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ANGELS AND DEMONS IN HER HEAD "Abort it!! and from this day and on, no more us. NO. MORE. US.!" (These the earthshaking words she heard from him.) This was the man that made her feel she's pretty. She's nice. She's worth every care and touch, but this time, he denied her. He want her out from his life. Blues skies he promised flew fast like the wind, so are the smiles, moon and stars he vowed to share. The light and shades, they are painting nine months ago turned fast in a minute in an envelope-tinge of black. Liquid diamonds- a curtain flow from her eyes as that one test. Two red lines now change her life. Sponge soft are her knees. Gypsy are her shaking heels. Chilly sweats cascade to chaperon her tears. Alone. Scared. Frightened. Torn. Horror is the athlete running through her reverie for she knows... She knows the world she's in may stop and stare at her. No lax brows no smiling eyes rather arched brows and big eyes ready to claw. Lightning fingers and tidal palms may grace her face. Lashing monstrous words she will hear. All these plugs, churns... regurgitating to her nerves. Angels and demons knocking to her head-- they, she --all in a battle for life. Should she tell her parents about this? to her mama... who didn't even care to stop even for awhile just to ask how she is? Her mom who prefers going out with her friends rather than with her? To her papa, who like more to watch a television? who likes staying out 'til dawn more than paying attention to her talks. Yes,her phone is always new. Her room as big as her school's classroom. Her pocket like a walking bank. Her parents taught her to speak but when she wanted a talk no one there. She walks so well. They even tell her she could be a model. Yet, her parents refuse her for a stroll. Ah! She is hurting-- HURTING... Her hurt is cutting deep reaching further to her already broken soul... Her life-- like the leaning Tower of Pisa even a collapsed castle; a black hole but lo! some voice within tells her: "soon from your belly a new life will begin..." _____________________________________________ Sponsor Debbie Guzzi Contest Name Tam Lin Placed 3rd... O.E. Guillermo 11:49 pm, April 14, 2015

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Date: 5/18/2015 12:52:00 PM
I can see how you put your heart into this write !! Well done, Olive !!
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Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser
Date: 5/23/2015 6:26:00 AM
Thank you Carrie .
Date: 5/16/2015 3:38:00 PM
Thank you for entering and for understanding. Situations like this happen in the 21st century. It's too bad, but understandable-- since who or what is a monster changes by culture. Congrad's, Light & Love
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Date: 5/23/2015 6:25:00 AM
Thank you so much Debbie.. :)!
Date: 5/16/2015 2:56:00 PM
Hi Olive, Congratulations in DG's contest. Always & Forever ~LINDA~
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Date: 5/23/2015 6:24:00 AM
Thank you Linda... :)
Date: 5/16/2015 10:30:00 AM
Olive, Congrats on your Tim Lin win..... SKAT
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Date: 5/23/2015 6:22:00 AM
thank you Skat.. :)!
Date: 4/23/2015 3:43:00 AM
Awesome! This ought to be enough to keep the fellows on their toes.... Whatever that means...
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Date: 4/23/2015 8:13:00 AM
Thank you for leaving a comment.. :)~olive eloisa :)!
Date: 4/14/2015 9:26:00 AM
This is moving and so powerful...such decisions are difficult and heartbreaking and you've captured the emotions quite well.
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Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser
Date: 4/19/2015 7:39:00 AM
thank you so much ML.. Im glad that you are captured as I was when am making the poem..
Date: 4/14/2015 7:22:00 AM
- A shame for the family (?) .......... A crying baby does not fit perfectly, among jewels and glittering objects ... or TV ....... such a pity !!! - Tower of Pisa will fall !!! (7) - Really great written, dear Olive :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 4/19/2015 7:26:00 AM
Thank you Anne Lise.. :)! hugs back!!!
Date: 4/14/2015 12:21:00 AM
Strong words with great depth Olive! Exquisite write my dear!
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Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser
Date: 4/18/2015 8:47:00 AM
thank you so much Dr. Upma.. :)!
Date: 4/13/2015 4:28:00 PM
how old is your soul?To have such depth and understanding takes most people years, some never do.My first thoughts after reading your powerful poem..
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Date: 5/16/2015 9:50:00 PM
thank you Debbie..:)
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Date: 5/16/2015 3:37:00 PM
You see Olive why Ma did not want you to enter the Fairy one? ;)
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Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser
Date: 4/16/2015 11:01:00 AM
Thank you so much Frederic for dropping by with such humbling comment.. :)! God bless us all.. :)! ~olive eloisa
Date: 4/13/2015 1:26:00 PM
Impressed, sure am with this beautiful, sad, message fueled poetry Oliz. Love the journey you take the reader on, and the ending is wonderful ;-) Mega Hugs for this Gem little one // Dino James xxxx
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Date: 4/15/2015 7:45:00 PM
Huge James thank you so much for you support.. :)!!! am glad you loving the journey am taking you,,, :)!!! (((hugs much)))//olive eloisa ;)
Date: 4/13/2015 12:48:00 PM
Olive - a very moving poem. Good job!
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Date: 4/15/2015 9:02:00 AM
thank you so much Wally.. :)!
Date: 4/13/2015 12:24:00 PM
A great write as always, Olive. You've captured the angst and anxiety that goes with the story. A 7. :)
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Date: 4/14/2015 7:18:00 AM
THank you so much Kim, I appreciate your visit so much...hugs!~olive eloisa
Date: 4/13/2015 12:04:00 PM
This is a beautifully tragic story. The happy ending was uplifting, but the entire poem was a delight!
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Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser
Date: 4/14/2015 6:53:00 AM
Thank you so much Anna for leaving your comment.. :)! I think much on how I end this... choosing death or life, angel or demon like action.. and so I choose that ending.. :) ~olive eloisa
Date: 4/13/2015 11:26:00 AM
Oh Olive a heartbreaking situation so senitively penned - last year I wrote a poem for a contest but never posted it as it was on the same subject - so glad this has such a happy ending:-) Hugs Jan xx 7 xx
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Date: 4/13/2015 10:07:00 PM
you should post it Jan.. :) I'd like to see your version.. :)!!! I really don't know how to end this one.. but as most of the time I want to end a poem of mine in the lighter side.. :)! thanks much.. :)!//olive eloisa :)!

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