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I need, once more, an hour of rain
Cleansing away the residue of living
Until only the freshest waters remain
This hour, to myself, I am giving

Cleansing away the residue of living
I drench the roots of my spiritual tree
This hour, to myself, I am giving
To clear the kismet forest of debris

I drench the roots of my spiritual tree
Drinking full the aquatic, purified air
To clear the kismet forest of debris
I undress the stress, to discard elsewhere

Drinking full the aquatic, purified air
To replenish serene crystal streams, anew
I undress the stress, to discard elsewhere
Sourcing in the vaporous prisms of blue

To replenish serene crystal streams, anew
Until only the freshest waters remain
Sourcing in the vaporous prisms of blue
I need, once more, an hour of rain.

10/22/18

Submitted to 'Strength through Adversity' contest
Sponsor: Gregory R. Barden

Placed 7th

I was just learning how to write a Pantoum poem, so this was a tricky new form for me-

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Date: 4/6/2019 8:34:00 AM
An inspiring Pantoum, Michelle. I enjoyed the meditative and spiritual flow which was expressed so lovingly and beautifully. Congratulations on your excellent win. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan
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Michelle Faulkner
Date: 4/13/2019 5:31:00 PM
So flattered by your kind words, thank you, Susan!
Date: 4/3/2019 9:54:00 PM
Beautiful imagery and well written poem, Michelle, congratulations on your win. Hugs Eve ~`*
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Michelle Faulkner
Date: 4/13/2019 5:31:00 PM
Much appreciate your comment, thank you, Eve-
Date: 11/17/2018 6:49:00 AM
Excellent Pantoum, Michelle - I know how tricky these can be, but you've done a fantastic job. Kind regards, John.
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Michelle Faulkner
Date: 11/18/2018 1:11:00 AM
Thank you, John, I truly appreciate your kind comment-
Date: 11/7/2018 4:09:00 PM
Meditative and flowing. A wonderful pantoum!
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Michelle Faulkner
Date: 11/18/2018 1:10:00 AM
Thanks for your meditative words, Mark!
Date: 10/22/2018 9:26:00 PM
Wow! You really 'plugged in' on this one, Michelle. Such a great choice of format (pantoum) for the Zen contest. A sure winner, and a FAVe for me. Excellent! ~ Gershon
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Michelle Faulkner
Date: 10/22/2018 11:05:00 PM
Thank you for all your kind support and encouragement, GW!
Date: 10/22/2018 7:26:00 PM
This is splendid! (...and I bow to your pantoum prowess- well done!!)
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Michelle Faulkner
Date: 10/22/2018 11:02:00 PM
So appreciate your comment, Rhona!
Date: 10/22/2018 4:07:00 PM
Wow! The pantoum form is perfect for this poem! The word choice is fabulous throughout (must look up “kismet” though and make it Today’s New Word!) Love this!
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Michelle Faulkner
Date: 10/22/2018 11:02:00 PM
Thanks, Nina - actually had some help from the thesaurus for this one!
Date: 10/22/2018 3:23:00 PM
Purity...The cleansing by water...A nice write...refreshing...All the best Michelle
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Michelle Faulkner
Date: 10/22/2018 10:59:00 PM
So grateful for your kind visit and comment, Arturo-
Date: 10/22/2018 2:59:00 PM
A lovely pantoum! With your rhythmic verses we douse ourselves in thelovely imagery! Nice one, Michelle! Refreshing!
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Michelle Faulkner
Date: 10/22/2018 10:58:00 PM
So happy you like it, Kim!
Date: 10/22/2018 2:53:00 PM
A great Pantoum! I am refreshed now. Well done :)
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Michelle Faulkner
Date: 10/22/2018 10:57:00 PM
Glad I could help!
Date: 10/22/2018 2:34:00 PM
A beautiful pen; should do well in the contest; good luck.
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Michelle Faulkner
Date: 10/22/2018 10:57:00 PM
Thanks for your support, M.L!
Date: 10/22/2018 2:24:00 PM
This is amazing Michelle and a fine example of a not so easy form. "I drench the roots of my spiritual tree" and "Sourcing in the vaporous prisms of blue" are my favorite, but I like it all! Well done!................pat
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Michelle Faulkner
Date: 10/22/2018 2:27:00 PM
Thank you Pat - I find, with pantoums, I actually start with the last stanza and work up from there, kind of 'writing in reverse' if you will-