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Another man's Clothes

The idea behind this poem came from reading a poem of the same title, written by Richard “Canadian Man-god” Lamoureux. Now, his poem went in an entirely powerful, yet other, direction than I thought it was going to go. I happily let him know that. So, he decided to have me touch upon where I thought he was going with his poem. Some people really need to be careful what they ask for… ;-) On an 8pm, Louisiana dream Tastes of nocturnal, July humidity Succumbs flagrant passions With moistened grip, they tease Coltrane whispers annihilate tense exhales Under concave moon She threw Mr. So and So onto Pacific Ocean’s waterbed As if she was a professional baseball pitcher Down The Middle His exuberance would shatter sound’s tattered walls. Slow grinds Chemical reactionary bliss Similar to Neutron bombs Minus the consequences Her tailored skin Ready for gripped, enigmatic resolutions But, first, She had to “freshen up” “You’re already being fresh, don’t stop on my account”, He says with Monday mourning frustration As cedar scented bathroom door shuts with determined patience, And running water with a mix of Celine Dion hums from her trained throat He stands to gather his thoughts… …until his eyes exit stage right towards her opened travel bag A pair of satin boxers & edible, Cotton Candy hand-cuffs from Target With a signed, perfumed gift tag, “Can’t wait for tomorrow, Mr. Such and Such, -Love, your Hedonistic dream” As running water came to serenity’s halt, She exited restroom with shedding curves. Her strut became dislocated, As she stared into his trembling pupils Wiping the cotton coating from his lips “Too bad you couldn’t chew your way out of this one”, The other half of the handcuffs smeared in cursive signature Against yellow-gold gift tag he hands her with unedited closure With striking slams against Louisiana hotel door Parallel to Mother Nature’s thunderous clap He exits stage left Giving almost-lover A proverbial slap ©Drake J. Eszes

Copyright © | Year Posted 2013




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Date: 4/24/2014 7:46:00 AM
This one caused me to smile once again! Great way to start my day Drake.
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Poet Tacito
Date: 4/24/2014 9:26:00 AM
:)
Date: 12/22/2013 5:58:00 PM
I'm with James..the ending...:-) :-) :-) wow..and better mother nature's thunderous clap than well...penicillin? :-) :-) :-) :-) you just have way too much fun Drake.....:-) :-) :-) :-) haha...
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Date: 12/22/2013 8:44:00 PM
Indeed I do! =D Thank you, Donna!
Date: 12/16/2013 8:34:00 AM
that ending though...haha, damn
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Date: 12/16/2013 8:44:00 AM
LOL! I know, right?! Thanks man!
Date: 12/9/2013 9:38:00 AM
See comment below Drake.
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Date: 12/9/2013 9:39:00 AM
Read & deeply appreciated. =D
Date: 12/8/2013 1:41:00 AM
Great comments Drake. See you in the morning.
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Date: 12/8/2013 9:09:00 AM
For sure!
Date: 12/7/2013 11:32:00 AM
Cotton candy hand cuffs... Damn, I'm heading to Target now! See what you did... Lol Love it! XOXOX
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Date: 12/7/2013 1:06:00 PM
HAHAHA!!!!! Hilarious! I'm glad you enjoyed, Sarai! Shop well! ;-)
Date: 12/7/2013 10:58:00 AM
OMG what have I been missing here in the mix of this soupy place Drake? LMAO.. OK whatEeeeV er. My eye brows were raIised. Defintitly got my attention as always, been not remarking much editor gave me a 2 day extention as of late.. just plugging away, another day but you my friend are one of the best here. Love your work! always a very big fan. Love ya! Cindy
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Date: 12/7/2013 1:05:00 PM
Hey Cindy!!!!! LOL you're hilarious. I do appreciate your thoughts on this. You're very kind. Thank you so much!
Date: 12/6/2013 11:24:00 PM
You always impress me with your works and this one is no different, such a masterful poem my friend! I can feel the heat as like a dragon is near breathing is glorious fire! Making me all crispy! Thank you for writing this wonderful piece, awesome job!!
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Date: 12/7/2013 1:04:00 PM
Hey Russell! =D That is really cool of you to say. And BONUS for your mention of "dragon". LOL "crispy", nice. Thanks!
Date: 12/6/2013 7:08:00 PM
KINKY!!!! Great images for that, Drake. Was this for the sensuous contest?
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Date: 12/6/2013 8:06:00 PM
Nah, I submitted "Drip Drop" for that. But, thank you, Andrea! :)
Date: 12/6/2013 1:59:00 PM
yeow.. a tease of sensous pleasure assauting the mind with a different kind of passion's tricks...the best lustful scenes always are the ones that show just enough, and leave the rest to imagination... hmm, kinky?... brave write, drake!... huggs
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Date: 12/6/2013 2:11:00 PM
Straight to the core, dear Nette. Oh yeah. =) Thank you so much for that!
Date: 12/6/2013 10:35:00 AM
Hi Drake..Im wondering what you ate for breakfast or best what you had for dinner to be inspired in such ways.I really enjoyed your take on..on this : ).
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Date: 12/6/2013 1:23:00 PM
I ate a dose of Richard's poem and this happened. =) Thanks very much, Charmaine!
Date: 12/6/2013 8:57:00 AM
You kill me Drake, there are not enough 7's to tell you how much I like this one. I'm honored that I could inspire such a magnificent piece. I will be reading my poem, you will have to read this one. Outstanding my friend. A sure fired favorite in my books.
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Date: 12/6/2013 9:04:00 AM
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Date: 12/6/2013 9:01:00 AM
AWESOME!!! No 7s needed for me. You smiled & enjoyed it. That's all I can ask for. That will always overcome a numerical score. :) Many thanks, Richard. And thank YOU for being the inspiration behind this. =D
Date: 12/6/2013 8:36:00 AM
WOW...........close call. That IS a twist on Richard's poem, alright! :) Hope all is well with you, my dear. Hugs
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Date: 12/6/2013 8:37:00 AM
I know, right?? LOL! Things are quite well. Thank you so much, dear Eileen!
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Date: 12/6/2013 8:36:00 AM
You're so charming. And, "cease to amuse" you? NO WAY! That would be too easy. =P Thank you so much, Vie.