An Innocent Childhood Memory

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outskirts of dark village, on an old Neem tree next to our small remote house, ghost rampage! I lived in fear, dreaded she ghost with yellow blouse, Stay near! Small kid, Thought of ghost spouse, hid! Outskirts of dark village dreaded she ghost with yellow blouse hid! (6,12,3, Stanza 2: 4,8,2, Stanza 3: 2,4,1, Stanza 4: 6,8,1) Same poem with 10 syllables ( just to compare) In dark outskirts of our remote village, on an old Neem tree next to our small house, they said a bad she ghost was on rampage! At age of seven I was seized with fear, I dreaded the she ghost with yellow blouse, When dark outside I made sure mum was near! my cousins would scare me with more tales, Of that one eyed man she was the dead spouse, She hunted little boys and young males! In dark outskirts of our remote village, I dreaded the she ghost with yellow blouse, She hunted little boys and young males! 1st placement Written 03/08/2020 ‘Let’s Minichu on an innocent memory’ Contest Sponsor Mohan Chutani

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Kim Rodrigues

Date: 8/31/2020 9:46:00 AM

Yes, those tales can quake little stomachs, raise goosebumps. Congratulations, Krish!

Krish Radhakrishna
Date: 8/31/2020 10:04:00 AM

Thanks Kim, more truth than imagination in my write!

Mohan Chutani

Date: 8/31/2020 9:10:00 AM

Krish, innocent memories do include such incidents of ghosts etc. which we fear at childhood but normally get over them when we grow. I thought it would be weeping willows or peepal trees for such experience instead of a neem tree unless it is a real life narration. Also, you were able to change your initial muse to fit this format. Congrats for a top win. Mohan

Krish Radhakrishna
Date: 8/31/2020 10:03:00 AM

Thanks Mohan and congratulations on this new format you have created! Neem trees in South India are feared as frequent Haunts for ghosts! We had a huge one in our backyard in Chennai! Yes, I was scared as hell!!!!

Ravindra K Kapoor

Date: 8/6/2020 11:02:00 AM

Nicely crafted ghost story Krish. I will revisit your page soon. My good wishes for your contest.....With best wishes...Ravindra

Krish Radhakrishna
Date: 8/6/2020 12:45:00 PM

Thanks Ravindran. Yes, please and would love your feed back! Kind regards

Regina Mcintosh

Date: 8/6/2020 8:22:00 AM

A inspiration that thrills and entices me to write. God bless you my dear friend with all the poetry you crave to give. Love and prayers, Gina

Krish Radhakrishna
Date: 8/6/2020 9:54:00 AM

Thanks Gina! The syllable limit is a bit difficult but I have tried! Look forward to reading your entry! God bless you for your kindness!

Sigrid Ermine

Date: 8/3/2020 4:26:00 PM

Hi Krish. Smiles from Aus. Yellow blouses will take on an eerie hue here on in! - You gotta love kids, their crazy imaginings, propensity to make the littler ones suffer through their susceptible mind scope! Hey, I had the 'same' idea, I wrote the Innocent Memory Minichu. Then realised after that Mohan's requirements are a lot stricter! The syllable limits crunch a scenario depiction to basically non existsnt. Man, try it. I love your ghost story, it's a bonus to remember!

Sigrid Ermine
Date: 8/4/2020 1:41:00 AM

Impressive! You made it fit superbly. It rings really true, leaves an impact in new form. Congrats. (I found the compact one torture) - yours is ace!!

Krish Radhakrishna
Date: 8/3/2020 10:45:00 PM

Thanks Sigrid, my mate! Love your hint and thanks for the kind words! I missed the syllable crunch. I shall reformat to MOHAN’s requirements! Much appreciated!! Ta!!