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An Innocent Childhood Memory

When I was  ten years old
At that age I was considered to be brave boy;
I was told.

I loved hiking
Friends had nicknamed me, with great joy--
'Viking'

Made me
Happy, yet coy
Gee!

When I was  ten years old
Friends had nicknamed me, with great joy--
Gee!

24.7.2020
Note:
1. This is a New form of Rhyme named MlNICHU (proposed by me)
2. Total12 lines (4 stanzas of 3 lines each)
3. Rhyme scheme: Aba, cBc, dbD, ABD. 
4. 4th stanza consists of repeat of 1st line of  stanza1, 2nd line of stanza 2, and 3rd line of stanza 3.
Poem should stick to a chosen theme through all stanzas. A twist can be introduced in third stanza, if required by the theme, to make it more interesting.
5. Syllable count : 
Stanza 1: 6,12,3 (3 times 2,4,1)
Stanza 2: 4,8,2 ( 2 times 2,4,1)
Stanza 3: 2,4,1
Stanza 4: 6,8,1.

6. Will welcome feedback, if any.

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Rama Balasubramanian

Date: 8/21/2020 3:53:00 AM

Great write. Was initially not planning to participate, seemed tough. But your examples make it seems easy. Will surely try and post if I get it right. Thanks for all the examples. Regards Rama

Mohan Chutani
Date: 8/21/2020 4:08:00 AM

Rama, thanx for liking my poem. This form though sounds tough but is easy. Only difficulty one can face is getting a one syllable last line but one can work backwards too. Have a go at it. Am sure, with your calibre, you will easily get it. Best. Mohan

Paghunda Zahid

Date: 8/8/2020 4:47:00 PM

New poetry form...intersting

Mohan Chutani
Date: 8/8/2020 6:41:00 PM

Paghunda, thanx. How about trying one for the contest. Best. Mohan

Franci Hoffman

Date: 8/1/2020 2:35:00 PM

A new poetry form, how exciting, Mohan! Thank you for sharing.

Mohan Chutani
Date: 8/8/2020 6:41:00 PM

Franci, thanx. How about trying one for the contest. Best. Mohan

V. Deepa

Date: 7/31/2020 9:45:00 AM

Hello Mohan Sir, Bravo!! You've done a great invention:-D Congratulations on your attempt.It's truly interesting. I will definitely give it a try sir:-) Thanks for guiding us through your example. Keep inspiring with your creativity.:-) Take care.Warmest regards sent to you:-)

Mohan Chutani
Date: 7/31/2020 5:44:00 PM

Thanx Deepa for your warm words. My best wishes to you for writing for this contest as well as others. Mohan

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 7/29/2020 1:17:00 PM

It's good I came to see your example, Mohan. I don't recall if the syllable count had been mentioned at your contest page. So is the syllable count set in stone as a rule of the form as well? Sounds very interesting and i hope to try it. Keep on being creative and inventing forms!

Mohan Chutani
Date: 7/29/2020 5:19:00 PM

It is mentioned there as well Andrea, if you read a bit more carefully. And thanx for your kind visit. Best and enjoy writing it. Mohan

Constance La France

Date: 7/28/2020 10:34:00 AM

Mohan, interesting invented form, I will give it a whirl, hope I get it right _Constance

Mohan Chutani
Date: 7/29/2020 5:17:00 PM

Thanks. Hope you enjoy it. Best. Mohan

Beata Agustin

Date: 7/27/2020 8:22:00 PM

Thanks for this... exemplifying what your contest requires, and clearly expressing what your proposed "MINICHU" is. Thanks likewise for my placement in your recently-judged contest. God bless you.

Mohan Chutani
Date: 7/28/2020 3:48:00 AM

Thanks Beata. Best wishes for Minichu contest. Mohan