Another Man's Clothes

The idea behind this poem came from reading a poem of the same title, written by Richard “Canadian Man-god” Lamoureux. Now, his poem went in an entirely powerful, yet other, direction than I thought it was going to go. I happily let him know that. So, he decided to have me touch upon where I thought he was going with his poem. 

Some people really need to be careful what they ask for… ;-) 

On an 8pm, Louisiana dream

Tastes of nocturnal, July humidity
Succumbs flagrant passions 
With moistened grip, they tease

Coltrane whispers annihilate tense exhales
Under concave moon

She threw Mr. So and So onto Pacific Ocean’s waterbed
As if she was a professional baseball pitcher
Down
The
Middle

His exuberance would shatter sound’s tattered walls.

Slow grinds
Chemical reactionary bliss
Similar to Neutron bombs
Minus the consequences

Her tailored skin
Ready for gripped, enigmatic resolutions

But, first,
She had to “freshen up”

“You’re already being fresh, don’t stop on my account”,
He says with Monday mourning frustration

As cedar scented bathroom door shuts with determined patience,
And running water with a mix of Celine Dion hums from her trained throat
He stands to gather his thoughts…

…until his eyes exit stage right towards her opened travel bag

A pair of satin boxers & edible, Cotton Candy hand-cuffs from Target
With a signed, perfumed gift tag,
“Can’t wait for tomorrow, Mr. Such and Such,
-Love, your Hedonistic dream”

As running water came to serenity’s halt,
She exited restroom with shedding curves.

Her strut became dislocated,
As she stared into his trembling pupils
Wiping the cotton coating from his lips

“Too bad you couldn’t chew your way out of this one”,
The other half of the handcuffs smeared in cursive signature
Against yellow-gold gift tag he hands her with unedited closure

With striking slams against Louisiana hotel door
Parallel to Mother Nature’s thunderous clap

He exits stage left
Giving almost-lover
A proverbial slap

©Drake J. Eszes
Copyright © | Year Posted 2013

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Lamoureux Avatar
April 24, 2014 at 7:46 AM
This one caused me to smile once again! Great way to start my day Drake.
Tacito Avatar
April 24, 2014 at 9:26 AM
:)
Jones Avatar
December 22, 2013 at 5:58 PM
I'm with James..the ending...:-) :-) :-) wow..and better mother nature's thunderous clap than well...penicillin? :-) :-) :-) :-) you just have way too much fun Drake.....:-) :-) :-) :-) haha...
Tacito Avatar
December 22, 2013 at 8:44 PM
Indeed I do! =D Thank you, Donna!
Kelley Avatar
December 16, 2013 at 8:34 AM
that ending though...haha, damn
Tacito Avatar
December 16, 2013 at 8:44 AM
LOL! I know, right?! Thanks man!
Lamoureux Avatar
December 9, 2013 at 9:38 AM
See comment below Drake.
Tacito Avatar
December 9, 2013 at 9:39 AM
Read & deeply appreciated. =D
Lamoureux Avatar
December 8, 2013 at 1:41 AM
Great comments Drake. See you in the morning.
Tacito Avatar
December 8, 2013 at 9:09 AM
For sure!
Virden Avatar
December 7, 2013 at 11:32 AM
Cotton candy hand cuffs... Damn, I'm heading to Target now! See what you did... Lol Love it! XOXOX
Tacito Avatar
December 7, 2013 at 1:06 PM
HAHAHA!!!!! Hilarious! I'm glad you enjoyed, Sarai! Shop well! ;-)
Lu Avatar
December 7, 2013 at 10:58 AM
OMG what have I been missing here in the mix of this soupy place Drake? LMAO.. OK whatEeeeV er. My eye brows were raIised. Defintitly got my attention as always, been not remarking much editor gave me a 2 day extention as of late.. just plugging away, another day but you my friend are one of the best here. Love your work! always a very big fan. Love ya! Cindy
Tacito Avatar
December 7, 2013 at 1:05 PM
Hey Cindy!!!!! LOL you're hilarious. I do appreciate your thoughts on this. You're very kind. Thank you so much!
Sivey Avatar
December 6, 2013 at 11:24 PM
You always impress me with your works and this one is no different, such a masterful poem my friend! I can feel the heat as like a dragon is near breathing is glorious fire! Making me all crispy! Thank you for writing this wonderful piece, awesome job!!
Tacito Avatar
December 7, 2013 at 1:04 PM
Hey Russell! =D That is really cool of you to say. And BONUS for your mention of "dragon". LOL "crispy", nice. Thanks!
Dietrich Avatar
December 6, 2013 at 7:08 PM
KINKY!!!! Great images for that, Drake. Was this for the sensuous contest?
Tacito Avatar
December 6, 2013 at 8:06 PM
Nah, I submitted "Drip Drop" for that. But, thank you, Andrea! :)
Onclaud Avatar
December 6, 2013 at 1:59 PM
yeow.. a tease of sensous pleasure assauting the mind with a different kind of passion's tricks...the best lustful scenes always are the ones that show just enough, and leave the rest to imagination... hmm, kinky?... brave write, drake!... huggs
Tacito Avatar
December 6, 2013 at 2:11 PM
Straight to the core, dear Nette. Oh yeah. =) Thank you so much for that!
Chircop Avatar
December 6, 2013 at 10:35 AM
Hi Drake..Im wondering what you ate for breakfast or best what you had for dinner to be inspired in such ways.I really enjoyed your take on..on this : ).
Tacito Avatar
December 6, 2013 at 1:23 PM
I ate a dose of Richard's poem and this happened. =) Thanks very much, Charmaine!
Lamoureux Avatar
December 6, 2013 at 8:57 AM
You kill me Drake, there are not enough 7's to tell you how much I like this one. I'm honored that I could inspire such a magnificent piece. I will be reading my poem, you will have to read this one. Outstanding my friend. A sure fired favorite in my books.
Lamoureux Avatar
December 6, 2013 at 9:04 AM
;0)
Tacito Avatar
December 6, 2013 at 9:01 AM
AWESOME!!! No 7s needed for me. You smiled & enjoyed it. That's all I can ask for. That will always overcome a numerical score. :) Many thanks, Richard. And thank YOU for being the inspiration behind this. =D
Manassian Avatar
December 6, 2013 at 8:36 AM
WOW...........close call. That IS a twist on Richard's poem, alright! :) Hope all is well with you, my dear. Hugs
Tacito Avatar
December 6, 2013 at 8:37 AM
I know, right?? LOL! Things are quite well. Thank you so much, dear Eileen!
Tacito Avatar
December 6, 2013 at 8:36 AM
You're so charming. And, "cease to amuse" you? NO WAY! That would be too easy. =P Thank you so much, Vie.
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