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In the saloon Tom, Jenna and Tania were talking about Christmas week They wanted to spread some cheer for the good folks of Soup Creek Tom thought Milton would make a good Santa and hoped he'd agree Their meeting was rudely interrupted with sounds of a noisy melee. They went outside and Ranger David was looking very bemused In handcuffs was a scruffy individual who was looking very confused And had mean beady eyes with long hair and a long unkempt beard He was shouting obscenities waving his arms and acting very weird. Just then Sherrif Koplin appeared and asked David what was wrong David replied "I think he's on drugs or he's been in the sun too long I was over by Calypso Canyon on patrol, when I came across him He pulled a gun on me but it jammed, and said his name was Jim" Sheriff Koplin said "he's scaring the kids we'd best get him inside Then I'll telegraph Doctor Keller to come and get him certified I'll put him in the jailhouse for his own safety and for ours too Maybe he needs a spell in an asylum that's probably long overdue. The overland stage arrived next morning, Doctor Keller had arrived It had been a long sleepless night for the Sheriff but he'd survived Because the unruly prisoner had shouted obscenities all night long And for a man to behave in that way something was seriously wrong. Dr Keller had brought an assistant along, who looked like an assassin The doctor spoke briefly with the Sheriff then to the jail they went in The docs assistant had a straightjacket and rope; tools of the trade A crowd had gathered to listen to the racket that was being made. They came out half an hour later with the patient who was now secure But in the scuffle had badly soiled himself and stunk of fresh manure Doctor Keller approached the towns people and he had this to say "This poor wretched man is quite sick and we'll be taking him away" The overland stage then arrived in town and all three climbed inside A journey to Sacramento Asylum was about a five and a half hour ride The driver shouted and cracked his whip and they were soon on their way "Good riddance to you " said Sheriff Koplin "don't come back any day. written on 22nd November 2022

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Date: 11/25/2022 9:50:00 AM
Another chapter unfolds! Excellent job my friend!! I'm quite honored that you have included me in your tale. We'll keep an eye out for all of the rascals that come around to disturb the peace of Soup Creek!!!
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Tom Cunningham
Date: 11/25/2022 10:20:00 AM
Thank you very much Mark, an attack on one is an attack on us all and we're not going to put up with it. Hope you had a lovely thanksgiving. Tom
Date: 11/25/2022 7:44:00 AM
All we need next is Miss Kitty from Gunsmoke to show up! Is there a Soupcreek book yet!! Happy Friday Tom!
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Tom Cunningham
Date: 11/25/2022 7:51:00 AM
Lol I remember Gunsmoke, Along with all the others that have been written I'd say there's enough for a hardback. Hope you had a lovely thanksgiving Mike. Tom
Date: 11/25/2022 6:43:00 AM
I love this Tom….can't believe I missed it! Truly great tale….you have a talent Sir Tom!! Debx
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Tom Cunningham
Date: 11/25/2022 7:11:00 AM
Thank you very much Deb, I'm happy that you enjoyed it A message in there that we won't stand for those intent on rocking the boat. Tom
Date: 11/24/2022 10:17:00 PM
It is an intriguing story ! No one has any right to spoil the peace and tranquillity of a creek with smooth flowing waters. Throwing pebbles into it will cause ripples ! Glad that there is a dedicated team to take care of things headed by Mayor Tom.
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Tom Cunningham
Date: 11/24/2022 11:26:00 PM
Thank you very much Valsa, there are a few unsavoury characters on here and we're not going to put up with it. Its a site where we can read others, submit poems of our own and just enjoy it. Tom
Date: 11/24/2022 11:01:00 AM
I can smell the smoke'n gun from here keep'n down, them they'r clowns. What an open bar?? Count me in! Wow I can't believe how some of these clown's take advantage of freedom of speech. Freedom of speech was meant for protest, grievance, etc. No enabling the ones who use freedom of speech to insult and denigrate! Keep it up Mayor Tom
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Tom Cunningham
Date: 11/24/2022 6:39:00 PM
Thank you very much Anaya, those kind of people are not welcome on here. We'll continue to call them out. Tom
Date: 11/24/2022 4:45:00 AM
Such an amazingly delightful story that was long overdue, dearest, Tom. Next time, please do not take that long! I have enjoyed every line of it. Be blessed!
