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On a beautiful picnic was I with a wonderful gorgeous new guy till breaking the mood and spoiling our food came a ravenous huge ugly fly. We got up and walked to the pier Then what of all things did appear round our heads as we kissed? That dang fly that sure missed our presence and did persevere! It kept buzzing and buzzing. Oh my! Just couldn’t stand by and be shy. So I thrust out my hand with a slam that was grand. Squashed fly tossed to river – BYE BYE. Written Feb. 26, 2017 for Shadow Hamilton's The Unwanted Guest Poetry Contest

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Debbie Duncan

Date: 4/21/2017 4:17:00 PM

Good take on flies, I don't like them, not at all :) Have you heard anything else on Don?

Sara Chansarkar

Date: 3/8/2017 8:37:00 AM

Funny, Andrea!Congrats on the placement!

Darren White

Date: 3/6/2017 1:21:00 AM

Coming back to you with Congratulations :)

Jack Horne

Date: 3/5/2017 5:32:00 PM

LOL, had a good chuckle at this one

Jan Allison

Date: 3/5/2017 12:02:00 PM

Dropping back with my congrats Andrea:-) hugs Jan xx

Running Wolves

Date: 3/5/2017 11:41:00 AM

Ouch bet that's one unwanted guest that won't be back. Nicely done

Eve Roper

Date: 3/5/2017 10:28:00 AM

Back to congratulate you on your win Hugs

Joanna Daniel

Date: 3/5/2017 7:39:00 AM

Lovely set of limericks, Andrea:) the fly got what it deserved:) Congratulations on your win:) my poem still lies unfinished and the contest is over:( anyway, I'm not good at humour, still I hope to finish mine:)

Joseph May

Date: 3/5/2017 7:36:00 AM

Congrats on your win Andrea

John Michaels

Date: 3/5/2017 5:25:00 AM

Excellent! This really made me chuckle. Is there no form that you cannot conquer!? :) Best of luck with the contest!

Joseph May

Date: 2/28/2017 7:57:00 PM

A grand slam!...that pesky fly...Nicely done

Kash Poet

Date: 2/28/2017 10:21:00 AM

Very nice Limerick!Best wishes.

Daver Austin

Date: 2/28/2017 9:24:00 AM

Good shot. Isn't it wonderful - we will eat food on picnics, touched by all sorts of insects that we wouldn't eat at home. Love, daver

Chris Green

Date: 2/27/2017 3:24:00 PM

That was cute, so it seems you were a member of SWAT. :) Funny Andrea.

Ralph Sergi

Date: 2/27/2017 8:53:00 AM

Great Limerick, Andrea Best of luck in the contest!

Daver Austin

Date: 2/27/2017 8:11:00 AM

OH! Poor fly. Hi, Andrea. My computer has been on the fritz. Don't know how I got on the internet today, so tell everyone I'll keep trying. Love, daver

Emile Pinet

Date: 2/27/2017 7:35:00 AM

This tongue in cheek complaint of a pesky fly gone amuck is energetic, bubbly and humorous with just the right amount of realism to make it interesting. Good work!

Darren White

Date: 2/27/2017 4:07:00 AM

Squashed fly tossed to river - BYE BYE. That made me laugh so hard :) Good luck in the contest, Andrea!

Jan Allison

Date: 2/27/2017 3:03:00 AM

Great giggle of the morning Andrea:-) good luck in the contest:-) hugs Jan xx

Jennifer Walker

Date: 2/27/2017 2:44:00 AM

Ha. That was grand, made me laugh.