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An Hour of Rain

I need, once more, an hour of rain
Cleansing away the residue of living
Until only the freshest waters remain
This hour, to myself, I am giving

Cleansing away the residue of living
I drench the roots of my spiritual tree
This hour, to myself, I am giving
To clear the kismet forest of debris

I drench the roots of my spiritual tree
Drinking full the aquatic, purified air
To clear the kismet forest of debris
I undress the stress, to discard elsewhere

Drinking full the aquatic, purified air
To replenish serene crystal streams, anew
I undress the stress, to discard elsewhere
Sourcing in the vaporous prisms of blue

To replenish serene crystal streams, anew
Until only the freshest waters remain
Sourcing in the vaporous prisms of blue
I need, once more, an hour of rain.

10/22/18

Submitted to 'Strength through Adversity' contest
Sponsor: Gregory R. Barden

Placed 7th

I was just learning how to write a Pantoum poem, so this was a tricky new form for me-
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Ashley Avatar
April 6, 2019 at 8:34 AM
An inspiring Pantoum, Michelle. I enjoyed the meditative and spiritual flow which was expressed so lovingly and beautifully. Congratulations on your excellent win. Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan
Faulkner Avatar
April 13, 2019 at 5:31 PM
So flattered by your kind words, thank you, Susan!
Roper Avatar
April 3, 2019 at 9:54 PM
Beautiful imagery and well written poem, Michelle, congratulations on your win. Hugs Eve ~`*
Faulkner Avatar
April 13, 2019 at 5:31 PM
Much appreciate your comment, thank you, Eve-
Michaels Avatar
November 17, 2018 at 6:49 AM
Excellent Pantoum, Michelle - I know how tricky these can be, but you've done a fantastic job. Kind regards, John.
Faulkner Avatar
November 18, 2018 at 1:11 AM
Thank you, John, I truly appreciate your kind comment-
Elam Avatar
November 7, 2018 at 4:09 PM
Meditative and flowing. A wonderful pantoum!
Faulkner Avatar
November 18, 2018 at 1:10 AM
Thanks for your meditative words, Mark!
Wolf Avatar
October 22, 2018 at 9:26 PM
Wow! You really 'plugged in' on this one, Michelle. Such a great choice of format (pantoum) for the Zen contest. A sure winner, and a FAVe for me. Excellent! ~ Gershon
Faulkner Avatar
October 22, 2018 at 11:05 PM
Thank you for all your kind support and encouragement, GW!
Mcferran Avatar
October 22, 2018 at 7:26 PM
This is splendid! (...and I bow to your pantoum prowess- well done!!)
Faulkner Avatar
October 22, 2018 at 11:02 PM
So appreciate your comment, Rhona!
Michael Avatar
October 22, 2018 at 3:23 PM
Purity...The cleansing by water...A nice write...refreshing...All the best Michelle
Faulkner Avatar
October 22, 2018 at 10:59 PM
So grateful for your kind visit and comment, Arturo-
Rodrigues Avatar
October 22, 2018 at 2:59 PM
A lovely pantoum! With your rhythmic verses we douse ourselves in thelovely imagery! Nice one, Michelle! Refreshing!
Faulkner Avatar
October 22, 2018 at 10:58 PM
So happy you like it, Kim!
Sands Avatar
October 22, 2018 at 2:53 PM
A great Pantoum! I am refreshed now. Well done :)
Faulkner Avatar
October 22, 2018 at 10:57 PM
Glad I could help!
Kiser Avatar
October 22, 2018 at 2:34 PM
A beautiful pen; should do well in the contest; good luck.
Faulkner Avatar
October 22, 2018 at 10:57 PM
Thanks for your support, M.L!
Adams Avatar
October 22, 2018 at 2:24 PM
This is amazing Michelle and a fine example of a not so easy form. "I drench the roots of my spiritual tree" and "Sourcing in the vaporous prisms of blue" are my favorite, but I like it all! Well done!................pat
Faulkner Avatar
October 22, 2018 at 2:27 PM
Thank you Pat - I find, with pantoums, I actually start with the last stanza and work up from there, kind of 'writing in reverse' if you will-
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