Premiere Contest WinnerAnd Sweet Is Her Demise

In primrose twilight, summer is still near. She whispers in my ear; I hear her in the one lone owl that hoots to only me. I wake to find her shining through the clouds - though breathing not so warmly on my cheek. I glimpse her waning smile as in a field I dance to soundless music in her sun. My mind goes wandering, and in the breeze I hear her sigh, for she is lingering within the scent of asters that I pluck. I’m hanging on to that one glint I see of her before me in gold glitter dusk. But in the cries of geese across the sky, she calls goodbye, and sweet is her demise. Dec. 2, 2016 for the Blank Verse Poetry Contest of Janice Canerdy
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Vinson Avatar
December 31, 2020 at 5:17 PM
This remains one of my all-time favorite poems. : )
Gauthier Avatar
February 7, 2019 at 12:17 AM
Beautiful, Andrea. Congrats on your well deserved win.
Carber Avatar
February 6, 2019 at 4:23 PM
Very lovely, and truly sweet- with a great title that also serves as a great closing. Congrats on your win, Andrea
Toney Avatar
February 6, 2019 at 3:46 PM
Andrea, this poem is lovely and sweet :) Your word choice and flow makes for a beautiful blank verse. Congratulations on your win on Mile 16 of my 2019 Poetry Marathon Contest! Thank you so much for supporting my contests. By continuing to place in the contests you are accumulating points toward the final. ~Mark
Devonshire Avatar
February 6, 2019 at 3:31 PM
Such a beautiful description of summer's farewell, Andrea. Very creative with excellent imagery. Congratulations on your win! Hugs, carolyn
Watson Avatar
February 6, 2019 at 3:27 PM
And it'll be quite some time before we feel her presence once more! A beautiful poem,Andrea. Congratulations on your win.
Duet Avatar
August 28, 2018 at 5:24 PM
Beautiful poem, Andrea.
Gauthier Avatar
April 13, 2018 at 10:27 PM
Lovely, Andrea. Charming.
Wilae Avatar
October 8, 2017 at 9:09 PM
Such a beautiful portrayal. I actually became the fowl in flight! Wow!
Bhattacharya Avatar
May 21, 2017 at 3:06 PM
Andrea, congratulation on your top placement for this beautiful poem.
Leiser Avatar
May 20, 2017 at 6:44 PM
Lovely, Andrea! Congrats on your top win :)
Rodrigues Avatar
May 20, 2017 at 5:15 PM
Congrats on this beauty, Andrea!
Harding Avatar
May 20, 2017 at 3:46 PM
This is beautiful, Dre. I think you've found your calling in the blank verse! Congrats on your well deserved win. xoxo
White Avatar
May 20, 2017 at 2:42 PM
Andrea, so wonderful, congratulations :)
Canerdy Avatar
May 20, 2017 at 2:09 PM
Andrea, congrats on your well-deserved top win in my blank verse contest with this GREAT poem! Janice
Adams Avatar
December 24, 2016 at 11:02 AM
Another home run Andrea ! You should definitely publish your poems. Awesome descriptive writing.
Hagy Avatar
December 22, 2016 at 6:36 PM
This is wonderful!:) and yes it is a very similar comparison to October Wind...love the last two lines:)
Robinson Jr. Avatar
December 22, 2016 at 12:33 PM
Stunning evocation of the passing of a season, Andrea. A terrific poem, I can see why you won. Congrats. I don't think I can ever get the hang of Blank verse. Guess I'm just missing that poetic chromosome. You have it in bundles however. Great poem. Love and joy to you.
Inman Avatar
December 18, 2016 at 10:04 AM
Lovely Andrea.
Delaney Avatar
December 18, 2016 at 8:42 AM
This is so beautiful. I love the spirits of seasons personified, So inspired. Congratulations on your top placement. Goes to my FAV's and a 10. Mugs, SuZ
Lamoureux Avatar
December 16, 2016 at 9:37 PM
I'm not surprised to see this one got the trophy. Congrats Andrea.
Breedt Avatar
December 16, 2016 at 10:40 AM
Ooh nice golden cup. Well done.the nostalgic ending gives this poem its greatness. Congratulations. Jannie
Walker Avatar
December 12, 2016 at 6:31 AM
Masterfully penned.
Vinson Avatar
December 11, 2016 at 4:47 PM
I woke up today thinking about this poem, thinking, "Oh my God is that good."
James Avatar
December 11, 2016 at 11:41 AM
Stunning write...perfect meter and lovely win! congrats ..super 7!
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