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And Believe Me, That Ain'T the Half of It

NOTE TO ME RE THINGS SHE TOOK FROM ME: My compassion-------My time-----My energy The reason I woke up early just to be with her more hours The belief that honesty and purity can exist in the union of two souls but only when both partners sang in pitch-perfect harmony She took my mind The equations in my mind The way she was always on my mind She took my knowledge and used it until she needed a teacher no more She took the soulfulness of every sweet word in a love song and turned them sour She took away the way she’d laugh when I’d do or say something funny She took the joyfulness out of fun and the happiness out of the fact that we’d finally found each other after so long a journey She took away the mustard seed of faith I had that Jesus proclaimed is all we need BUT ALL THESE THINGS ARE GONE FOR GOOD, YESTERDAY’S NEWS ABOUT SINGING THE BLUES SHE TOOK AWAY THE PRIDE I FELT WHEN I TAUGHT HER TO SADDLE A HORSE BUT THE ONE THING SHE GAVE ME AND THEN TOOK AWAY WAS SOMETHING I HADN’T HAD FOR THE PAST ¾ of MY LIFE AND SUDDENLY THAT TREASURE WAS SNATCHED AWAY FROM ME BECAUSE LOVERS CAN SAY A LOT OF THINGS THROUGH LIPS THAT LIE…BUT THE SINGLE MOST TREASURED THING SHE WALKED AWAY WHICH I LOST YEARS AGO WAS THE ABILITY SHE RESURRECTED WHICH GAVE ME THE WAYS AND MEANS TO LAUGH, AND TO LAUGH WITH A HEART LIGHTENED BY THE WAY SHE SWORE WE WOULD BE TOGETHER AS LONG AS TIME AND HEALTH PERMITTED……….. AND LASTLY WHAT SHE TOOK AWAY WAS THAT WHICH I HADN’T EVER FELT BEFORE.BECAUSE SHE ROBBED FROM THIS MAN , WHO, AFTER ALL THOSE YEARS OF INADEQUACY WAS NO LONGER A HINDERANCE BECAUSE SHE WAS HIS MOTIVATION THAT’S WHAT SHE TOOK AWAY FROM ME, A WOMAN WALKED AWAY WITH WONDER That’s what she took from me….© 2011...Phreepoetree

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Date: 4/26/2011 6:59:00 AM
I like your 3-4 th lines, about the harmony. I also think you have a few more good ones, but when it just looks a list, it loses my interest. I kept reading because it was yours, but otherwise, I probably wouldn't have. Maybe you could break it up into more verses? I also like your use of caps for important/powerful feelings, but it loses it's effectiveness when you do it line after line. Save it for the worst things that she did to you/took from you.
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