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And Sweet Is Her Demise

In primrose twilight, summer is still near. She whispers in my ear; I hear her in the one lone owl that hoots to only me. I wake to find her shining through the clouds - though breathing not so warmly on my cheek. I glimpse her waning smile as in a field I dance to soundless music in her sun. My mind goes wandering, and in the breeze I hear her sigh, for she is lingering within the scent of asters that I pluck. I’m hanging on to that one glint I see of her before me in gold glitter dusk. But in the cries of geese across the sky, she calls goodbye, and sweet is her demise. Dec. 2, 2016 for the Blank Verse Poetry Contest of Janice Canerdy

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Date: 2/7/2019 12:17:00 AM
Beautiful, Andrea. Congrats on your well deserved win.
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Date: 2/6/2019 4:23:00 PM
Very lovely, and truly sweet- with a great title that also serves as a great closing. Congrats on your win, Andrea
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Date: 2/6/2019 3:46:00 PM
Andrea, this poem is lovely and sweet :) Your word choice and flow makes for a beautiful blank verse. Congratulations on your win on Mile 16 of my 2019 Poetry Marathon Contest! Thank you so much for supporting my contests. By continuing to place in the contests you are accumulating points toward the final. ~Mark
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Date: 2/6/2019 3:31:00 PM
Such a beautiful description of summer's farewell, Andrea. Very creative with excellent imagery. Congratulations on your win! Hugs, carolyn
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Date: 2/6/2019 3:27:00 PM
And it'll be quite some time before we feel her presence once more! A beautiful poem,Andrea. Congratulations on your win.
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Date: 8/28/2018 5:24:00 PM
Beautiful poem, Andrea.
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Date: 4/13/2018 10:27:00 PM
Lovely, Andrea. Charming.
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Date: 10/8/2017 9:09:00 PM
Such a beautiful portrayal. I actually became the fowl in flight! Wow!
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Date: 5/21/2017 3:06:00 PM
Andrea, congratulation on your top placement for this beautiful poem.
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Date: 5/20/2017 6:44:00 PM
Lovely, Andrea! Congrats on your top win :)
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Date: 5/20/2017 5:15:00 PM
Congrats on this beauty, Andrea!
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Date: 5/20/2017 3:46:00 PM
This is beautiful, Dre. I think you've found your calling in the blank verse! Congrats on your well deserved win. xoxo
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Date: 5/20/2017 2:42:00 PM
Andrea, so wonderful, congratulations :)
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Date: 5/20/2017 2:09:00 PM
Andrea, congrats on your well-deserved top win in my blank verse contest with this GREAT poem! Janice
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Date: 12/24/2016 11:02:00 AM
Another home run Andrea ! You should definitely publish your poems. Awesome descriptive writing.
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Date: 12/22/2016 6:36:00 PM
This is wonderful!:) and yes it is a very similar comparison to October Wind...love the last two lines:)
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Date: 12/22/2016 12:33:00 PM
Stunning evocation of the passing of a season, Andrea. A terrific poem, I can see why you won. Congrats. I don't think I can ever get the hang of Blank verse. Guess I'm just missing that poetic chromosome. You have it in bundles however. Great poem. Love and joy to you.
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Date: 12/18/2016 10:04:00 AM
Lovely Andrea.
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Date: 12/18/2016 8:42:00 AM
This is so beautiful. I love the spirits of seasons personified, So inspired. Congratulations on your top placement. Goes to my FAV's and a 10. Mugs, SuZ
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Date: 12/16/2016 9:37:00 PM
I'm not surprised to see this one got the trophy. Congrats Andrea.
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Date: 12/16/2016 10:40:00 AM
Ooh nice golden cup. Well done.the nostalgic ending gives this poem its greatness. Congratulations. Jannie
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Date: 12/12/2016 6:31:00 AM
Masterfully penned.
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Date: 12/11/2016 4:47:00 PM
I woke up today thinking about this poem, thinking, "Oh my God is that good."
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Date: 12/11/2016 11:41:00 AM
Stunning write...perfect meter and lovely win! congrats ..super 7!
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Date: 12/11/2016 11:21:00 AM
Well deserved win with this splendid poem, Andrea. Congratulations!
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