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Tom Cunningham
Date: 11/24/2022 6:02:00 AM
Thank you very much Demetrios, inspired by a lowlife on here who made light of the 911 victims, his kind are not welcome on here. Tom
Date: 11/24/2022 2:16:00 AM
Another great tale from Soup Creek’s founding member. Whoever ‘Jim’ is I hope he finds an electric chair soon. Of course it would have to be powered by lightning, so he might come back as Frankenstein’s monster… but then, would anyone notice the difference. Terry
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Jenna Logan
Date: 11/24/2022 6:08:00 AM
He's blocked me, too, and who knows or cares who else. He should've been tarred and feathered then left to the vultures.
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Tom Cunningham
Date: 11/24/2022 2:57:00 AM
Thank you very much Terry, according to David he's removed his comments and blocked further comments on his garbage. Even threw his toys out of the pram because he didn't place on contests and had a dig at sponsors running the contests. Don't need creeps like that on here. Tom
Date: 11/23/2022 12:13:00 PM
- Ha, ha, ha ... I thought it was Santa who had too much to drink ... and forgot to take his Christmas bath :) - An enchanting story .. you always impress with your stories, Tom :) - hugs
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Tom Cunningham
Date: 11/23/2022 12:58:00 PM
Thank you very much Anne, glad you enjoyed the humour. Tom
Date: 11/23/2022 5:39:00 AM
Kudos to you Tom and your fellow guardians of Soup Creek. A fun read.
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Tom Cunningham
Date: 11/23/2022 5:53:00 AM
Thank you very much Vijay, aimed at an individual who made remarks about those who perished on 9/11. Those kind are not welcome on here Tom
Date: 11/22/2022 11:12:00 PM
Great narrative. Maybe not the end though.
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Tom Cunningham
Date: 11/23/2022 12:02:00 AM
Thank you very much Victor, there's always one to cause trouble in Soup Creek, making light of 911 victims is a new low. He can't be right in the head. Tom
Date: 11/22/2022 4:07:00 PM
Tom, well done, a great Soup creek edition, thank you for including me! The mayor and the sheriff certainly have their hands full at times in the Creek!
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Tom Cunningham
Date: 11/23/2022 12:00:00 AM
Thank you very much Tania, never a dull moment in Soup Creek that's for sure, hopefully we can reschedule our meeting in the saloon lol. Happy Thanksgiving Tom
Date: 11/22/2022 3:38:00 PM
Although I'm in the dark as to who the villain is, Tom your descriptive narrative is right up there with my favorite old western TV shows, Gunsmoke, Rawhide, oh and Monty Python. You missed your calling as a television writer. Buy you a shot of red eye at Jenna's saloon! Robert
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Tom Cunningham
Date: 11/22/2022 11:59:00 PM
Lol thank you very much Robert, cheers, The individual made light of the victims of 911 and has insulted many poets on here. I'll continue to call out losers like that. Tom
Date: 11/22/2022 1:03:00 PM
you sure know how to spin a yarn, tom! this one is terrific and i enjoyed every verse...
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Tom Cunningham
Date: 11/22/2022 2:17:00 PM
Thank you very much Ilene, I'm happy you enjoyed another day in Soup Creek town. Tom
Date: 11/22/2022 11:38:00 AM
Hello Tom, oh I feek=l sorry for the one that was beside him in the coach. Because he smelled so bad. I hope this person will get well very soon. Have a nice day at the Soup Creek today. Darlene
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Darlene De Beaulieu
Date: 11/23/2022 12:19:00 PM
Hello Tom, yes that is right. Enjoy your day my friend.
