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On a beautiful picnic was I with a wonderful gorgeous new guy till breaking the mood and spoiling our food came a ravenous huge ugly fly. We got up and walked to the pier Then what of all things did appear round our heads as we kissed? That dang fly that sure missed our presence and did persevere! It kept buzzing and buzzing. Oh my! Just couldn’t stand by and be shy. So I thrust out my hand with a slam that was grand. Squashed fly tossed to river – BYE BYE. Written Feb. 26, 2017 for Shadow Hamilton's The Unwanted Guest Poetry Contest

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Date: 4/21/2017 4:17:00 PM
Good take on flies, I don't like them, not at all :) Have you heard anything else on Don?
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Date: 3/8/2017 8:37:00 AM
Funny, Andrea!Congrats on the placement!
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Date: 3/6/2017 1:21:00 AM
Coming back to you with Congratulations :)
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Date: 3/5/2017 5:32:00 PM
LOL, had a good chuckle at this one
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Date: 3/5/2017 12:02:00 PM
Dropping back with my congrats Andrea:-) hugs Jan xx
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Date: 3/5/2017 11:41:00 AM
Ouch bet that's one unwanted guest that won't be back. Nicely done
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Date: 3/5/2017 10:28:00 AM
Back to congratulate you on your win Hugs
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Date: 3/5/2017 9:54:00 AM
Congrats on the win, Andrea. Your poem made me laugh. Next time I'm bothered by a fly, I with think of this.
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Date: 3/5/2017 7:39:00 AM
Lovely set of limericks, Andrea:) the fly got what it deserved:) Congratulations on your win:) my poem still lies unfinished and the contest is over:( anyway, I'm not good at humour, still I hope to finish mine:)
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Date: 3/5/2017 7:36:00 AM
Congrats on your win Andrea
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Date: 3/5/2017 5:25:00 AM
Excellent! This really made me chuckle. Is there no form that you cannot conquer!? :) Best of luck with the contest!
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Date: 2/28/2017 7:57:00 PM
A grand slam!...that pesky fly...Nicely done
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Date: 2/28/2017 10:21:00 AM
Very nice Limerick!Best wishes.
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Date: 2/28/2017 9:24:00 AM
Good shot. Isn't it wonderful - we will eat food on picnics, touched by all sorts of insects that we wouldn't eat at home. Love, daver
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Date: 2/27/2017 3:24:00 PM
That was cute, so it seems you were a member of SWAT. :) Funny Andrea.
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Date: 2/27/2017 8:53:00 AM
Great Limerick, Andrea Best of luck in the contest!
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Date: 2/27/2017 8:11:00 AM
OH! Poor fly. Hi, Andrea. My computer has been on the fritz. Don't know how I got on the internet today, so tell everyone I'll keep trying. Love, daver
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Date: 2/27/2017 7:35:00 AM
This tongue in cheek complaint of a pesky fly gone amuck is energetic, bubbly and humorous with just the right amount of realism to make it interesting. Good work!
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Date: 2/27/2017 4:07:00 AM
Squashed fly tossed to river - BYE BYE. That made me laugh so hard :) Good luck in the contest, Andrea!
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Date: 2/27/2017 3:03:00 AM
Great giggle of the morning Andrea:-) good luck in the contest:-) hugs Jan xx
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Date: 2/27/2017 2:44:00 AM
Ha. That was grand, made me laugh.
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Date: 2/26/2017 11:19:00 PM
Lol...way to Go, Andrea. You slayed it! This is a clever limerick for the contest...and for me, a winner. Hugs, Rhonda
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Date: 2/26/2017 10:26:00 PM
Andrea, great write. .nothing worse than those pesky flies!
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Date: 2/26/2017 10:11:00 PM
Hahaha... love this a winner already Hugs
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Date: 2/26/2017 9:56:00 PM
Yay Andrea!! Have to laugh - those darn things sure are bothersome.
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