6, 2015 at 10:18 PM Richard, I love your flowing words, well done 7 and thanks for visiting my poem, bite me Richard Lamoureux June 7, 2015 at 9:08 AM Thanks Constance, hugs Rick.

Charles Bernabi June 6, 2015 at 8:18 PM When in doubt ''I do not know'' seems to be the logical form to put a piece under. In that I think it's more important that a poet is understood and your beautiful poem is one I'm sure most aspiring writers can relate to. Thanks for sharing Richard. Richard Lamoureux June 7, 2015 at 9:09 AM My pleasure Charles.

Kp Nunez June 6, 2015 at 9:28 AM Love your take, Rick. "Liquid life forming gills" is an awesome line among really awesome ones. One is more alive than ever while being overwhelmed by the onslaught of feelings while putting them into words. A 7 and hugs! Kim

Milton Robertson June 5, 2015 at 7:58 PM The form, I don't know ether I'm still trying to find out what a poet and poems are. I do know, I like what you wrote. Richard Lamoureux June 5, 2015 at 8:47 PM Thanks Milton, I appreciate the visit.

Judy Konos June 5, 2015 at 4:50 PM Well...understand the form or not this is fantastic....write more that may have you puzzled.....wow wow Richard Lamoureux June 5, 2015 at 5:19 PM Thanks Judy, that is an encouraging comment. I love the new profile picture, you have a lovely smile and happy eyes.

Nette Onclaud June 5, 2015 at 2:52 PM so true.. a poem should assault the senses, rich.. this is a marvelous piece.. huggs Richard Lamoureux June 5, 2015 at 5:39 PM Thanks and hugs back.

Casarah Nance June 5, 2015 at 1:38 PM I don't know what the form or prompt is but I like your creation. A poem should be smooth and flat as a jagged rock-I love that line! Richard Lamoureux June 5, 2015 at 5:40 PM Thanks Angel Girl Cass!

Cecilia Macfarlane June 5, 2015 at 1:04 PM Excellent write Rick.....poetry should evoke feelings as you so wonderfully described. Hugs Richard Lamoureux June 7, 2015 at 10:51 PM Thanks and a big hug back to you. Richard Lamoureux June 7, 2015 at 10:51 PM Thanks and a big hug back to you.