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Tom Cunningham
Date: 11/22/2022 12:02:00 PM
Thank you very much Darlene, nothing a good soak in the bath won't sort out. Hope you're keeping well. Tom
Date: 11/22/2022 11:26:00 AM
The smell was terrible Tom, he’d been eating chicken beaks, and hog hooves for days out by Calypso Canyon, this is brilliant Tom, yeah he likes to scare the kids, but is terrified of adults, we’ve dealt with many of these cowards before, I agree with Milton the time for forbearance is well and truly over, even the Feds are watching him now, cheers David
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Date: 11/22/2022 11:30:00 AM
Lol thanks David, maybe with hindsight you could have put a slug between his eyes and left him for the vultures. Last I heard Sheriff Koplin was fumigating the jail lol. Pity the poor low life that has to spend a night there. Tom
Date: 11/22/2022 11:26:00 AM
Mayor Tom, Let's hold a Thanksgiving celebration at the saloon as a potluck feast. The girls and I can roast a few turkeys if any of your cowboys want to hunt a few. Drinks will be on the house, and we'll give thanks that our town is safe. Not sure about inviting Nitrocat and granny because it's impossible to make ice cream (whatever that is) when we don't have the capability to freeze anything... rolling my eyes. Souperman has left, saying the Creek is too uncivilized for him.
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Jenna Logan
Date: 11/22/2022 1:01:00 PM
Great mandates!
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Tom Cunningham
Date: 11/22/2022 12:17:00 PM
That's a brilliant idea Jenna, im sure we can hunt a few turkeys but anyone joining the hunt will not be allowed to bring back any waifs and strays. Lol. A free bar will certainly draw the crowds. All guns to be checked in with the Sheriffs office, no exceptions.
Date: 11/22/2022 10:57:00 AM
Tom, you are to be congratulated for handling "Jim" with much patience and fortitude. I suspect others might like to have seen him shot. We've certainly had more than enough of his arrogant crudeness, rudeness, and pseudo-pedantic blather here in Soup Creek. Excellent writing, my friend. You certainly know how to spin a yarn.
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L MILTON HANKINS
Date: 11/22/2022 1:38:00 PM
Bring on the red suit, Tom. I suppose I could dye my goatee white! I already have the white hair!
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Tom Cunningham
Date: 11/22/2022 11:26:00 AM
Thank you very much Milton, if anyone comes on here spewing their venom then they can expect a poetic response. Tom PS, are you up for being Santa? Lol
Date: 11/22/2022 10:49:00 AM
In Honolulu, our streets are crowded with people like this, shouting obscenities all night, soiling themselves and not caring, etc. The police are not interested in putting such filthy creatures in their car. Aloha!
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Rico Leffanta
Date: 11/24/2022 11:04:00 AM
Taxpayers spend millions transporting them to the ER, an "hidden" expense . . . .Aloha!
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Tom Cunningham
Date: 11/22/2022 11:24:00 AM
Thank you Rico, wow that's surprised me, didn't think Hawaii had such a problem. If they head this way they'll be shown the door. Tom
Date: 11/22/2022 10:40:00 AM
Nobody tells a tale like you do, Mayor Tom. That weird guy had a look about him that made me think he was either a psycho or wanted to be a big STAR, drawing attention to himself, acting like some kind of sun god. That was very disrespectful, and we gave him no reason to act like such a crazy man. Sheriff Kopling locked him up alright, but maybe he should've thrown away the KEY. I SURE do like the new sign on my saloon. Thanks for the free advertising, Mayor!
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Tom Cunningham
Date: 11/22/2022 11:12:00 AM
Thank you very much Jenna, if anyone thinks they can ride into town and stir up the pot well they can think again, the good citizens of Soup Creek are not going to stand for it. Hope I haven't broken any advertising rules re the saloon lol. Hopefully me you and Tania can finish our meeting and organise the mother of all celebrations for Soup Creek. Tom