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An Open Poem Sans Punctuation

somewhere
red poppies
                   grow
fertilised
              by blood
              sun
and
       winter snow
lost 
      freedoms
                      seed
on widow's
                   weeds
       sadness flows
to that
    no-mans land
    where
    there
           are
                but crows

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Carole Duet

Date: 7/2/2017 11:00:00 PM

Back again! Alright...every time I read this poem another layer of understanding is added to my elemental brain. And now I simply love it. It is really beautiful and is a new FAV for me too. I can see this field of poppies maybe with a delapidated cannon and a cross on a grave with the widow standing there as the crows fly over the field. I'm inspired. I think I'm going to do another painting!!

Brian Strand
Date: 7/2/2017 11:08:00 PM

Thanks Carol for all your comments on this poem.

Carole Duet

Date: 7/2/2017 10:53:00 PM

Okay...upon reading it again (and again) I think the "lost freedoms seed" must be referring to the death of a soldier on a battlefield where the poppies now grow. Did I get it? lol This is a deeply sad poem, Brian, but beautiful "sans punctuation". :) Thanks for referring me to this example.

Brian Strand
Date: 7/2/2017 11:20:00 PM

Yes you did Carol

Carole Duet

Date: 7/2/2017 10:46:00 PM

I understand this poem "sans punctuation", Brian, except for the lines, "lost freedoms seed". I just don't get how that phrase fits into the poem. Sorry. Otherwise, I like the poem, especially the way you broke up the lines which did make it easier to read. However, if you had written it in a regular line form I wonder if it would have been as easy to read. Thanks for your interest and comment on my blog.

Brian Strand
Date: 7/2/2017 11:24:00 PM

Carol, the format has to be this way,if punctuation is left out.As you say it would not make sense in a conventional poetic line format.Marianne Moore was my inspiration for this style of open poetry.

Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart

Date: 7/2/2017 10:11:00 PM

Awesome piece Brian. Beautifully done, a lover of less is more word smithery, to mind Flanders Fields and the Unknown Soldiers with your apt title, brilliant, this is going in my faves drawer...

Brian Strand
Date: 7/2/2017 11:08:00 PM

Thanks Maureen