An Empty Hearth is Greater Than

Soot seeking old embers; long extinguished— flames

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Hilda Greenhough

Date: 6/19/2025 8:17:00 PM

Remarkable. I never thought of hearth this way. Congratulations on a great lanterne.

Jaymee Thomas
Date: 6/20/2025 4:18:00 AM

Thanks, Hilda. I used a contest prompt (though missed the cutoff to submit lol). I've been working on enjambment and extended metaphors, and I think this one was successful in that regard. I like to go on and on (often too long) so the syllable restriction of a lanterne was a fun parameter to toss in the mix as I work to be more succinct. Thanks again for commenting and taking notice of it. It made my day.

Tom Woody

Date: 6/19/2025 2:24:00 PM

I'm thinking Ms Soot should look for a new flame, new start. Old flames almost always have moved on to different fireplaces. Fosho

Jaymee Thomas
Date: 6/20/2025 4:20:00 AM

haha - I was working to extend the title and make the most of the syllable allotment. Ashes and old flames is a little obvious of a take, but it worked so I went with it xD I always appreciate you taking the time to comment, Tom. You're an excellent model for engagement.